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Ali, I loved it all. I'm sorry I missed so much of your story. I have been so busy with school work and then volleyball. I mean, I almost missed the ending. It is a very well written story, and you really can see the improvements you have made over time. Its great. I'm glad I will see the ending though, and as for what type of ending, I will be perfectly honest to say that I would like the good ending, but can't we have both? Lol, that would solve all of it. Anyways, it is a good story, well done. Much luvs papi, Chao! ~Lottie |
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Good you say, and both? I'll probably paste the evil one on the side, maybe. Well, thats 3 for goodl. *laughs at the fact that people aren't evil* Thankies Lottie! |
Lets see how y'ell react to this. :mwaha: :mwaha: :mwaha: The howling of Fang was the first sound to come out, and then the sound of Hagrid calming down his hound came. “Calm down, yer mutt. Step back, dunno who it might be.” The doors bolts were pulled back, then the large man appeared in the door. “Hullo Harry, Ron, ‘ermione, Neville, Luna.” He said letting them into his small hut. With everyone in, there was almost no room to move. “I’ll get some tea ready,” Hermione said going towards the side where the water and kettle was. A minute later, they all were drinking tea, with the exception of Luna who said that tea made mirdo grow quicker. What mirdo’s were, no one asked. But instead, she drank something else which Hagrid had. They all talked, until leaving was mentioned. Hagrid stayed quiet for a second, and Harry drank some tea. “Well, yer not leavin’ me, any of yer, I won’t let yeh.” Hagrid said hiding his emotions behind his big woolly beard. “No, we wont,” Harry said. “I want you to come to Grimmauld Place, when you get some time.” “I’d love to,” Hagrid beamed. “I really would.” He placed his mug down gently. “I’m going to be going there later on today anyway, when you arrive at Kings Cross.” He looked at a watch which was stretching on his wrist. “Oh boy, yer late. Go for the train now, else y’ell miss it.” They ran back to the castle to get their final things, where they split with Luna and Neville. Ten minutes later Harry, Ron, Ginny and Hermione walked out of the grounds for the last time, along with a couple more students. It was over; life was going to be normal again. Or that’s what they thought. Walking through Hogsmeade brought back some memories, of the time when he had a thing with Cho Chang. He didn’t even know where she was now; all he knew was that he had Ginny, Ron and Hermione. As they got nearer to the station, they saw the crowd of students there; a few were even doing some last minute shopping. He slowly arrived at the station, and checked his pockets making sure that his wand was there. He tried to find a bit of muggle money, but instead felt something even smaller. As he reached further into his pocket he felt a small ball in the bottom. He pulled it out, it was a crumpled up paper note. He didn’t know who had put it there, but he recognised it. It was the note he saw from the department of mysteries. Upon it were three small paragraphs, two written in blue, and one written in green. They were in different handwritings and were probably passed on, as a child would pass notes in class. Work’s being different again. Tried getting in touch with Remus, couldn’t find him, must be the time of the month. What did you say about your nephew at home? Why don’t you check, the moon’s only outside. My nephew, yes Dudley. It seems that he’s got some magical blood, but Dursley won’t have any of it. Says that we’re trying to split up their “normal” family. Waste of the blood if you ask me. Well, that’s a shocker. A little play mate for Harry, that’s if Dudley begins with the magical world. :mwaha: :mwaha: :mwaha: T Minus 1 |
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Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo :cry: I'm gonna miss this fic and I have to wait for the sequel *sniffles* at least you'll write again Ali *sniffles* |
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huh whats happening next what did you do lol post soon! Em |
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Ahh! That's such a surprise! I don't want to imagine Dudley with a wand...O_O |
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The funny thing is, this ending is considered a happy one. Too bad I think happy= evil Enjoy Taking a deep breath Harry read the note for the second time round. What it said was pretty clear, and looked like it was written by his parents. Dudley, he was a wizard? Keeping the news to himself for now, he boarded the Hogwarts express. Finding a compartment with his friends they sat down and waited for the train to leave. They waved at Hagrid, who was outside of the train, tears rolling from his face. But this would not be the last time Hagrid would see them, he’d be arriving at the platform to accompany Harry to his new house. The train began to get louder, and smoke began to emerge from the top, the Hogwarts Express was ready to go. Harry looked at the castle for one last time as it drifted away and was replaced by countryside. They ordered many different foods when the lunch lady came, making sure to collect the chocolate frog cards. Harry unwrapped one, and felt his heart drop. He had just got a card with Lord Voldemort. He was sure this wasn’t supposed to happen, Voldemort wasn’t a good wizard. Something was wrong. Slowly turning the card round to show Hermione and Ron, they both gasped. Hermione even let out a little scream as she saw the evil Lord Voldemort After a few minutes the Hogwarts express was reaching the city-like features of London, as large buildings could be seen as a blur. Harry pocketed the card, and then pulled out the note. He contemplated showing them the note, but he decided against it. He would show them when the time was right. People began to stand up, the train began to slow down, and the engines sounded like they were getting louder. They had arrived at Kings Cross. Making sure that everything was ready and packed up, Harry stood up and wiped his forehead. Boarding off the train, Harry looked around to see if Sirius was there. And in the corner, sat on the wall eating an ice cream, Sirius black was sat with his school friend Remus Lupin. Nymphadora Tonks was on patrol in the station just in case any Death Eaters decided to make a mess of things. The trains emptied and Harry and Ron walked towards Sirius, whilst Hermione went to talk to her parents. They joined a minute later, and as Harry had asked, were ready to go to Grimmauld Place. Sirius told them that Mrs Weasley was waiting for them there, and it all seemed so perfect. Just as they began to walk away, Sirius stopped and his eyes widened as he looked at Harry’s forehead. He placed his finger on it and got it covered in blood. “Harry, it’s bleeding.” He said worriedly, calling Remus over. “What’s bleeding?” Harry said looking more scared than ever. If it scared Sirius, then it had to be bad. “It’s glowing and bleeding, what’s wrong?” Lupin said running over, wand out. “What’s happened?” Harry said feeling more agitated. Ron and Hermione turned around and looked at their friend, both of them let out a shriek. For something on Harry’s head was glowing a green colour. And around the glow, there was a line of scarlet blood dripping down. “What is it??” Harry said, this time losing his patience. “Tell me.” “It’s bleeding and shining a green colour.” Sirius pointed with a tremble in his voice. “Your scar.” [POOF] [Termination completed. Systems rebooting, report online in E minus three days.] Now I would say the end, but it's not. Well, not properly, still got the epilogue to post. And it looks like it's gunna be the good one, not the evil. |
That was good LOL ZOMG! Now I'm all wondering what's happening ... Okay so I just read that ... ZOMG! Harry's bleeding and Voldemort is *is mauled by the spoiler police* But yeah, that was good Ali ... scary good, but brilliant LOL You're wicked LOL Sirius eating ice cream is toooooooooooooo cute ... seriously, and Remus there ... *sniffles* I wish it could be like that in canon *sniffles* You're bad to tease LOL but that's half the fun. I can't wait for the epilogue. Sorry this is so short but ... there's a thunderstorm and I need to get off the computer ... :mad: and I can't go see DL so I'm angry ... :mad: and today has just been a bad day ... *sighs* tomorrow must be better, please? :cry: |
It's...glowing?? and bleeding?? why?? Did it have something to with the Voldy card???? |
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Thank you Ottery, I'm glad that I got the scary bit in.*kicks spoiler police, calls hitman* I tried, and didn't think I'd pull it off :D Whee. *has a big smile* Quote:
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Yeah, but I don't think it's that serious, the Docs at St.Mungo's said it'd be okay in a few years. |
Oh my goodness! :gasp: You must post more, Ali! :) |
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Anyways, this is what's going to happen. As Happy won Evil I'm going to post the "official" ending here, but am going to post a link to my LJ where I'm going to post the evil ending... |
Hehe, it's time. I think I'll post the link to the alternate first, then I'll post the actual real ending in a few minutes... And it is Here! I shall be posting the true ending in a short while, unless I fall asleep at the computer [it's 1.10am] and then it will be tommorow. |
*waits eagerly* No wait I have to do homework Nooooooooooooooooooooooooo *shakes Ali* Don't fall asleep ... I'll check in laters ... :sleepy: |
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This ain't as strong as my other one, in my opinion, but you guys voted for it. Seven years had passed since Lord Voldemort had fallen. His group, the Death Eaters, had fallen with their master and were rarely seen. Most of them had been rounded up by Auror’s after the Dark Lord was defeated. The world became a safe place again, and Hogwarts was one of the most secure areas ever. The dragons had been removed as there was no need for them to stay. All the security of the castle was in the eyes of a tiny bird. Harry had taken a job in the ministry after finishing Hogwarts. He had stuck with his career and was in training to become an Auror. His friends, Ron and Hermione had joined the ministry as well. Six summers after the death of the Dark Lord, Harry and Ginny had got married. She had taken a job of coaching the women’s quidditch team at Chudley Cannons, supplying Ron with a chain of free Chudley Cannons merchandise and tickets. At the moment, she was taking part in a training session at Hogwarts. At the moment, Harry had volunteered to teach Defence Against Dark Arts at Hogwarts, whilst the current teacher, Severus Snape, had gone to visit his mother. He had been teaching an interesting subject with the 4th year Gryffindors and Slytherins. Unforgivable Curses. As the students were walking out of the class, a pretty woman walked in. She had red hair and freckles and had a wedding ring on her finger. ”Hey Harry, how was the class?” She asked, walking into the room. She threw a boot bag down onto the table and looked at Harry. “Interesting. You wouldn’t believe how many Slytherins wanted to try the unforgivables.” Harry said, looking at her, with a grin on his face. ”How many,” she said as her eyes widened. She had always hoped that the Slytherins would become good, but there would always be one. “None. It’s weird, isn’t it?” He said his grin becoming bigger. She stared at him for a second, smiled and said, “I guess it’s a sign that things are better. What did Snape do when he found out you were covering his class?” ”He’s-.” In the distance, they both heard a loud thud. “What was that?” Harry said looking out of the window. “Maybe Peeves got bored in his old age. We need to bring Fred and Ge-.” She stopped halfway through her sentence as she saw what happened. The grounds near the lake were engulfed in flames. ”Aguamenti,” they both shouted firing a spell from the window of the classroom. “We need to get closer,” Harry said opening the door and running out. He was soon followed by Ginny. Just as they had appeared on the lawns of the castle, Hermione and Ron had appeared. They ran towards the flames and slowly managed to put some of them out, but others still roared. As the fire caught on to the lake, you could see the giant squid move his tentacles frantically, trying to do something. With the combined power of four, they managed to put the fire out. As soon as the fire was put out, a searing paint hit Harry’s forehead, where his scar had previously been. He quickly clapped his hand on his head. “We saw flames, what happened?” Hermione said catching her breath. A bird had been put in place directly above the castle to monitor everything that happened. A live feed of this was sent to the headquarters of the Ministry of Magic in London. Before Harry could answer this, Ginny let out a small scream as she saw something in the sky. A green skull was forming above the forest, with a snake slowly slithering out of the jaw. “What the hell?” Ron said staring at the mark in the sky. He looked disgusted at the image in the air. “This is a really sick joke.” Hermione said trying to work out why someone would do this. Instead of talking, Harry looked at the surroundings. He could see an odd shaped rock, which never used to be there. He crept up to it, an aimed as he destroyed it. Behind it hid a man in dark robes. “Wahey,” Harry said kicking the man down. “Looks like we’ve found the last Death Eater,” Harry shouted to his friends. “You’ll be sorry Potter, the dark lord shall return, and he shall dominate the world.” “Course he will,” Ron said. “And I’m a millionaire.” Ron sent another stunner at the man, sending him unconscious. “Well, that’s that.” Hermione said looking at the body. “We’ll see you for lunch tomorrow, okay?” She said to Harry and Ginny. “Yeah, sure.” Ginny said. “We’ll be there at six.” |
*blinks reads again blinks* Im confused maybe i need to get my brain checked or something cause I thought we left with Harry's scar bleeding and glowing and now this guy shows up saying Voldy is gonna come back? plz make since! Em |
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But seriously Ali, your story was good. I liked the action bits, and I'm glad you never gave up on it. Loads of people wouldn't have bothered to finish it. I think you got Ron spot on. I hate how some people always make him stupid, he has the best lines in the books ... and you gave us dragons at Hogwarts and bleeding scars ... which I still don't get ... and what the devil happened to Dudley? See? You have to write us a sequel LOL if you do lemme know. :yes: Loved it, just as it is! *Fires the cannons* |
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And for the fact that it wasn't that clear, I think I might clear it up. |
Wow, very cool ending, Ali! I've really enjoyed reading this story! :D :glomp: |
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