Okie dokie, so this is a review of page three and four...
And before I start, I would like to say that you are an amazing writer and your posts actually made me cry. I believe that that was the very first fanfiction that moved me to tears. You're amazing, Connie.
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Connie 
He swept her off her feet and sat on the garden swing with her cuddled onto his lap and chest. “That’s exciting, can I feel it? How big is it now? Can we call it him, instead of it? When will we know if we have a boy or a girl? Do you have any names picked out that we can be thinking on? What did it feel like?” His last question he asked in wonderment.
That was really cuuuutttteeee
I loved this post, and wanted to comment more but then I realized that I have TWO full pages to quote and thought better of it... It was really precious. I love how cute James and Lily are, and I just love it. I don't know how else to put it. I love it.
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Connie Sirius, Remus, and Peter, were coming over for a game of Basketball. A Muggle sport Lily told James about. Intrigued, James decided he wanted to play it. He missed playing Quidditch so much. They acquired a ball and hoop, and made a half court behind the garden.
Bahahaha, I would pay to watch this.
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“Well, I was on my way here when Snape,” (taking a second to spit on the ground) “cursed me with the leg locker curse. He took me in the Leaky Cauldron, sat me in a chair, and told me if I know what’s good for me that I need to do as he says. Well, I was scared plenty, but I managed to ask him what he wants of me. He said he heard we were getting together today, and for me to sneak into your shed and put this on your ax.” He pulled out a jar of clear liquid and showed it to them. “I told him I didn’t want you and Lily to get hurt. He said Lily wouldn’t get hurt, and you would get what you deserve. All of a sudden, there was a massive explosion that nearly scared me out of my pants. Snape put everything in order as if nothing happened, staring at me not even blinking an eye! He stood up to leave and said my curse would wear off in a while, and not to speak of what we were doing or else he would get me. I asked him what he’d do to me if I didn’t do it and, he just said it would be kinder if I didn’t know. I didn’t know what to do.” He said trembling.
Riiiiigggghhhhttttt, Peter. I'm
sure that's what happened. Ugh, I dislike Peter majorly.
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“Peter, potions were always your strongest subject,” James said doubling over, and talking in great gasps.
Peter was actually good at something? That's hard to believe.
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“Not at all, Ma’am.” he said bowing, and tipping his non existing Stetson. “Come and get your drinks you lazy skunks.” He said cracking up laughing, as he put the drinks down on the garden table. They all thankfully took their drinks and guzzled them down, and went for refills.
Bahahaha, I love his character.
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“Will you Sirius, be his God Father? If something happens to me, or both of us, will you raise, and love him as your own?” James asked being very serious.
*Cries hysterically because she knows what's going to happen* I loved this. It's so amazing and powerful and heart wrenching.
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“When Lily arrived at Kings Cross that day, I snuck over behind her, and started listening to her and Petunia and I noticed you there. I watched you and realized you were a wercat from a book I have on magical creatures thought to be extinct. I was so thankful I was down wind of you so you couldn‘t smell me, cause I knew you would never trust me if you knew I was there, hidden from you and Lily.”
Ahhh, gottchya
I get it now
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Connie Lissy was madly in love with Sirius, and although he finally told her he was madly in love with her, (not his words though) told her he couldn’t commit to her at this time.
So, whatever happens to Lissy? Wait, don't tell me. I'll find out soon, I'm sure.
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It shook him though when the death eaters captured Aurors Frank and Alice Longbottom along with their baby, Neville. He still beats himself up for not saving them. K’Lari scolded him and reminded him that he did save them and the baby, and he himself, narrowly escaped death in the process of the rescue.
Okay, so I won't quote this entire part, but I have to say that I love your take on the entire situation. And the thing with Neville going to be the way he is because he was tortured and the fact that his parents went mad watching it, just Oh My Gosh. It was brilliant and amazingly written. And I just loved every bit.
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He smiled slightly and whispered very weakly. “Hey beautiful, how about a date? We can break out of here and go have some fun. What do ya say?” Then he closed his eyes and lay motionless with the smile still on his face.
Okay, so this is the place where I actually started crying. I completely lost it. I thought he had died at first and then I read the next post, and was like whew! It was still really sad, but cute in a way though.
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Connie It was the evening of Halloween. James and Lily had a fun little party for Harry. They allowed him to ride his little broom Sirius had gotten him for his birthday around the house. Everytime Harry got to a room he would call out, “tick- o- teat,” and hold out his wizard hat. James would pop to that place dressed in a different costume each time, and scare him then give him candy, or such treats, and sometimes a trick, usually a good tickling till Harry nearly fell off of his broom laughing. This went on upstairs and down over the whole house several times. Harry was having such a good time. The routine changed so that when James popped to the place his little man was, Harry would be ready for a very loud, “boo” to his daddy. James would act as if he had just had the worst scare of his life, and Harry just kept laughing. He didn’t care about getting tricks or treats anymore, it was too fun beating daddy at shouting boo! They were all laughing so hard.
So, I just had to qute at least this little bit. It was so precious. I was smiling and chuckling the entire time. So cute
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Connie “Yeah, I notice how broke up you are about it. Thanks.”
Bahaha, I love sarcasm.
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Connie Death Comes To Godric’s Hollow
So, instead of posting this entire chapter, I'll just post the name of the chapter and comment. I cried endlessly through the deaths and then Lily telling Harry that she and James love him and then there was Sirius and his pain when he mourned for James and Lily. I cried so much. I'm tearing up just thinking about it.
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Connie All at once, Peter yelled out that Sirius Black had just murdered Lily and James Potter. Sirius raised his wand and said, “Avad...” but Peter flicked his wand smiling at Sirius, and the street blew up in a horrific explosion. Sirius stood there defeated and null of all reality being lost.
Ugh! Have I mentioned that I can't stand Peter? Because I really can't stand him.
But you wrote the entire thing beautifully and I could picture everything throughout the entire story so far. It's written magnificently and it's definitely one of my favorites here on SS. I love it and can't wait to read more
Your friend,
~Emily
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Alrighty, so I know I'm technically breaking the rules by double posting, but I didn't know how I'd be ablle to quote everything I wanted to by just editing my last one and it's not like it's technically spam or reposting what I've already posted... Besides, I wanted to tell you how amazing you are
Because you are quite amazing. This story is very well written and the story line and uniqueness of it is very intriguing
SO, on to the comments
Here's page five and six! P.S. I'm finally caught up!!!!
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Connie CHAPTER - EIGHTEEN: A Time for Wandering, and Wandering Rewarded
I've decided to just quote the name of the chapter on this one instead of the actual chapter. I think it's brilliant how you tied in all the details to your story. I loved every bit of it.
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His name is Crookshanks.
I'm not going to lie. I really did think Tom was going to end up being Crookshanks. It's brilliant, Connie
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Connie CHAPTER NINETEEN: The Brilliance of Crookshanks
Once again, I love how you tie in the real details with your story. It clears things up and is very clever. I love your take on things.
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“Oh yeah!” Ron said under his breath, “Its love I feel in my heart, what it is.”
Bahahaha, I love Ron.
Oh, and have I mentioned that I LOVE sarcasm?
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Connie CHAPTER TWENTY: Harry Tries To Find Answers
Another fantastic chapter, Connie
I decided not to post everything, but just know that I loved it too
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Connie CHAPTER TWENTY-ONE: Harry’s Questions Answered After All
Fantastic chapter
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“I think he’s very brave!” said Ginny with a big sigh.
Bahaha, I love outburts that are supposed to stay hidden. Funny and cute
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“I most certainly will not put that lousy, putrid, filthy, scum in my mouth. I’ll pull him apart with my paws, then,”
Bahaha, I love his thinking process
And I wouldn't put that git in my mouth either
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“You know Crookshanks, ever sense yesterday when Hermione got you, I’ve… I don’t know, but it seems like I know” At this time, Hermione opened the door.
Why did she have to interrupt? Harry was about to remember!
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Connie CHAPTER TWENTY-TWO: Promise Not To Do What!
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The next morning was total chaos! Percy was upset because his Prefects Badge was missing. He seemed to think he needed to interrogate everyone, instead of getting ready to go. Hermione and Ginny stayed up to late talking and giggling about love interests. They were moving along much to slow for Mrs. Weasley’s way of thinking. The twins were busy playing a joke on the cute chambers maid. It’s best not to be anywhere near their target area until after the joke. Ron was still upset about Hermione being upset with him, and yet going on as if nothing was wrong, but to glare at him when they made eye contact.
I loved this summary of everything
Very amusing and well written
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Uncle Vernon saw me tending to it once and saw the flowers blooming. He said, “I will not put up with your weirdness, trying to get your Aunt brain washed.” While he was choking me to death, the trash truck stopped to get the trash; he threw me to the floor, then grabbed the plant and pitched it in the truck.
WHAT!? He chucked Lily's rose bush gift to Tunney in the trash? The nerve of him! Ugh!
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Connie CHAPTER TWENTY-THREE: Harry Meets the Dementors
Great chappie!
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“Thanks Shanks," he said.
Bahaha, I love his new nickname
Totally cute
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Connie CHAPTER TWENTY-FOUR: Harry Understands His Real Life Nightmare
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When they were up to his upper thigh, he put his hands around the top of his leg.
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“That’s far enough!” he said in an octive higher than his normal voice. Ron was many shades of red, and totally speechless.
Heeheehee! too hilarious
Loved it
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Do you know anything about werecats Lissy?
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At the name, she caught her breath, and put her hand over her mouth. “I had a friend who had a werecat. She didn’t know it was though.”
“Yes, I thought you knew what I was. Thank you for not telling anyone. James and you knew, but for you two, Dumbledore, Hagrid, Remus and McGonagall no one else knew.”
Oooooh, I love how you put her back in this. I was wondering what was going to happen to her. Loving it, Connie
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“It’s my favorite also. My best friend used to sing it all the time. All of us girls had to learn to like it, because --- she sang it all the time when she was feeling down.”
“Yeah, it gives me hope.”
Awe, *cries hysterically* that was soooo precious
I love this
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“You your, it’s you! You’re in my picture of their wedding! You’re standing with my Mum! You were her best friend. She’s the one who sang my favorite song when she was feeling down, Sirius Black was my Dad’s best man, ---- and your friend was sent to Azkaban, he’s your very dear friend, he’s out now, because he escaped, you love him!”
Oh dear. See, I
had wanted him to know, but now, maybe it
is too much for him at one time.
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Lissy had quickly seen where this was heading to and charmed him into total oblivian.
Thank goodness for quick thinking
Fantastic post Connie! And now that I'm all caught up and get rightfully say PLEASE PAMS!!