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Originally Posted by
JazzyJay 
Hungrey Hippo huh?
Nice!
I love it.
Jamie
thanks hunny
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Originally Posted by
SilverTiger 
Okay. Read it.
Ravies pwned the Huffies in Quidditch
Be quiet Rhiannon.
Anyway,
I knew parts of some of this.
is a stalker At least, everything that was mentioned on the train. The duel sounded awesome.
Good job!
lol thanks kristin...for reading and stalking...lol
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Originally Posted by
NicoT *Takes an exceedingly deep breath*
ThemosthardcoreofhardcorereviewsthatConwillevergiv eanyoneeversoSuzypantsbetterconsiderherselfexcepti onallylucky
Part of what I most like about reading this, (besides the Nico mentions
) is your ability to make the diary entries read realistically.
Contrary to popular belief, us males aren't always emotionally stunted cavemen and Suzypants, you have shown that in a really realistic way. Maddox is very much a guy- but you allow his softer side to come through in a way that is only likely to happen
in a journal.
...or maybe as pillowtalk 
I like that you aren't afraid to show Maddox' faults, even though I think there is a lack of evidence of his insecurites- which I
know he has
- but then I guess he'd be the type that wouldn't really want to acknowledge them eh?
As for your writing style; You know I think you are amazing in that regard (rawr Yugioh epic!) and it is actually noticeable as you read through these that you are getting better with how it all flows together (at least in my opinion as a reader)
Everyone should congratulate you for managing to condense the duel down that much......
It took me AGES to clear out my inbox! (of course I saved it
)
and since we are sharing, if anyone wants to read the raw duel RP I'm sure we can be convinced, right Suzypants?
and for my general comments:
I like how Maddox doesn't click about the dry clothes thing
haha
first of all connerpants...let me say i am thoroughly surprised at how huge that comment is...and i completly love it...*squishes her comment like whoa*
personally i know for a fact that guys arent emotional stunted cavemen, i have 2 older brothers, a step brother from my step dad, and step brother from my step mom, and believe me i have seen them all at their worst...emotionaly. my
brotherwiththeegothesizeofrussiawhomis27....ive sat and hugged him while he cried....mmkay....anyways....so i know that emotions like the ones i have presented only come out in a journal,
and sometimes pillowtalk 
and no...he doesnt like to show his insecurities...though if you stalk me and whitney....occasionally he does with lima.
thank you for the compliment on my flow....lol im always worried about that....and connerpants, i believe the other amazingly awesome part of our yugioh epic...is because of how amazingly talented you are as well...and thats the only reason the entry about it is amazing...possibly cuz i rock to...*shrugs innocently*
and i agree...everyone should congratulate me on condensing that yughio epic duel...it was huge...
*pokesyou* you better have saved it..lol
and yus if anyone wants to read the duel just pm me or connerpants and we would be glad to share the yughio epic duel we had...it was....*searching for words worthy of it* amazingly AWESOME.
and lol i thought you would like that...LOL
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Originally Posted by
hermy_weasley Awesome job, babe!
I really liked how you did the Duel. But really, all of it was very good, babe. No need to have worried.
PAMS!
thanks hunny i really appreciate it!
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Originally Posted by
Celandine Why you so paranoid homes?
This is awesome
.....More awesomer than Con
thinks he is
*random thought*
I can see Nico and Maddox in some kind of crazy buddy cop film
Good Cop /Bad Cop?
*sigh* because this is my baby...and it makes me nervous to let it out into the world where anyone can harm it with flaming sporks... *shrugs*
i agree with connerpants on this one...it would be bad cop/worse cop......which i think maddox would be bad cop....Nico would be worse cop....MWAHAHAHA! lol hehe
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Originally Posted by
NicoT *sighs* she's so mean to me.....
Good Cop Bad Cop?
more like Bad Cop, WORSE Cop!
and I forgot to mention....Suzy you totally made Nico sound like a terror with the:
Also...
PAMS
haha.
*petsyouthenpokesyouwithaflamingspork* MWAHAHAA
jk jk...i would never do that....
yup bad cop worse cop makes more sense...
hehe i try
...LOL
and lol to your PAMS....do you even know what it means? lol