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phoebe_phoenix 03-03-2004 09:42 PM

In A While
 
Life Behind Glass
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I created this thread to put in my occasional writings of poetry. I rarely write poems because I feel I can't do it *lol*... but sometimes, a good one comes along, and I'm the type of person that likes feedback.

Before people flame (constructive criticism: good! harassing flames: bad), I may want to remind you that poems do not have to rhyme, nor do they need to have a special metre.

I hope you'll like the collection of 'Life Behind Glass'.

:kirby:
:cat:
:yoshi:


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~ In A While ~




I was staring out into the skies today

Heavy and thick, the snow fell

A distant echo

Of something that happened not long ago



Hungrily, I opened the window

Let the flakes fall on my face

Caress my skin

Awaken me from the daze I've been in lately



Do you remember, my dear, how you held me close?

It was windy and cold

But the sun shone

Snow sparkling around us



Do you remember, my dear, the scent of me?

Your nose, your breath

Tickled my neck

Sent shivers down my spine



Do you remember, my dear, the evening after?

That one sweet, light kiss

Like a soft summer's breeze

Like a snowflake on my face



And yet, through all the memories,

Things developed so differently

Than we both had thought

A week ago.



In a while, my dear,

Maybe you'll see the chance you had.



In a while, my dear,

Maybe I'll still be waiting.



In a while, my dear,

Maybe we can try again.

phoebe_phoenix 03-05-2004 03:36 PM

An explanation is in order, I guess. You see, this (in a less poetic style) actually did happen to me not that long ago *sighs*. Well, it's just all weird. Anyway, I would appreciate some reviews because I'm not very sure about writing poetry at all... :ermsmile:

Dracnyzz 03-06-2004 12:29 AM

here's a review :lol: you'll have to excuse us, this forum is rather deserted, you see....i try to post in here every day but sometimes its rather tedious :whisle:

You poems are really great, and I'm sorry that the things actually happened to you =/

Feel free to read mine! They're in the topic labeled "Muses" :flowersmile:

phoebe_phoenix 03-06-2004 04:59 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dracnyzz@Mar 6 2004, 01:03 AM
here's a review :lol: you'll have to excuse us, this forum is rather deserted, you see....i try to post in here every day but sometimes its rather tedious :whisle:

You poems are really great, and I'm sorry that the things actually happened to you =/

Feel free to read mine! They're in the topic labeled "Muses" :flowersmile:

Yeah, this forum is a little deserted. Thanks for the review! I'm going off to have a look at your poems now ^_^

I'll probably have another one up here soon. I usually write when I get too bored in class... :P

phoebe_phoenix 03-10-2004 03:21 PM

Life Behind Glass
 
Right, weirdly enough, I've written a few more poems these past days, so I'll post one now.

:kirby:
:cat:
:yoshi:


…o°oOoo°O°ooOo°o…





~ Life Behind Glass ~





They say I'm living in a bubble

Trapped in it

Like I don't want to get out

Like I want to stay away

Like I enjoy it

This life behind glass




You see, they're not quite aware

This bubble

It's my only protection

It's my safe haven

It's security

And I'm happy here




I don't mean to shut myself off

Unreachable, untouchable

At least not on purpose

At least not to be special

At least not to **** off

That's not why




Here, in my fantasy world

I can dream

I don't have to see destruction

I don't have to see despair

I don't have to see fight

It's shut away




But I'm scared that it won't last

That it will shatter

Someone will come along one day

Someone will throw me out

Someone will destroy it

It will break one day




It will burst like a soap bubble

You know the kind

The ones we used to play with as kids

The ones that shimmered

The ones that flew

Up high in the air




And, tell me, do you remember?

The soap bubble

Where did it disappear to?

Where did it vanish?

Where did it go?

Do you know?




Well, I found out what happened

I found out

It burst like an overfilled balloon

It ceased to exist

It died

That was its fate




And, you see, I don't want that to happen

To me

I don't want to burst into nothing

I don't want to evaporate

I don't want to fade away

Like those bubbles




So, in the meantime, I stay

Keep away

From people that might shatter my defence

From thorns that might person the surface

From drowning darkness around

My chosen prison




And I rise, up high in the sky

Like the bubbles

Soaring away from harsh reality

Soaring through a chaotic blur

Soaring towards light

Towards a new life



Towards a place


Where I won't have to protect myself

Where I won't be forced to lead


A life behind glass.






…o°oOoo°O°ooOo°o…

Sir_Spots 03-11-2004 07:28 PM

he he I really liked this one Rox...It was actually the first thing I read in my new lj...... I didn't know you were doing things here other than Fragile and the FF's sorry... make sure you keep putting them in the lj and I'll read them.....good job :flowersmile:

Biochemkris 03-11-2004 07:31 PM

Wow, those are really great. I'm impressed by anyone who can write such lovely poetry with such passion and meaning. Keep it up :flowersmile:

phoebe_phoenix 03-12-2004 03:00 PM

A Poem
 
Thanks! Another one I believe is sort of fluffy and cute *lol* Say what you think!

:kirby:
:cat:
:yoshi:

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~ A Poem ~




It's cute, the way you're looking

You think I can't see you

Think I'm too engulfed in what I'm doing

What I'm writing

But I notice

I always do



I look up and give you a smile

Small and weak, it may be

But you've been waiting for it all day

I know you were

Because I was waiting

For you to look



I'm writing again, but see you still

From the corner of my eye

You excuse yourself from your friends

Make your way over

Over to little me

The lone girl



I grin up at your face, a faint blush

Appearing on both our cheeks

"What are you writing?" you ask, interested

Intrigued, fascinated, somehow

"A poem," I answer

"Just a poem."

Dracnyzz 03-12-2004 11:31 PM

Wow! I love that, really! It captured my attention so well.....it's not so light and fluffy i think...I think it's more emotional than your other ones, if you will. But that's just my opinions ^^

phoebe_phoenix 03-13-2004 12:53 PM

Glad you liked it. I think it's emotional, but kind of cute... I had to grin when I was writing it all the time. Anyway, happy you think it's good. :flowersmile:

Hendrik 03-23-2004 05:43 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by phoebe_phoenix@Mar 12 2004, 07:34 AM
~ A Poem ~


It's cute, the way you're looking
You think I can't see you
Think I'm too engulfed in what I'm doing
What I'm writing
But I notice
I always do

I look up and give you a smile
Small and weak, it may be
But you've been waiting for it all day
I know you were
Because I was waiting
For you to look

I'm writing again, but see you still
From the corner of my eye
You excuse yourself from your friends
Make your way over
Over to little me
The lone girl

I grin up at your face, a faint blush
Appearing on both our cheeks
"What are you writing?" you ask, interested
Intrigued, fascinated, somehow
"A poem," I answer
"Just a poem."

hee hee, this one ^ looks familar....

Quote:

Professor Phoenix tied her long her into a bun rather messily to keep it from flying in her face when she was drinking her juice. She looked down the staff table and found Professor Hendrik's gaze resting upon her.

She winked down at him and grinned.

Quote:

*thinking to himself...*

"was that a wink?? am I blushing??"

Professor Hendrik, realizing that he was infact blushing, attempts to smile back at Professor Phoenix. He then proceeded to dump the contents of his fork down the front of his robes in an attempt to hit his mouth. Extremely embarrassed at this point, he quickly looks away while he cleans his robes.

enjoyed your poetry!

phoebe_phoenix 03-23-2004 10:14 PM

Hahaha... *laughs* well, check on the Staff Table now, my dear ^_^

Hendrik 03-24-2004 11:05 PM

My, my, my! Things are getting interesting at the Staff Table! ^_^

Just where are we going with this? :lol:

phoebe_phoenix 03-25-2004 03:00 PM

Well, well... in these dark, troubled times, among war, other things might start blossoming... :lol:

BedtimeBear 03-25-2004 10:56 PM

Your poems are good. I find them very intriguing. Keep it up. If you are bored, you can read my poems: Christine's Crazy Poems, which are very odd.
:lol:
-christine-

Hendrik 03-26-2004 05:40 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by phoebe_phoenix@Mar 25 2004, 07:34 AM
Well, well... in these dark, troubled times, among war, other things might start blossoming... :lol:
*grins* You are the Herbology Professor! I'll get my trowel! :flowersmile:

phoebe_phoenix 03-28-2004 11:52 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Hendrik+Mar 26 2004, 06:14 AM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Hendrik @ Mar 26 2004, 06:14 AM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-phoebe_phoenix@Mar 25 2004, 07:34 AM
Well, well... in these dark, troubled times, among war, other things might start blossoming...&nbsp; :lol:
*grins* You are the Herbology Professor! I'll get my trowel! :flowersmile: [/b][/quote]
*lol* Hogsmeade weekend... :P

She-Who-Is-Not-To-Be-Psycho! 04-16-2004 09:41 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Hendrik+Mar 23 2004, 01:17 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Hendrik @ Mar 23 2004, 01:17 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'> <!--QuoteBegin-phoebe_phoenix@Mar 12 2004, 07:34 AM
~ A Poem ~


It's cute, the way you're looking
You think I can't see you
Think I'm too engulfed in what I'm doing
What I'm writing
But I notice
I always do

I look up and give you a smile
Small and weak, it may be
But you've been waiting for it all day
I know you were
Because I was waiting
For you to look

I'm writing again, but see you still
From the corner of my eye
You excuse yourself from your friends
Make your way over
Over to little me
The lone girl

I grin up at your face, a faint blush
Appearing on both our cheeks
"What are you writing?" you ask, interested
Intrigued, fascinated, somehow
"A poem," I answer
"Just a poem."

hee hee, this one ^ looks familar....

Quote:

Professor Phoenix tied her long her into a bun rather messily to keep it from flying in her face when she was drinking her juice. She looked down the staff table and found Professor Hendrik's gaze resting upon her.

She winked down at him and grinned.

Quote:

*thinking to himself...*

"was that a wink?? am I blushing??"

Professor Hendrik, realizing that he was infact blushing, attempts to smile back at Professor Phoenix. He then proceeded to dump the contents of his fork down the front of his robes in an attempt to hit his mouth. Extremely embarrassed at this point, he quickly looks away while he cleans his robes.

enjoyed your poetry! [/b][/quote]
Did I mention you two are cute? :lol: No idea if you are dating in real life but your characters are :flowersmile:

Beautiful, Phoebe! ^^Cute little poem; I liked the Behind the Glass the most. I feel identificated with your case; my shrink is trying to pull me out of my shelter - but I don't want to!!! LOL Beautiful really.

I agree, there's not too much people in here. There's lot of poems without answers... mine as an example (pathetic -__-) That's sad, there's good work in here.

A question: Are you allowed to post this kind of poems? Because I thought it *had* to be Harry Potter related. If it isn't then I'm posting more of my lil strange poems right away! :sorcerer:

See you! :hello:

firelily 04-17-2004 07:40 PM

:hello: hi im fireliy but my name is leah and i think your poems are great i write poems too so dont be shy as to have a look see at them ill keep checkin for more ! leah mae

phoebe_phoenix 04-18-2004 09:22 PM

Thank you!

@ Nadia: Non-HP poetry is allowed in this section, so go ahead!
@ firelily: I will ASAP!

phoebe_phoenix 04-18-2004 09:26 PM

Over You
 
Yes, I'm striking again! This poem can be seen as the part II of 'In A While' <IMG class=inlineimg title=">_ *cringe*

And yes, it is personal... it's what I was feeling like today.


~~~~~~~~~~~



~ Over You ~




So we met again

One evening

Unprepared, I might add

But it's not as if we didn't know

That day would come



We agreed on it

On friendship

Not more, I know

But it's a hard thing to define

After what happened



Nobody even noticed

Or guessed

We acted our roles

Nobody would ever have seen

If the story hadn't travelled



And now I'm here

Sitting, thinking

Alone, in my room

Maybe I'm not fit for that mask

I had to wear last night



I thought I was over you.

She-Who-Is-Not-To-Be-Psycho! 04-19-2004 05:44 AM

Ow... it's so sad :sad:
Cr*py thing you are feeling that way.
I hope you are feeling better by now -it's said that expressing yourself helps :rolleyes: I hope so.
Good work and thanks for letting me know about non-HP poems-thing, I'm posting them here them ^^ Bye!
Nadia

phoebe_phoenix 04-19-2004 02:47 PM

Yes, poetry definitely helps. I guess I only write when I feel especially down *lol*

She-Who-Is-Not-To-Be-Psycho! 04-20-2004 05:03 AM

That's a sad thing. Don't get me wrong, it's great to express youserself with poetry, but feel the need to feel down to be able to write it is omewhat deperssing. Poetry is about describing feelings, I suspect ( :rolleyes: ) -- my sis is the real expert -- so when you are just *feeling* or meaning to explain a feeling one should (should! Yet it's not like that most of the times) be able to write it down in poetry... Well, again, my sis is the real expert... Oh, I posted some other poems of mine, in the Sphinx & Harpy (which should be a Manticore)'s corner, I would like your opinion on them maybe... :flowersmile:
Oh and if you like them wait until you read my sis' :yoshi:

Chimaera135 04-25-2004 03:19 AM

Quote:

Yes, poetry definitely helps. I guess I only write when I feel especially down *lol*

Me too ! or when I'm extremely moddy............ please check my poems...... (Chimaera's poetry)


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