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emma_rlz 07-31-2007 01:14 PM

Hey. Just started reading this story today and I already love it.

I can't wait till your next post.

Lena xXx

Moxie 08-01-2007 01:28 PM

HEY!

Great job, Lovely, you're doing great =D PM me with the links for new FF's, and I posted in LTM if you want to check it out
=D

Much lvoe
.:Adrienne:.

scarlet5890 08-01-2007 10:01 PM

I Just started reading this story today. It's really good!!

MalfoyzBeloved 08-02-2007 02:31 AM

Thanx guys :D
And I'll definitely send ya the links, Adge.

And I'll post in a day or two. Dunno when exactly... but I won't be as busy after tomorrow :)

griffin_girl 08-02-2007 03:48 PM

AWESOME!!!:woot:

*stalks*

:shifty:

MalfoyzBeloved 08-03-2007 05:34 AM

Ok, I'm posting (NEXT POST OF COURSE) :) Can't help it... and it close enough to 4 days anyways.

And I've also actually started on another F.F. It's not... Only Hope creative, but it's more original than nearly every other story I've put up on here (Dramione-wise).
So yeah, it'll definitely be called 'What Have You Done?' (song by Within Temptation feat. Keith Caputo)
Here's a clip of what I have so far (first paragraph):


Thunder shook the earth in the dead of night, the loud, deep wails echoing into my room. The lightning struck ground in the distance, the light flashing through the windows, allowing sight for a matter of seconds before it slid away. Rain pounded down on the house, the large droplets flew against the window angrily. Through this heavy storm, everyone slept peacefully, all the sounds slipping into their dreams. Damn whoever is able to sleep at this time of night!


I haven't even said what the plot is here...
It's much longer than that paragraph, that's why (it's a backstory and plot together and like I said, it's a creative plot, so it's stretched out longer). I can PM you with what it's about if you want, but until then, all that's above is what you know.
And that the entire F.F will be in first person (first F.F in 1st person actually... pretty sad since I've done like, what? 15 actual stories or something? *doesn't include one-shots*). If you really think about it, you can figure out whose POV the F.F will be in. Until it's up and going, I'm not saying.

And in the first chapter... wow, already halfway through it and it's like I compiled all detail from every story I've ever written and put it into a few paragraphs :lol: (it's one of those reminiscing kind of chapters, that's why). But reading over what I have already... wow. I myself am not easy to tear up, but I'm holding it back!

I hope you all will like it when you can see the entire thing. I'm going to finish writing this F.F (I'm up to chapter 21, and stuck...), and then when I'm done with that, I'll post this one, no matter how far I'm into it (so basically it'll probably be soon).

Anyways, next post'll be Chapter 5 :) It's a long one!

MalfoyzBeloved 08-03-2007 05:42 AM

This is sadly my best H/Hr moment I've ever written (just throughout you'll see).
Enjoy!
~Sarah


Chapter 5
Harry’s Surprise


Hermione yawned and sat up in her bed. Wiping the sweat from her forehead away, she thought of the nightmares that haunted her for the past few nights. They were reoccurring, sometimes a twist made them a bit different. She shuddered when she recalled the part of her recent nightmare when she walked in on Harry and Jaimie snogging on the common room couch.

As she stretched, the door to her dormitory opened slowly. Ginny poked her head inside.

“Yeah?” Hermione yawned.

Ginny sighed and said, “Harry said he wants you up to see something.”

“What...?” Hermione asked slowly.

“Harry... said... he... wants... you...”

“I meant what does he want to show me,” Hermione snapped as she swung her legs over the edge of the bed.

“Not like I’d know, I’m just relaying the message,” Ginny responded. There was yelling, and Ginny’s head disappeared and she hollered, “I KNOW!” There was more distant yelling, and Ginny’s response was, “I’M ALREADY ON IT!”

Hermione walked up to the door and opened it slightly. She then heard Harry’s loud response of, “WELL HURRY UP THEN!”

Ginny looked over her shoulder and saw the open door and Hermione standing there. She turned back around and yelled, “SHE’S ALREADY UP! NOW LAY OFF AND WAIT A FEW MINUTES!”

Harry was silent. Ginny rolled her eyes and turned around, saying, “I don’t know how you put up with it...”

She walked away, leaving Hermione perplexed and alone. Turning around, Hermione shut the door and changed slowly. By the time she stepped out of the door, she heard Harry yelling.

“I’ll be down in a moment, love!” Hermione responded in a louder voice as she started to descend the stairs.

“It’s been...” Harry stopped talking when he saw Hermione round the been.

“I told you I’d be a moment,” she said with a smirk. She heard voices distantly behind her on the staircase, and recognized one of them as Jaimie’s. “So what’d you want to show me at this hour? The sun isn’t even up yet.”

Harry drew Hermione closer and kissed her softly. When the echoing footsteps reverberated down the stairwell and into the common room, Harry pulled away and said, “Come along.”

Taking his hand, Hermione followed Harry closely behind him. They left the common room and down a hallway. They stopped in front of a banner that hung in front of the wall. Hermione looked at it curiously, but was slightly surprised when it drew away to reveal a small opening. Harry crouched down and walked through the small hole, Hermione having to duck down to get through as well. When Hermione stood up, she saw nothing.

“Harry...?”

“I’m right here,” he responded softly. She felt his hand take hers, and he led her down a hall.

“There’s a step here,” Harry told her. He went up, and Hermione followed closely, climbing the steps. As they went higher, light started to become brighter in the cold, empty stairwell. Hermione’s sight became clearer as she became quickly accustomed to the light, and stepped onto the ground. She let go out Harry and looked around and saw the entire Hogwarts grounds, and before her was the rising sun. She gasped at the amazing sight.

“Beautiful, isn’t it?” Harry commented from behind Hermione. She merely nodded in response.

“When... when did you find this place?” Hermione asked, looking down into the open fields of scattered trees.

“I really don’t remember when... I saw it in a dream and recognized the area, so I went scavenging. I found it after a few days.”

“Last year?”

“I don’t remember,” Harry repeated. “The days seem to mesh together so much nowadays, I can’t place when I really came here for the first time.”

“So you kept this place secret then?” Hermione asked curiously. She felt Harry’s arms wrap around her stomach and pull her closer. She leaned against him comfortably as the sun crept higher, breaking through the pink clouds of daybreak.

“I was waiting for the right time... I never wanted anyone to know of this place other than me, but I thought only you should see it.”

“So you’re saying this is more of a place you brought me to for an apology.”

“For what?”

“Well it’s not like I’ve seen you much since that DADA class.”

“We’ve seen each other.”

“Yeah, but you’ve been with Jaimie more.”

“That’s a lie.”

“Ask Ginny, she’d know as well...”

“She’s jealous, don’t listen to her,” Harry cut in firmly.

Hermione pulled out of Harry’s hold and spun around to face him. “She’s a friend, why should I not listen to her?”

“She’s plotting!”

Plotting? What the hell... Merlin, we were right...”

“‘We’?” he asked venomously.

“Me and Gin. Honestly, I’m getting sick of this all, and now you don’t even care...”

Harry glared, his emerald green eyes shining in anger as he said, “You’re ungrateful, that’s why you see it that way.”

Hermione gapped. “Excuse me, but I at least have the integrity to tell you if I’m hanging around some other bloke that isn’t Ronald.”

“Don’t bring Ron into this,” Harry snapped.

“You know what? Forget it!” Hermione exclaimed. She pushed Harry out of her way and ran down the stairs and through the hallway.

“HERMIONE!” Harry hollered down the hall from the landing. Hermione wiped away a stray tear and flung the banner out of her way. She ran down the corridor and to the Fat Lady.

“Something wrong, dearie?” the Fat Lady asked.

“I’m fine... now... uh...” Hermione blanked. What was the password? “Fi...” The portrait hole opened. Hermione blinked, and Ron stood before her.

“G’mornin...” he mumbled, rubbing his sleepy blue eyes. He looked at Hermione and a worried expression overtook his tiredness. “You ok? Where’s Harry?”

“I don’t care wherever the hell Harry is anymore,” Hermione snapped. She walked around Ron and through the portrait hole.

“So you won’t care that I say he’s coming this way with an enraged expression?” Ron asked as he peered down the hall.

“Don’t tell him I’m here,” Hermione said as she ran through the common room and up the stairs.

Ron was perplexed - was there another fight?

“Where’s Hermione?” Harry snarled. Ron nearly jumped into the portrait of the Fat Lady, who had closed behind Hermione upon her entrance. Ron, thinking about whether he should lie to his best mate or help Hermione, shrugged after a moment.

“I dunno, probably still in bed or something...”

“I was gone with her well over fifteen minutes ago! You were awake!”

“I was...?” Ron asked, scratching his head.

Harry sighed irritably and said, “You’re hopeless.” He looked at the Fat Lady and said, “Did Hermione come through here?”

The Fat Lady disappeared further into her picture and came back with a wine glass.

“Fat Lady, did Hermione come through here?”

The Fat Lady held the glass next to her and started to sing. Ron ran away, covering his ears, knowing what was coming, and headed the Great Hall.

“Fire whiskey,” Harry said once the Fat Lady took a momentary break.

“Hold on.” The Fat Lady brought her screeching singing voice higher.

Fire whiskey!” Harry yelled angrily.

“Alright,” the Fat Lady snapped back as she opened the door.

Harry stormed through and looked around the common room. He looked at the stairs that led to the girls’ dormitories and saw Ginny coming down.

“Gin...”

“Hello,” she said in a hard tone. Harry was taken aback slightly.

“Where’s Hermione?”

“I’m not telling you where, you fat jerk,” Ginny snapped. She shook her head slowly and said, “You sicken me.” She then pushed Harry out of her way and left the Tower.

emma_rlz 08-03-2007 09:47 AM

For the past few minutes, my fingers have been sat on my keyboard and I have not known what to say. I still don't, apart from the fact I love it.

That's pretty much all I came come up with apart from:

Can't wait to read the next bit!'

Love,
Lena xXx

Fallon Chanel 08-03-2007 12:11 PM

so dramatic! lol
I WANNA SEE DRACO!
PAMS!! PAMSOID!!
XOXO,
Tara

griffin_girl 08-03-2007 02:18 PM

Okay, Harry is so going bonkerz BIG TIME!!! That's so inconsiderate of him not wanting to hear his GFs problems...poor 'Mione...:console:


does this mean Draco's on his way?:shifty:



scarlet5890 08-03-2007 02:37 PM

That was a great chapter! Is Draco coming in soon?

MalfoyzBeloved 08-03-2007 08:18 PM

Yes, Draco is coming soon. VERY soon, trust meh ;)

griffin_girl 08-03-2007 09:45 PM

*gets dressed up and awaits Draco*


:evil:

HARRY LOVER#1 =) 08-04-2007 05:46 AM

Quote:


Thunder shook the earth in the dead of night, the loud, deep wails echoing into my room. The lightning struck ground in the distance, the light flashing through the windows, allowing sight for a matter of seconds before it slid away. Rain pounded down on the house, the large droplets flew against the window angrily. Through this heavy storm, everyone slept peacefully, all the sounds slipping into their dreams. Damn whoever is able to sleep at this time of night!

That looks like a really cool story!!! I would love to read it!!:yes:


Harry is going absolutely bananas!! I cant belive I would ever say this but I cant wait 'till Draco comes into the story and Hermione replaces him for Harry!!:D

Fallon Chanel 08-04-2007 11:34 AM

Quote:

Yes, Draco is coming soon. VERY soon, trust meh ;)
OMG TWINNEH POST SOON!

Moxie 08-05-2007 01:21 PM

LOL! Ginny makes me laugh so much =D I love her. Hey, wanna throw some Gred and Forge in??? Just for me??? LOL

Much love
.:Adrienne:.

LyonLover417 08-05-2007 03:51 PM

New Reader! This is awesome Sarah! You gotta post soon! Wow Harry, stop being an overbearing fuddy-duddy! Give Hermione some air and stop hanging around with Jaimie!

*thinks*

Actually, go ahead. Cause then Hermione would be with Draco, and that's whats best for everybody!

Katie

MalfoyzBeloved 08-05-2007 06:32 PM

Quote:

New Reader! This is awesome Sarah! You gotta post soon! Wow Harry, stop being an overbearing fuddy-duddy! Give Hermione some air and stop hanging around with Jaimie!

*thinks*

Actually, go ahead. Cause then Hermione would be with Draco, and that's whats best for everybody!
:lol: Yeah, I might just make that happen, you won't know just yet :shifty:

Quote:

Hey, wanna throw some Gred and Forge in??? Just for me???
If I can think of some way, then I will :xd:

Quote:

I cant wait 'till Draco comes into the story and Hermione replaces him for Harry!!
What if it isn't true? Maybe they're just doing it to play with Harry's mind... and in the end Hermione's back to Harry? :evil:

Bleh, I'll post when I don't feel crappy...
So there might be a few more days of wait. No matter what I take I feel like snapping at someone (at home).
But not too long, I swear! :D

LyonLover417 08-06-2007 12:37 AM

*cries* Don't be snappy Sarah! Please! We love you! :glomp:

Katie

HOPEendures 08-06-2007 01:05 AM

Oh poor Hermione i feel sooo sorry for her Harry is being such a jerk.PAMS.

~Heather

MalfoyzBeloved 08-06-2007 06:28 AM

Quote:

Don't be snappy Sarah! Please! We love you!
Aw, thanks :xd:
No worries, it's not you guys! It's just... my life...
Wow, that's such an emo teenager comment right there.

I was just snappy to my dad today, and that's cause he was like 'why didn't you clean your room before' and I automatically turned into a monster :lol:
My mom defended me though cause she was all 'you don't need to yell all the time, she'll get it done.' and stuff.
It's more that 'under the weather' feeling overall... the snippiness just comes with it :D
Sometimes. I jut need to be provoked... badly... my dad does that EASILY ;)

And I found the perfect song that suits Jaimie (pretty closely) actually. It might pop up but I dunno... with what I have going for her so far... it just might not happen, so I'll say right now it's Bullseye by Aly & A.J (on their new CD, Insomniatic).

MalfoyzBeloved 08-06-2007 11:35 AM

Hey guys, should I post my one-shot I just felt like writing today like... soon (as in today or tomorrow after proof-reading it) or when it would be perfect (which is New Years)? ;)

*yeah, I got bored at 3:30am and decided to finally write a one-shot that's been nagging me for awhile based on the song 4Ever by The Veronicas*

qoldenwonder 08-07-2007 01:19 AM

Even though I love Harry. Him in the story... OoOo! He makes me Mad!
Love the story. PAMS!

♥Lisa♥

dracoismysmexyone 08-07-2007 01:45 AM

new reader... OMG WHEN IS DRACO COMING?!?!?! he must come... he must come... he must come...... re, sorry. exercising a bit of mind-control there. do you feel compelled to write draco in? well, even if it takes you a while, i won't really mind cause this is an awesome story.

LyonLover417 08-07-2007 02:43 PM

YES! POST THE ONE SHOT! PLEASE?!?!?!? PAMS!

Katie


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