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Lily<33 12-05-2010 02:59 AM

A Twist In the Story - Sa16+
 
Hey everyone welcome to A Twist In the Story. So I tried writing this once before and it turned into a giant fail bucket so here is my take on it in a new and improved way. Hope you like it! :)

Disclaimer: The HP universe belongs to J. K Rowling.

Setting:
In the guest stands for the 3rd task of the Triwizard Tournament, end of fourth year.

Plot:
For as long as Isabella could walk and talk she had been taught everything magic. She was home-schooled for many years and her Godfather, Lucious Malfoy, had paid and persuaded the Minister to keep her, and her sister's Rosalind and Ellenore, existence quite. The Malfoy's goddaughter triplets were non-existent to all but a few. That is until the summer of the year they turned fourteen. It was then that their father enrolled them at Hogwarts, then that the Dark Lord returned, and it was then that he changed their lives - her life - forever!

Chapter One:
I saw Uncle Luke grab his forearm and try to shrug it off as nothing, but I knew better. "It's happened hasn't it?" I didn't need to ask I knew that much, but I also knew that if he didn't go, him and all of his family would be in danger. He knew this just as well as I did, but he also knew what he would have to do if he returned; he may hate anyone that isn't a pureblood, but he wasn't a killer. He hated being a Death Eater and having that mark on his arm, but Voldemort threatened his family, as he will do once more if he doesn't take up arms again.

"Go Uncle, there is no other way to protect them. You have to go, but listen I have a plan..." I spoke in whispers to him telling him the plan I had made long ago for when this time came, then suddenly he grabbed my arm and I felt a twisting feeling in my stomach and knew that whatever was happening wasn't good. I felt my feet hit the ground and I started to squirm from my betraying Godfather's firm grip on my arm. I saw gravestones, blood, and Death Eaters. 'Great.' I thought to myself. 'Just peachy.'
"Let me go! You idiot! Let me go!" I screamed pulling my wand from my jean pocket. "I trusted you! I trusted you and you betrayed me, you complete ars! Stupefy!" I threw the spell at him causing him to fly backwards and into several other Death Eaters, taking them out. 'Ha!' I thought to myself as I smirked at him.

"Now, now Isabella; there is no need for that." He knew me. It had been thirteen years and he still knew me to see me.
"Voldemort." I said it as if something sour and rotten had found its way to my tongue.
"Yes, Bella it is I. Now, where are your sisters? I was hoping to see them as well." He let out a small smile as he spoke the words ever so slowly as if he was trying to pry the answer from my head.
"Legitamency won't work. You should know that, seen as I was born special and all." I said carelessly, but hoping to divert the topic from the question he had just shot at me.
"Yes, you always were the greatest - the strongest - of your sisters, now weren't you Bella?" I was smirking at this point and let out a small laugh.
"Always? You left before I even turned a year old! How could you possibly know anything about me?" I asked sceptically.
"Just because you couldn't see me, doesn't mean I wasn't there, my little Rainbow." He said as his mouth formed a smirk, somehow knowing I hated that nickname, and he raised his hand, pointing his wand at a boy I had failed to notice upon my arrival. "Crucio!” he yelled as the boy screamed and flailed around on the ground, and that's when I saw it - the lightning bolt scar - it was a searing hot white as if it would split in two at any moment, but I couldn't let that happen, this had to "STOP!"



~~~~~~~Hope you liked it~~~~~~~~~~

Hope ya'll like it! Tell me what you think! :)
love~love~love
*lauren*

Jesse_Longbottom 12-06-2010 08:29 AM

Lauren,

I like this take on it even better!
You did such an amazing job, I love the detail you put into it. :)
Can't wait for the next chapter! Are you PMing people when it's up?

iLuffers you,
!Jesse!

Morag 12-06-2010 12:15 PM

LAUREN!!!:tackle: Yay your story is back up. Its amazing! Aww I'm so happy!

Oooo...So there are tripets now!

So is Voldemort their daddy? Sorry :blush:

I hope you can post again soon!
Soph xx

Lily<33 12-07-2010 06:33 AM

Hi everyone! Happy to see ya'll again. :)
 
Quote:

Originally Posted by Jesse_Longbottom (Post 9996342)
Lauren,

I like this take on it even better!
You did such an amazing job, I love the detail you put into it. :)
Can't wait for the next chapter! Are you PMing people when it's up?

iLuffers you,
!Jesse!

Thanks Jesse! Yeah I'm gonna PM people :)
I'm so glad you like it. I wasn't so sure, especially with my chapters being so short. :( sorry about that btw.

iLuffers you as always,
*lauren*

Quote:

Originally Posted by Morag (Post 9996621)
LAUREN!!!:tackle: Yay your story is back up. Its amazing! Aww I'm so happy!

Oooo...So there are tripets now!

So is Voldemort their daddy? Sorry :blush:

I hope you can post again soon!
Soph xx

Sophie!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :glomp: I'm so glad you're reading this! YAY! :woot:
Thanks so much :xd:

yes there was always triplets I just hadn't gotten that far into my last version of the story to reveal that :lol:

Oh you never know...:whistle:
but you'll find out eventually ;)

I'm going to post again as soon as 3 more people comment. Does that sound fair? Hope so :)

lots of love,
*lauren*

Morag 12-07-2010 01:41 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lauren
I'm going to post again as soon as 3 more people comment. Does that sound fair? Hope so :)

Sounds like a plan! :D
Looking forward to it *pitches tent*
Soph x

Ruby85 12-07-2010 07:25 PM

Ooo! Nice one! Put's my story abut Voldie's daughter to shame...

PAMS!

Star Child 12-19-2010 04:47 PM

Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE this idea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(Think i have enough exclamation marks?)

Wonderstruck 12-19-2010 06:46 PM

Hey Lauren!
What an awesome idea :D I like your first chapter a lot and I look forward to reading more in the future! ^_^

Lily<33 01-09-2011 06:03 PM

SPOILER!!: Sophie
Quote:

Originally Posted by Morag (Post 10000223)
Sounds like a plan! :D
Looking forward to it *pitches tent*
Soph x

*knocks on tent door* Heey, time for a new post :)


SPOILER!!: Ruby85
Quote:

Originally Posted by Ruby85 (Post 10000793)
Ooo! Nice one! Put's my story abut Voldie's daughter to shame...

PAMS!

I haven't read your story before I think I'm gonna have to check it out :) and thank you glad that you could read mine though :)


SPOILER!!: Star Child
Quote:

Originally Posted by Star Child (Post 10032596)
Great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE this idea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!(Think i have enough exclamation marks?)

haha thanks :) you really like exclamation points don't you? ;) haha


SPOILER!!: Alisson
Quote:

Originally Posted by CreativeAllie18 (Post 10032868)
Hey Lauren!
What an awesome idea :D I like your first chapter a lot and I look forward to reading more in the future! ^_^

Hey Alli! So glad you could read it I'm posting the chapter next :)

Lily<33 01-09-2011 06:46 PM

Chapter Two....sorry it took so long :(
 
Chapter Two:

"STOP!" I yelled jumping in front of the writhing boy, silently shouting a stunning spell at Voldemort as I grabbed the boy's hand and the dead one's wrist and disapparated right outside the maze. I fell to the ground screaming in pain, I heard nothing but my screams fill the air, as I saw people rushing towards me. An elderly man with half-moon spectacles and piercing blue eyes gathered me into his arms and brought me into a sitting position as he moved his mouth, but I heard no words come out. I saw Draco and Syriana headed towards me, fright and worry etched on their pale faces, over the Headmaster's shoulder and that was the last thing I saw until darkness took over.

*******Later in the Hospital Wing*********

'Bloody hell!' I thought as I awoke to a mind-splitting headache, a bandaged ankle, and painfully bright light that was soon shadowed by my cousin's, Draco Malfoy's, face right beside my best friend Syriana Zabini towering over me.
"How are you feeling, Izzy?" Draco asked, concern still etching his face.
"Bloody perfect!" I said rolling my eyes at him. "How do you think I feel Dray?" And for some reason I thought I saw a flash of guilt in his eyes as I heard Syriana’s familiar laugh.
"Sorry." He snapped and started walking away, but said menacingly to a group of people surrounding a bed about two down from me that seemed to be sniggering at him, "Shut it Potter, Weasels, you too, you filthy little Mudblood."
Everyone gasped as Draco turned to walk away smirking, as the four redheads started rising from their seats, but I was too fast for them.
"Petriphicus Totalus!" I shouted, jumping from my bed, but falling instantly with a yelp of pain, which had the nurse come running.
"Miss! What are you doing?" She asked shrilly.
"Teaching Malfoy here some manners; He decided to use a very fowl name at that girl over there, and all because of her blood status! He’s a fowl, evil little cockroach!" I said raising my voice slightly, as Syriana helped me stand once more and I thought I saw a hint of a smile grace the nurse’s aging face as the boy in the bed whispered to the bushy haired girl something like, "She sounds like you Hermione."
"I believe a detention with Professor McGonagall will help justify his actions Miss. Black." He said as his eyes sparkled with amusement.
"Professor Dumbledore, sir, so lovely to meet you, but please call me Bella - Isabella Ranee Black." I said holding out my hand for him to take.
"Pleasure to meet you Bella, but please call me Albus, Albus Percival Wilfric Bryan Dumbledore, and I believe we have your future to discuss." He said smiling and gently taking my hand to shake. After the Nurse gave me some Skele-grow she deemed me healthy enough to go with Albus, and so we began our silent walk to his office after I waved goodbye to Syriana.


I'm sorry my chapters are short and this one isn't as good as I would have wished it to be, but it's all I could think of for the time being, sorry, but I think the next one will be better, hope you like it and comment. :)
love you,
*lauren*

Morag 01-09-2011 08:33 PM

Aww Lauren. I'm so proud of you! You've just had the twins and your posting too. How are the little dears? I hope you and Jesse are well So Congratulations Dearest!

And btw, it was a great post despite what you think! I really enjoyed it. And don't worry about posts being short because remember, its quality, not quantity!

I'll pitch my tent again for the next posts, but don't worry if its not anytime soon, We'll be patient!
Soph :glomp: xx

KatielovesHP 01-09-2011 08:54 PM

Hey Ren !! :hello:

How you doing? How are the babies?? I'll call them Sara and Alex to save writing their beautiful names because I'm running low on battery on my laptop. Hope they are doing well and you too honey!!

I have to admit, I can't remeber much of the old one so do I need to read it to understand this?? :\ I do apologise!

PAMS PAMS

K xx

Star Child 01-09-2011 10:12 PM

Nice job, and don't worry about it being short. Just write when you feel like writing :) :flowers:

Emileyn 01-09-2011 10:41 PM

Great posts, Ren! I'm loving this story; very intriguing! Please PAMS! :glomp:

Lily<33 01-09-2011 11:16 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ruby85 (Post 10094661)

I really enjoyed ur story great work :)

Quote:

Originally Posted by Morag (Post 10094834)
Aww Lauren. I'm so proud of you! You've just had the twins and your posting too. How are the little dears? I hope you and Jesse are well So Congratulations Dearest!

And btw, it was a great post despite what you think! I really enjoyed it. And don't worry about posts being short because remember, its quality, not quantity!

I'll pitch my tent again for the next posts, but don't worry if its not anytime soon, We'll be patient!
Soph :glomp: xx

Thank you so much Sophie u always know what to do to make me feel better and it's actually Jesse that was writing it for me :)


Quote:

Originally Posted by Star Child (Post 10095284)
Nice job, and don't worry about it being short. Just write when you feel like writing :) :flowers:

Thanks so much for writing :)


Quote:

Originally Posted by KatielovesHP (Post 10094913)
Hey Ren !! :hello:

How you doing? How are the babies?? I'll call them Sara and Alex to save writing their beautiful names because I'm running low on battery on my laptop. Hope they are doing well and you too honey!!

I have to admit, I can't remeber much of the old one so do I need to read it to understand this?? :\ I do apologise!

PAMS PAMS

K xx

I'm half way back to health and Alex is about 3/4 the way there, but Sara isn't doing well, but we're still praying that everything will work out.

Don't worry it's actually better if u didn't read the last one so that it doesn't mess with ur head. Haha :)


Quote:

Originally Posted by Jeyn<33 (Post 10095401)
Great posts, Ren! I'm loving this story; very intriguing! Please PAMS! :glomp:

Awww...thanks so much Emily :)

ThePureBloodPrincess 03-09-2011 08:42 PM

Really great story!

Maxilocks 05-12-2011 05:56 AM

Last updated: Jan 09, 2011.

Moving to HS Inactive Fics.


Maxilocks 07-16-2011 06:23 AM

Reactivated on author's request.


Jessiqua 08-03-2011 01:21 PM

Woo, I like it :D I like that you've kept bits of the story, especially kept Draco the way he is to the famous trio. Great reading :D

Lily<33 08-04-2011 02:04 AM

thanks Jesiqua and ThePureBloodPrincess =) I'm having a bit of writer's block at the moment; partly because I'm becoming more of a perfectionist, and partly because I've got a lot of stuff going on right now. I'll update as soon as possible =)

Jessiqua 08-04-2011 07:00 AM

Yay! I look forward to it :D

Hera 10-22-2011 07:16 AM

Last Updated: 10/1/2011


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