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Old 08-22-2009, 06:41 AM   #51 (permalink)
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Another post for Human Nature, kids, the story that's like jam, all sticky and gooey and it really wouldn't do to put it in a jar with itself like those swirly peanut butter and jam jar thingies with the funky peanut looking at you all smilie and wrong on the label ... OMG! Nooooooooooooooooeeeeeeeesssssssssssssssss!!!!1111 1111111

Ali, Safari sounds kewl but it's not if you're looking for graphics, and it runs really slow on my computer ... but then again I have dial up so everything runs like it's running through maple syrup so ... *fires the cannons really slowly*

And thank you for the compliments Ali, *Teddy discreetly hands you a bag of gold and some floo powder*


*Flower* so you got married, wow, congratulations ... it has been a long time

It's kewl that you found your true love and you don't need baseball guy anymore ... I really can't remember his name, but dang he was cute LOL I bet you Lissy remembers ...


Kellybear is love and when she's not being all and or or she's had too much jk I ♥ u.

Kellybear is the unofficial official beta for my story so any grammatical mistakes are her fault or I just pretended she didn't correct me cuz I like Otty grammar better so this next post is for you Kellybear, and she wanted me to post it NOW cuz she just beta'd it, so ... here it is, coming up.


Kita, thank you for reading I think everyone else left and found better stories I can't blame them ... As for the Dumbledore, Snape moment *I'm an old shipper and we never use the slash unless it's H/G or something* I was trying to be very much like the book. I know I'm not JK but I'm trying to channel her ...


And lastly but never leastly, Lissy♥Love, hehehe, you'll notice the chapter titles are still all from 80's rock songs ... google 'em if you wanna know which ones ... though some are so obvious

I can't believe you and Ali like PB, I don't hate it but ... we're not the best of friends ... Kelly made me eat it for a whole summer because she said it was good for my heart and I had so much of it ... PB and banana sandwiches deep fried, PB sandwiches, PB and steak, PB and salad, PB and chocolate ... I just ... well, we're a little awkward around each other right now ...

The shorts are the last horcrux Lissy but that's for the next book I mean this ff's sequel.

My personal theory is that Snape just never had any sweet stuff ... *pets Snape* but after DH ... if you don't love Snape, God will punish you ... seriously the whole Snape and ... OMG! *getsEmo* *Teddy pushes the cameras away and leads Otty into the limo* T: No comment, no comment. *Teddy proceeds to beat up John Stossel and sneaks in Anderson Cooper cuz we like him*


Thank you all for still reading and for all the compliments too ... so ... here's some more ... courtesy of Teddy and me.



Disclaimer: While this chapter doesn't officially contain Ron, he's too cute to ignore ... besides its my fic so ...



Chapter: Don’t turn around, (uh-oh-ooh) The Commissars in town (uh-oh-ooh)


The day that came before the night which brought Ron and Luna a strange visitation by a werewolf dawned. As morning turned to afternoon this fact would remain unknown to Harry, as it had yet to transgress. Harry, who, at that precise moment, contemplated the possibility of Sirius having had a child.

Restless with the censored news coming from the Daily Prophet, annoyed that he was still cooped up with the Dursleys, and at the point of obscene anger at the rotten fate that had chosen him to be 'the chosen one' when he was just a boy who wanted very much to have a very normal life, well, as normal as wizarding folk had, he roamed the streets, his wand out openly slamming against picket fences like a boy running a stick across things.

Harry Potter wanted something, but he didn't know what. Had anyone suggested that he searched for trouble from Death Eaters so openly waving his wand around, walking alone inviting an attack, Harry would have balked at the idea. The facts, however, were hard to deny. The reason behind his untapped rage was this boy Nicholas Black, if indeed that was his name.

Why hadn’t Sirius mentioned he had a son? Who was the boy’s mother? What was this boy to Harry, if indeed he was anything? Too many thoughts were running through Harry Potter’s head all at once and very quickly like trying to make a wish on a falling star before it disappeared.

But broad daylight shined all around him, and there were no stars to be seen in the daylight time sky, none to wish on, not in a park in the middle of Little Whinging, a place no longer safe, if one believed the wizarding newspaper, and the ministry.

On the other side of town, a seemingly quiet neighborhood exploded into violence as four wizards in dark robes entered a muggle residence, attacked the house, tearing and rending everything apart, exploding the windows and setting the place afire, before dragging out a wizard into the street and executing him in front of his family, a paper label attached to the man read: Blood traitor.

This latest attack simply another sign of the escalating nature of the violence the Death Eaters had begun employing in the hope of bringing their war to the eyes of muggles. Only recently, the Department of Mysteries had lost one of its key agents, gone deep under cover to infiltrate a vampire clan, the Maliants. He had last reported that they were already in bed with Lord Voldemort.

Some wizards were happy at the fact that Sebastian Shaw had returned from quiet retirement to save the wizarding world again, bringing with him The Sacred Order of Fallen Knights. Others merely groaned, as they knew the escalating violence the Death Eaters employed would only be matched by the Sacred Order.

Unseen above the city, a steam powered zeppelin floated and within it a brown haired boy sighed, pacing as he threw knives at the walls, testing his agility and marksmanship. Teddy bored easily, and Ottery had not been at their predetermined rendezvous for his pick up.

"Dumb twat probably got himself killed or something stupid like that. Never mind, how am I going to spend my days without someone to amuse me." Teddy sighed. "He'd make a perfect target right about now."

Teddy turned in the split instant of a second, reached behind his back and had flung a knife before he realized someone had knocked and come in. Tiffany, the girl with short black hair and cute kitty ears walked in, as the knife just missed hitting her, thudding as it buried itself in the wood frame of the door next to her cheek. Tiffany sighed, rolled her eyes and continued walking into the room unfazed.

“You’re a wizard, Teddy, seriously. What do you think your wand is for?”

“Waving around,” he replied twirling the end of it and making flowers appear. They fell on the floor all around her.

“I’d volunteer to teach you how to use it, but I fear what danger you’d be then. If you became more apt with your wand, I mean,” the girl replied catching the last flower. It wilted in her hands falling into a small pile of ash at the boy’s feet.

Teddy smiled at that, Tiffany rolled her eyes, and the boy proceeded, “I’m not one of those blokes who thinks the only way to impress a girl is with his wand. I think …”

“The use of excessive violence is the solution to all problems. That friends, like napkins, are disposable. That girls are lap warmers or pretty decor. So, please, spare me the double entendres Teddy D. Bear, I’m well acquainted with your quaint ideas, as well as your other attributes."

"I can kill a man with a stare. I can eat more Peeps than any human alive. I own the complete Beatles collection, in vinyl. I ... Go out to dinner with me Tiffany.”

“I’d sooner eat slugs.”

“Well if French cuisine is your thing …” the boy replied after a pause, “Hey, I put up with Ottery’s poufery, I’m sure I can stomach some creeps or something.”

“They’re called crêpes, and you’re an unqualified, uncultured cretin.” Teddy merely smiled at that, and sidled up to Tiffany who sighed, rolling her eyes yet again. “Ottery has gone missing. Arguably, your best friend. Angel disappeared off the map. As in, we have no idea where he is or where he's working from. There's an evil Dark Lord out on the loose, and his followers are putting everyone in peril. Can you do the math or should I give you the short and swift notes?”

The boy shifted the cigar in his mouth, contemplating for a second if he should correct her -- weren't they called Cliff notes?-- He really didn't know, he'd never used them (why, when you had Ottery? Or you could always tease an answer out of Hermione with a smooth move). He opted not to and took the file away from the girl, all business now.

“This ain’t good. What about the others?”

“You know about Sebastian already, Lord Voldemort wasn’t a part of their group, neither was Grindenwald and he’s still in prison. At the moment, they’re the main threats. Everyone else is either silent or keeping out of sight.”

“Then there’s no need to alert anyone else. I’ll handle this by myself.”

“Typical.” Tiffany replied, “Why are boys so stupid? When are you going to ask for help? When the world is absolutely completely and surely in absolute peril? Do I have to open the Bible and recite you the signs of the end of the world so you know when to follow proper protocols? Or should I …”

“I’m going to be alright, baby. You don’t need to worry. We can still have our dinner date when I get back.”

“Insufferable as,” she exclaimed slamming the door as she left the room.

Teddy smiled.

“She loves me.”

Tiffany would of course have him tailed, and Teddy, of course, would know it and employ every devious tactic at his disposal to lose his tail. Still, it was nice to know she cared.



Author's End Notes: Secret societies, secret alliances, secret crushes (well, maybe not so secret), secret missions and secret admirers, you all still don't know about Teddy's secret love tune in next time kids for ... well ... still, more puzzling secrets ...

Oh, and here's another post ... just to see if you lot are paying attention.


Chapter: When your world is full of strange arrangements and gravity won’t pull you through …


They had quaintly run into each other walking down opposite sides of the street to the same squib vendor who sold copies of The Daily Prophet and other assorted magical items, under the table. They'd coincidentally both gone there to buy black licorice. They'd chosen to do it, serendipitously, at the exact same time.

“You’re not Sirius’ son,” Harry replied angrily. “I don’t know who the hell you think you are, but Sirius Black is not your father.”

“Look Harry, I understand you’re grieving …”

“Just, shut up.” The boy took his wand out of his jean pocket and pointed it at the boy’s heart. It was easy to kill without using a killing curse. One just had to know how. Hermione had written a paper on it only last term, on the ethics of improper use of proper magic. Hermione had also theorized on the possibility and ease of making such a death seem accidental or a natural cause of death. Harry had been very impressed by it.

Nicholas pushed the wand away. “Put that away unless you mean to use it,” the boy said, impatience in every word.

The wand pointed at the boy’s chest again; Nicholas took his out and smacked Harry’s away with it. Lightning crackled as the wands met, and Nicholas took a step back, as did Harry, both of them wanting a little distance so they could spell each other better and not be in the way of the curses.

“You’re a plant,” Harry retorted.

“Yeah, well … you’re a … you’re a fruit, so whatever.”

“I don’t mean a growing plant, you dork. I mean someone’s sent you trying to plant you in my group of friends hoping you and I’ll become best friends so I can reveal my deep dark secrets and you can take it back to Voldemort.”

Nicholas shushed the boy quickly. People were not supposed to use that name and so openly either. Even with the sun shining brightly in the sky a shiver ran down the boy’s spine.

“You’re as full of yourself as he said you were,” Nicholas replied.

“Shut up about him. You didn’t know him!” Harry yelled back, sending a thunderbolt from the end of his wand. It landed between the boy's feet. People from around the local shops started to look in curious wonder. They hadn't thought they'd seen what they'd seen, and most of them went about their business, but a few noticed that the boys were quarrelling.

“Whatever. I thought we could talk but you’re obviously daft,” Nicholas shot back. “I’m not wasting my time with you.” Those words said, the boy started walking out of the little city park.

All Harry could think was that it was a trap. If he stopped the boy he would be falling into a trap. But there were so many unanswered questions he had about Sirius, and about that boy.




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*whistles* Wow! Talk about fighting! Harry's got a point! I wonder if Nicholas is actually Sirius Black's son? Hm... So confusing! I couldn't help laughing at the part when Teddy was asking Tiffany out. That was so funny! Hope they save Ottery! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
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Hello & Welcome Connie to the world's greatest fanfic, at least the author seems to think so I hope you're liking my story, and I wanted to ask you, what did you mean when you said, you're finding me difficult to follow? I love criticism it helps me to get better at writing and I wanted some help. Do you mean my sentences are too complicated? Is the story too complicated? Too many characters, too much going on, what? It sounds like an interrogation now but seriously, I'd love it if you told me, I'm sure it's not you. My style of writing is very uhm, well, I like long sentences and long descriptions and a lot of people don't like it because it's too slow. Is that it? I really do want to know what you think, if you want you can PM me. I promise, I'm nice. And I really do appreciate ALL criticism. Neways, welcome to my fic, and I hope you don't mind the mysteries, I do that on purpose to hopefully keep the readers coming back. I guess if you come back, then it means it works, no?

Kita, you're always here, you're too cool. I'm glad you thought Teddy was funny. He's dangerous too, but you'll see that later. As for Ottery's fate I've been known to kill characters before in mid-fic, just sayin' *adds mystery and drama to fic* hey I try. As for Nicholas being Sirius' son ... well, his won't be the only paternity you'll be wondering about before this fic is over I shouldn't 'a said tha' ... I shouldn't 'a said tha' ...

So ... here's more of my fic, I hope you all like it. Don't forget to wish Rupert a Happy Birthday he's too cute, and he plays Ron wonderfully if not enough, I don't think he gets enough screen time ...




Chapter: Shooting at the walls of heartache. Bang! Bang! I am the warrior …


Cafe Mondrian sat on a quiet street next to the business district. It was here where all the traders, lawyers, and businessmen usually spent all their day in the buildings located there, conducting their affairs. This made it an ideal spot, because there were not many businesses with customers or places for people to want to stop and loiter, such as restaurants or shops. Most often, you had business on Wildbee Street or you didn't.

The girl with the mousy brown hair had business at that cafe. She had just come off her shift standing watch over 'the chosen one' and she did not have to report back to the office in London for another hour. Done, easily enough, with a quick broom ride or an owl post with her report.

“Thank you for agreeing to meet with me,” the girl said, brushing her hair out of her face. “After the way we left last time …” she let the silence serve as unspoken reminder.

“Nymphadora,” he began.

“Don’t. Just … don’t call me that,” she complained, the spark of her old flame lighting suddenly in her voice. This caused him to smile weakly.

“Dora,” he teased.

“You act like that and … I’m supposed to just … I’m supposed to ignore this?” she asked obstinately.

“I’m being a friend Nymphadora. I’m throwing around happy banter. I need it, in case the tattered robes don’t give it away.”

“I know you’re having a hard time. I heard it from Mundungus. I ... just wanted to know how you were making out since … well, since Sirius’ death. I know you two were very close and …”

“I’m fine,” Lupin replied too quickly, something inside him clicked at the utterance of the question and like an answering machine coming on, with it's pre-recorded response, Lupin replied rotely.

“No, you’re not. Why won’t you let me help you?” Tonks kept on. “It’s not like it has anything to do with the other thing.”

“I’m an old man Nymphadora. You’ve got your whole life ahead of you and I’m seeing my second wizarding war. You’re barely out of school and I’ve taught at school.”

“There’s always a different reason with you Remus, it’s ridiculous. I wish you’d just settle on one. Any which way you cut it, it works, doesn't it? Because in the end it's your choice, isn't it?” She replied rather crossly, turning away from him. Tonks brushed a strand of hair behind her ears, and she continued, “As I said, this has nothing to do with … with my feelings towards you. I’m trying to be a friend and even at that you’re pushing me away. You’re not being fair at all, Lupin.”

“Perhaps not, but I’m rather occupied, what with the things Dumbledore has me doing for the Order and trying to make a living and,” Lupin stared out the window and saw the brown haired boy Nicholas walking down the street, “my own personal affairs. Look Tonks, I’m sorry to have to cut this short.”

Tonks dropped a couple of crumpled bills on the table, “Don’t worry about it. Don’t worry about anything Remus. I’m sure I’ll grow up soon enough and realize, like you seem to have, that love really doesn’t mean anything in this world. Then maybe it’ll be my turn to break some poor bloke’s heart.”



“Is that him?” the first man asked. He with the mousy voice, tall and reedy looking.

“He was seen with the target, just take him. If we’re wrong, well it’s not one of ours now is it?” the second wizard, the short stout one with the deep bass voice, replied laughing.

Nicholas Black walked down the drizzly street, his hands in his jacket pockets. In one he held a wand, in the other a fist ready to punch. He was still reeling from the confrontation earlier that day with Harry Potter. That obnoxious little brat was supposed to be the ‘chosen one’? Who the hell had ever heard of the ‘chosen one of anything’ coming from a nowhere place like Little Whinging, seriously, seriously?

Nicholas, lost in his thoughts, did not notice from the reflection of the chrome bumper of a Mini that out of an alley behind him two black robed strangers had just stepped out and started following him. As he neared a little muggle café Nicholas realized the streets were abnormally empty for a busy Tuesday afternoon during lunchtime. Nicholas stopped at the corner to cross the street and felt something on his back.

“If you value your …” Before the person could finish talking the boy had fallen to the floor in a fainted heap.

“What? You’re serious?” the first wizard complained. The mousy voiced one, disbelievingly watched his friend holding the unconscious boy in his arms.

“Help me with him, you fudge bag, he’s heavy,” the stout, short one complained.

“I thought we were supposed to be killing him.”

“He might be able to tell us something interesting under torture, you thorax,” the stout one complained, breathing heavily under the weight of the fainted boy.

“If he can stay awake long enough,” the thin man said putting his wand in his pocket, walking around his companion and making to grab the boy’s legs.

Suddenly, Nicholas looked up at him. “No thank you. I’d rather not find out if I can stomach torture,” Nicholas replied kicking out his legs and hitting the man full in the face. The thin mousy voiced man fell to the floor as the shorter wizard dropped Nicholas. Before he could reach his wand however, Nicholas was biting his leg causing him to scream out in pain. That bought Nicholas a couple of seconds, enough to crawl under a car. “Holy fish,” he exclaimed, “these jokers mean business.”

He saw one of the Death Eaters duck down at the front of the car and Nicholas fired off a hex. He felt a tug and turned around to find the other Death Eater pulling his leg and Nicholas fired off a Confundus charm. The spell went wide. And as the Death Eater stood smiling Nicholas kicked out with his other leg and knocked the man back down on his bum. If he kept kicking that guy in the face it wouldn't be long before the Death Eater started spitting out teeth.

Suddenly, the car began to rise, and Nicholas saw the Death Eater who had been holding the wand to his back, the short stout one, smiling cruelly, his intent clearly written on his face. He meant to let the car drop on top of the boy, forget the questioning. Nicholas doubted he had the strength to cast a spell to stop it.

“Die you little slag!” the man yelled, and the shadow grew larger as the car came falling at Nicholas.

Protego!”

The car stopped in mid drop. The boy looked up from between his arms which covered his face.

“Well, are you planning to just lie there all day? I don’t know how much longer I can hold this car up,” Tonks asked rather crossly at the strange boy.

Incendio!” Lupin yelled firing off a volley at the Death Eater with the swollen nose. The thin man deftly swiped the spell away. Members of the Order simply did not know how to fight.

Avada—

Stupefy!” Nicholas yelled at the thin man with the swollen nose, knocking him to his knees. He ran towards the Death Eater who had meant to crush him with the car. Tonks, busy holding it up, could not defend herself.

“Do you think you can stop me before I cast a spell?” the Death Eater laughed.

Nicholas would not get to him on time, he could see the spell flying at the speed of magic and he was still too far away.

Before he even reached the sidewalk, Nicholas saw the Death Eater knocked down by a baby blue Buick which sent him crashing into one of the business offices on the street. The boy turned and saw a blast of windows shattering as Tonks created a shield, deflecting Death Eater's hex.

“Blasted fool, what the hel were you thinking trying to hex me when I’m holding up a car!” Tonks yelled at the perpetrator.

Lupin ran over to where Tonks stood, breathing quickly and nervously, the thin mousy voiced Death Eater dangled tied up from a street lamp on the side of the road.

“I'm okay. It’s okay. I’ll call this one in," she looked around at the devastation they had created in less than five minutes. It was worthy of Teddy. "Damn the paperwork. Scrimgeour’s going to have my wand for this. Flinging cars in broad daylight on a muggle city street.”

Nicholas walked over to where the car was half sitting outside of an office window, and inside the Death Eater lay pinned under the car moaning in pain while a secretary asked him how he planned to pay for the damages, and informed him she had no intention nor was she responsible and she would be taking the rest of the day off, they didn't pay her enough to survive car attacks.

“This is crazy, this is,” the boy remarked laughing. Nicholas couldn’t help finding it all comical, never mind that the minutes before could have been the last minutes he’d have had on this earth.

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It's the Second Road to Death and no, I didn't start a new fic, hunny. The reason that I have two FF's up is because I started Us last year, and it's still going on. =D The Second Road to Death is my latest one, so don't worry. =p



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Aw! I love Remus and Tonks! Remus, you know you love Tonks! Good plan Nicholas! I was laughing so much when he kicked one of the Death Eaters in the face! Ha! That was hilarious! I was laughing so much! I'm glad Remus and Tonks came along to help Nicholas. Go them! And the car in the window of the office was simply too funny! And the assistant shouting at the Death Eater! Ha! Great post! Loved it! Can't wait for more!
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As if that wasn't enough action to keep you all awake at nights wondering how Ottery's shorts are a horcrux, then I don't how you all sleep at nights? *realizes that sentence makes no sense* Teddy will fire the cannons at anyone who objects. You have been warned.
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“Oh, I don’t worry about the muggles. I took every precaution,” the headmaster replied twirling around the small study in his muggle disguise, a pair of plaid red and white pants, a purple shirt, yellow vest, and bright almost blindingly so, pink jacket.
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I have to go pick up Harry Potter, he’ll be staying with me until term begins.”
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The day that came before the night which brought Ron and Luna a strange visitation by a werewolf dawned.
Okay, wait. I'm a little confuzeled This is before Harry's car chase, is it not? Then why does he already know about Nicolas?


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On the other side of town, a seemingly quiet neighborhood exploded into violence as four wizards in dark robes entered a muggle residence, attacked the house, tearing and rending everything apart, exploding the windows and setting the place afire, before dragging out a wizard into the street and executing him in front of his family, a paper label attached to the man read: Blood traitor.
Super scary...and so close to Harry too

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Some wizards were happy at the fact that Sebastian Shaw had returned from quiet retirement to save the wizarding world again, bringing with him The Sacred Order of Fallen Knights. Others merely groaned, as they knew the escalating violence the Death Eaters employed would only be matched by the Sacred Order.
The Sacred Order of Fallen Knights. Very cool sounding. 'Fallen', huh? As in 'descended into the depths of darkness used by the enemy, i.e Voldermort'? I wanna see Seb in action!


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Unseen above the city, a steam powered zeppelin floated and within it a brown haired boy sighed, pacing as he threw knives at the walls, testing his agility and marksmanship.
He's throwing knives at the zeppelin's walls? *imagines a balloon popping* Teddy's crazy!


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“The use of excessive violence is the solution to all problems. That friends, like napkins, are disposable. That girls are lap warmers or pretty decor.
Oh, my It made me sad to think of Teddy like this


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“Hey, I put up with Ottery’s poufery, I’m sure I can stomach some creeps or something.”

“They’re called crêpes, and you’re an unqualified, uncultured cretin.”
My mom called them 'Crehpehs' once


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“Then there’s no need to alert anyone else. I’ll handle this by myself.”
*slaps Teddy* *shows Teddy DH* See? Even 'The Chosen One' needed help!

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It was easy to kill without using a killing curse. One just had to know how. Hermione had written a paper on it only last term, on the ethics of improper use of proper magic. Hermione had also theorized on the possibility and ease of making such a death seem accidental or a natural cause of death. Harry had been very impressed by it.
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“You’re a plant,” Harry retorted.

“Yeah, well … you’re a … you’re a fruit, so whatever.”
I didn't get that at first either I was like "Geez, great diss, Harry. *roll eyes*"


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“I don’t mean a growing plant, you dork. I mean someone’s sent you trying to plant you in my group of friends hoping you and I’ll become best friends so I can reveal my deep dark secrets and you can take it back to Voldemort.”
I didn't even think of that! Woah, Harry's being smart/paranoid! *glomps him*


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what did you mean when you said, you're finding me difficult to follow?
Don't freak out I sometimes have that issue. Like when I'm not concentrating completely or when I'm too excited to read at a normal pace You just write differently to what I'm used to reading. Which btw, is most definitely not a bad thing. In fact, it makes you more interesting


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“Nymphadora,” he began.
“Don’t. Just … don’t call me that,” she complained, the spark of her old flame lighting suddenly in her voice. This caused him to smile weakly.
“Dora,” he teased.
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“I’m being a friend Nymphadora. I’m throwing around happy banter. I need it, in case the tattered robes don’t give it away.”

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Tonks dropped a couple of crumpled bills on the table, “Don’t worry about it. Don’t worry about anything Remus. I’m sure I’ll grow up soon enough and realize, like you seem to have, that love really doesn’t mean anything in this world. Then maybe it’ll be my turn to break some poor bloke’s heart.”
I put these under the same quote cause I had the same message: Awww! :sob:


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“If you value your …” Before the person could finish talking the boy had fallen to the floor in a fainted heap.



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Suddenly, Nicholas looked up at him. “No thank you. I’d rather not find out if I can stomach torture,”
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Nicholas doubted he had the strength to cast a spell to stop it.

Protego!”

The car stopped in mid drop. The boy looked up from between his arms which covered his face.

“Well, are you planning to just lie there all day? I don’t know how much longer I can hold this car up,” Tonks asked rather crossly at the strange boy.
Wow. I'm glad Tonks is an Auror She's too awesome

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Nicholas walked over to where the car was half sitting outside of an office window, and inside the Death Eater lay pinned under the car moaning in pain while a secretary asked him how he planned to pay for the damages, and informed him she had no intention nor was she responsible and she would be taking the rest of the day off, they didn't pay her enough to survive car attacks.


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Unseen above the city, a steam powered zeppelin floated and within it a brown haired boy sighed, pacing as he threw knives at the walls, testing his agility and marksmanship. Teddy bored easily, and Ottery had not been at their predetermined rendezvous for his pick up.

"Dumb twat probably got himself killed or something stupid like that. Never mind, how am I going to spend my days without someone to amuse me." Teddy sighed. "He'd make a perfect target right about now."

Teddy turned in the split instant of a second, reached behind his back and had flung a knife before he realized someone had knocked and come in. Tiffany, the girl with short black hair and cute kitty ears walked in, as the knife just missed hitting her, thudding as it buried itself in the wood frame of the door next to her cheek. Tiffany sighed, rolled her eyes and continued walking into the room unfazed.

“You’re a wizard, Teddy, seriously. What do you think your wand is for?”

“Waving around,” he replied twirling the end of it and making flowers appear. They fell on the floor all around her.

“I’d volunteer to teach you how to use it, but I fear what danger you’d be then. If you became more apt with your wand, I mean,” the girl replied catching the last flower. It wilted in her hands falling into a small pile of ash at the boy’s feet.

Teddy smiled at that, Tiffany rolled her eyes, and the boy proceeded, “I’m not one of those blokes who thinks the only way to impress a girl is with his wand. I think …”

“The use of excessive violence is the solution to all problems. That friends, like napkins, are disposable. That girls are lap warmers or pretty decor. So, please, spare me the double entendres Teddy D. Bear, I’m well acquainted with your quaint ideas, as well as your other attributes."

"I can kill a man with a stare. I can eat more Peeps than any human alive. I own the complete Beatles collection, in vinyl. I ... Go out to dinner with me Tiffany.”

“I’d sooner eat slugs.”

“Well if French cuisine is your thing …” the boy replied after a pause, “Hey, I put up with Ottery’s poufery, I’m sure I can stomach some creeps or something.”

“They’re called crêpes, and you’re an unqualified, uncultured cretin.” Teddy merely smiled at that, and sidled up to Tiffany who sighed, rolling her eyes yet again. “Ottery has gone missing. Arguably, your best friend. Angel disappeared off the map. As in, we have no idea where he is or where he's working from. There's an evil Dark Lord out on the loose, and his followers are putting everyone in peril. Can you do the math or should I give you the short and swift notes?”

The boy shifted the cigar in his mouth, contemplating for a second if he should correct her -- weren't they called Cliff notes?-- He really didn't know, he'd never used them (why, when you had Ottery? Or you could always tease an answer out of Hermione with a smooth move). He opted not to and took the file away from the girl, all business now.

“This ain’t good. What about the others?”

“You know about Sebastian already, Lord Voldemort wasn’t a part of their group, neither was Grindenwald and he’s still in prison. At the moment, they’re the main threats. Everyone else is either silent or keeping out of sight.”

“Then there’s no need to alert anyone else. I’ll handle this by myself.”

“Typical.” Tiffany replied, “Why are boys so stupid? When are you going to ask for help? When the world is absolutely completely and surely in absolute peril? Do I have to open the Bible and recite you the signs of the end of the world so you know when to follow proper protocols? Or should I …”

“I’m going to be alright, baby. You don’t need to worry. We can still have our dinner date when I get back.”

“Insufferable as,” she exclaimed slamming the door as she left the room.

Teddy smiled.

“She loves me.”

Tiffany would of course have him tailed, and Teddy, of course, would know it and employ every devious tactic at his disposal to lose his tail. Still, it was nice to know she cared.



I've read it countless (seriously countless) times, and I still love it.

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A Poem for Kelly or no. 11 or ...

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Love Is In The Air
Love is not caught with hook or snair,
As it glides gently in the air.
If you grab and take by force,
It will rip and tear of course.
If you want true love, be smart,
Open up your lonely heart.
When the one whose meant for you,
Stops and hears your longing coo,
This will unlock that heart, you'll see,
Come in, come in, it's only plea,
I only beat for me and thee.
Love is free for all to pair,
As it glides gently in the air.

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Nice poem Connie ... did you write it?

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Chapter: Who can it be now, knocking at my door? No way, don’t come round here no more …

Ron and Luna turned away for a second, to look at one another, as if to ask, ‘should we believe this bloke? He comes out of nowhere, naked, in the middle of the night and expects us to just be completely okay with that? Then he delivers a threat to one of our closest friends. I’m supposed to trust him? Did I mention he’s a werewolf?’ In that instant, while they looked at one another, the boy disappeared as mysteriously as he had appeared with a stealth and silence that awed Ron and made Luna pensive.

They took their wands out and set the alarm. In seconds, lights lit up in every room of the Burrow. Wands were in everyone’s hands, people rushed up and down stairs, and Arthur Weasley called in aurors from the ministry to patrol the grounds around the house. He could still be around the Burrow or in the village nearby.

Molly Weasley scolded and hugged the children, then scolded them some more. Then Ron and Luna were questioned by Mr. Weasley and Kingsley Shacklebolt, but there was nothing much to say, except to Mrs. Weasley’s queries about what they were doing out late together. No, they were not making out, or meeting for a secret rendezvous, which made Ron blush every shade of red in the spectrum and made Luna look even more puzzled than usual.

With nothing to go on and no tracks or scent to follow, not even the tinge of magic being used to apparate in or out, the majority of the aurors left without a single clue but what little Luna and Ron had told them. Those who stayed were stationed outside the Burrow, should the crook try to return. Whoever the werewolf boy was, he had a knack for covering his tracks.

It was only because it was Arthur Weasley vouching for Ron that the aurors did not just laugh it all off as a couple of lovesick teenagers startled while making out in the woods.

Bill looked at Ron with a new found respect, while Fleur went on about ‘zee terribul danger zey must ’ave bin in’, aggravating Mrs. Weasley, which amused Ginny who had woken up unhappily, having her slumber disturbed so early and then to find that it had been with threats on Harry Potter’s life in what was obviously a trap.

“All I know is that if they’re threatening Harry here, Ron,” Bill said, “then it’s likely to be a trap. Why not warn Harry directly? Why all the subterfuge when you could send an owl or find some other way to send Harry a message? Am I the only one who thought about a protean charm?”

“Zat iz becauze you are tres brilliant, mon amour,” Fleur exclaimed walking around the kitchen cutting the bread and doling out bowls of soup and drinks. Mrs. Weasley sat at one end of the table arms crossed.

“What are we going to do about it?” Ron asked his parents.

“For now we’ve done all we can,” Mrs. Weasley remarked. “We’ve told Dumbledore. Dumbledore will alert the Order. We’re sending Harry an owl asking him to come here. Now we just sit and wait for Dumbledore to bring Harry to the Burrow, where he‘ll be safe.” That last didn’t sound very convincing to anyone.

“But is that enough, Mum?” Ron asked. “Harry’s in a lot of danger, and …”

“We’re all of us in a lot of danger with the Death Eaters lurking around. You shouldn’t be out so late either dear,” Mrs. Weasley said admonishing Luna who sat at the table eating a bowl of soup; next to her Ginny rolled her eyes in an unspoken apology. “You’ll spend the night here, of course. I’ll send your father an owl Luna so he knows not to worry about you and … well, Arthur’s having some of the boys from the office stay around to watch the property, and just the same I don’t want anyone leaving this house any time without first asking me.”

“But, Mum …” Ron and Ginny started.

“No one!” Mrs. Weasley yelled in a tone that did not invite arguing. “Now off to bed the lot of you, as soon as you’re done eating Luna love.”

“Thank you Mrs. Weasley but you really shouldn’t worry. If the nargles and that werewolf didn’t get me there’s really not much to worry about, even if it is a full moon night.”

“Just the same love, I’d feel a lot safer with you spending the night here.” Luna simply nodded.

Mrs. Weasley was not one to be argued against and Luna never saw a point in arguing with anyone when there was no chance of winning. Normally, Luna would do whatever she felt like anyway, but in this instant her desires coincided with those of Mrs. Weasley.

As soon as Arthur and Molly had gone upstairs Ron rushed to write Hermione a letter, with Pigwidgeon fluttering happily all around him. Eroll lay dead on the laundry basket, or at least by all appearances, the poor beast.

“Zees is highly zuspect Bill,” Fleur said airily.

“I know, love. But don’t worry your pretty little head about it. We’ve only really got two choices. We let the Order handle it or we walk into a trap. Either way someone is walking into a trap and it’s better if those of us in the Order handle it.”

“You should let me help you all,” Fleur said quietly.

“We’ve talked about this, Fleur,” Bill said, “I don’t … I worry about you. I don’t want you in trouble. It’s enough that you’re a target just because we’re together and they’ve already got a hit on all us Weasleys.”

“But Bill …”

“If anything ever happened to you,” he said and didn’t finish.

Fleur threw herself into his arms where he sat at the table and hugged him. She put her head next to his chest and heard his heart beat. He buried his face in her hair and stroked her back.

“I love you,” they both said at the same time.

Ginny, and Luna sighed, and looked away.

After that tender scene Fleur and Bill went up to their separate rooms, though everyone knew they talked to each other through the walls or sent each other fluttering origami love notes. They knew because Ron had tried intercepting one and it had attacked him.

“So, what do you think we should do about it?” Luna asked her friends, now they were alone.

“We should go find Harry, of course,” Ginny replied. “I don’t know I’m tired of being cooped up in the Burrow most days and all night, it’s getting old. I wouldn’t mind a little adventure, and it’s not as if we don’t know how to defend ourselves.”

“Then let’s tell Ron when he comes down,” Luna replied.

“I don’t know. If Hermione decides to floo here then you know he’s not going to want to leave without her, and I don’t know if Hermione would agree to it.”

“We could always hex her,” Luna replied. "There's two of us, and only one of her. Do you think we could use the Imperius curse? Professor Moody taught it to us, only it turned out not to be Professor Moody but Barty Crouch Jr. who was a Death Eater and ... well, it was an interesting year all around."

"I remember Luna. I was there," Ginny replied giggling.




Author's End Note: I'm sorry the story is going so slow ... but I promise after the BIG fight scene we move on to Hogwarts and then the real war begins. There will be casualties, and uhm, more parental questions ...
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I wanted to say THANK YOU Obi-Wan K'Lari, & Connie for the really sweet words you said about my work. I forgot to thank you ladies earlier. And Connie your poem is really cool, you should leave it up here. I really liked it, I might even quote it in my story, if you leave it up. Maybe

mione I haven't seen you in ages ... I'm glad you're here ... My next post is for you, 'kay?

Kellybear, well you got the poem so ... you want thanks with that? No fries? Ketchup?

Senorita Maxie, you're always around ... I love that you're reading. I need to check your fics. You're too massively talented to keep up with alla time.

Neways, that's all for replies, I really do appreciate you all for reading. Writing a fic can be very difficult since it's such a lonely endevour but when you've got nice, sweet, awesomely cool readers constantly giving you motivation ... it makes it easier along the way.

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Hello Connie & Kita, thank you for all the nice words, and for showing up at my fic. You two are here the most often so that must mean you like it.

I will try to work your poem into my fic Connie, I know I can because I did it once before with a poem another friend of mine wrote ... I just wish I remembered what poem and what fic I've written too many, I have at least 11 story threads on SS some of them are for shorts but wow that's a lot. Feel free to read them if you like but some of them aren't all that good. But I'd rather you all stick around for this one if you can read only one because this one is my MASTERPIECE or at least I'm trying to make it so.

Kita I'm glad you find my fic funny. I try very hard to balance the humor with the darkness, and boy will it get dark sometimes in this fic *pulls out wand* Lumos! You can't be too careful, there might be Death Eaters lurking about. Neways, I'm glad you find it funny sometimes, I've got more humor and not a little bit of darkness coming up. Soon ... if not in this next post.


And since you all asked so sweetly ... here's another post ... instead of just me talking which I do a lot of.




Chapter: All I’m saying, it takes a lot to love you … all I’m doing, you know it’s true, … all I mean now, there’s one thing that turns this gray sky to blue … that’s the look of love …


Hong Kong, China

The Chinese castle stood imperiously on a hill overlooking the bright city, just outside of its reach. It was easily defensible, standing on a hill anyone who tried to take the castle would have an up hill battle. Boulders and a forest surrounded the castle making it even more defensible. It was here the Chinese triads were holding Ottery, though not for much longer.

“In typical Ottery fashion you’ve proven to be completely and utterly useless,” Rodolphus exclaimed, slapping the boy hard across the face with his glove.

Ottery hung down from the dungeon wall, his wrists in shackles, his head bent down staring at the dirt floor. “I don’t know, I think my friends might disagree seeing as I haven’t spilled all their secrets,” the boy replied quietly. It would be goodbye to this dirty cell soon.

“Take him away before I execute him right here,” the Death Eater commanded. Two other men dressed in dark robes with no masks, but rather swords strapped to their hips, made no qualms about the fact they were also carrying guns. They walked over to follow Rodolphus commands. The Hong Kong wizarding triads worried less about hiding their magic than western magic users.

“Wait, does that mean you are executing me?” Ottery asked nervously. “Great, cue the super hero rescue now.”

“I’m afraid not Ottery. No one is going to swoop in and save you. What’s more, it’s not likely anyone will remember you, or even notice you missing. Not with all the things we’ve got planned for your troupe of friends and the Dark Lord’s ascension.”

Rodolphus led the way slowly down dark hallways. The two men pushed the boy ahead of them. Ottery dragged his feet, and pretended to be tired and defeated. His head hung low. He looked up to see a shaft of bright light suddenly before him. It came from the top of a staircase, and the boy did not need to pretend blinking as he climbed up into an empty courtyard. He did not know how long it had been since he had seen the sun or open sky.

“So, it’s an old fashioned firing squad execution then?” the boy asked as he was led to stand in front of a stone wall and his eyes came into focus.

“Something like that,” Rodolphus replied as someone put a noose around the boy’s neck. “A firing squad, a hanging, a stoning,” and Ottery could see the giant boulders at either side that they likely meant to levitate and slam against each other with him in the center, “a scalding,” and here Rodolphus pointed to a large cauldron filled with molten hot oil, on a device that would pull up the rope and tighten the noose while tipping over the giant cauldron and spilling the hot contents on the boy. “There’s also the archers up along the battlements, and if you should survive all of that or even if you don’t we’re going to behead you when it’s all done.”

“Well that’s awful thoughtful of you,” Ottery replied.

“We’re giving the Dark Lord your head for his trophy room. First yours, then Harry Potter, and finally Dumbledores.”

“At least I’ll be in good company.”

“You’re not getting out of this one Ottery St. Catchpole. You will not survive. You will not be around to thwart any more of our master’s grand schemes. Either through your blundering or your fool's luck.”

“All of this is because of that little rumor running around that I’m immortal, isn’t it? Because I can assure you, I’m not. So you really don’t need all of the archers, or the vat of boiling oil or … stuff.”

Exactly how he was going to get out of this the dark haired boy had no idea. Evading Nazi's during the forties had been difficult. The Bolshevik revolution had presented problems, as had the Titanic and the Hindenburg, but this. This, could possibly kill him. It was no wonder really the legends had sprung up that Ottery was immortal. He had just been really lucky for a very long time, and now it seemed that luck had run out.

“Too many people before me have failed already Ottery St. I don’t plan to fail the Dark Lord. Sadly, I can’t say the same for you.” With those words Rodolphus Lestrange stepped back and a row of dark robed wizards all wearing the silver masks of Death Eaters stood before the boy.

“Yeah, well ... uhm, I've never failed the Dark Lord, you see I was never one of his minions so ... yeah, you got that wrong. You know what else ... uh ... this isn’t really a hanging. As it is ... it's ... it's a stringing you know? I mean, in a hanging the floor would give out under me, but since you all are just going to …”

Rodolphus signaled someone and the noose tightened around the boy pulling him off the ground. His legs were left kicking air.

“You’ve already spent enough of your life talking O, just die!” Rodolphus took out his wand and pointed it at the boy, “fire!”

Avada Kedavra!” half a dozen voices sang out.

Ottery felt a feeling of falling suddenly. It felt as if all his worries were behind him. “I wonder if this is what heaven is like? Am I dying?”

“If you were going to heaven you wouldn’t be falling, now would you?” Teddy’s familiar voice rang in his head.

“Oh, crap …”


AEN: That's it for now kids, I'll be back with more fic ... and the fate of Harry and his friends ... *is being ominous* or maybe a surprise appearance by Sebastian. I've been keeping him locked up because he's ... uhm, well now that he's back he's going to be visiting old friends ...
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In that instant, while they looked at one another, the boy disappeared as mysteriously as he had appeared. A stealth and silence that awed Ron and made Luna pensive.
I love how you described them together I sense a L/R ship coming on Though that would be adorable

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Except, no, to Mrs. Weasley’s queries about what they were doing out late together. No, they were not making out, or meeting for a secret rendezvous, which made Ron blush every shade of red in the spectrum and made Luna look even more puzzled than usual.
Very Ron-the blushing And very Luna too

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Eroll lay dead on the laundry basket, or at least by all appearances, the poor beast.
Oh gosh, I had a heart attack here

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After that tender scene Fleur and Bill went up to their separate rooms, though everyone knew they talked to each other through the walls or sent each other fluttering origami love notes. They knew because Ron had tried intercepting one and it had attacked him.
I love the way you describe Bill and Fleur's relationship! Just how I imagined it- minus the origami love notes Nice touch, by the way.

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Do you think we could use the Imperius curse?
Okay, that creeped me out a little, I must admit.

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I just posted the banner up on the first post of the story ... yay, me. I did it with really good pictures and really bad MSpaint or something go check it out, or I'll post it here with the next post
Yush! I love it! Especially the text

And you're welcome 'Tis only the truth though

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I'll post again soon ... but I think I need to write a few deaths in first ... am I doing the romance to subtle? Let me know ... the banner's kind of ... uhm, there to trick you and before anyone gets smart and says Voldemort/Cormac or Voldemort/Hermione, the answer is No smartypants. Maybe I'll add Teddy and Me to the banner laters ... maybe ... no promises.
A few deaths? *chants* Please not Ron, please not Harry, please not Hermione, please not Luna, please not ginny, please not Otty, please not Teddy, please not DD ...um...ect
I can't wait for the next post...oh, lookie! You're online
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Slow down you naughty Otter! You are leaving me behind! I have a busy bunch of days at work and when I have good quality time to read... I'm four posts behind! I am teasing, of course, since who wouldn't love to have lots of good stuff to read? It's just my habit to be in on each post before the next happens. *greedy like that*

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I'll make a few quotes from the first post I am reading and come back for more.




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Why hadn’t Sirius mentioned he had a son? Who was the boy’s mother? What was this boy to Harry, if indeed he was anything?
I too am hoping for the answers to this!

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This latest attack simply another sign of the escalating nature of the violence the Death Eaters had begun employing in the hope of bringing their war to the eyes of muggles. Only recently, the Department of Mysteries had lost one of its key agents, gone deep under cover to infiltrate a vampire clan, the Maliants. He had last reported that they were already in bed with Lord Voldemort.
Vampires? *ears perk up*

I loved the convo between Tedd and Tiffany. No sense in quoting it all. I just loved the dialogue.

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"I can kill a man with a stare. I can eat more Peeps than any human alive. I own the complete Beatles collection, in vinyl. I ... Go out to dinner with me Tiffany.”
But honestly, who can argue with attributes like this?



Ok, one more post. I have to read one more. Can't help it.


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“Nymphadora,” he began.

“Don’t. Just … don’t call me that,” she complained, the spark of her old flame lighting suddenly in her voice. This caused him to smile weakly.
You capture Remus and Tonks so well in this whole exchange. Love it.

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“I’m being a friend Nymphadora. I’m throwing around happy banter. I need it, in case the tattered robes don’t give it away.”
And that he just goes and calls her that again. Perfect.

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“I’m an old man Nymphadora. You’ve got your whole life ahead of you and I’m seeing my second wizarding war. You’re barely out of school and I’ve taught at school.”
And again.


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Nicholas Black walked down the drizzly street, his hands in his jacket pockets. In one he held a wand, in the other a fist ready to punch. He was still reeling from the confrontation earlier that day with Harry Potter. That obnoxious little brat was supposed to be the ‘chosen one’? Who the hell had ever heard of the ‘chosen one of anything’ coming from a nowhere place like Little Whinging, seriously, seriously?


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Suddenly, Nicholas looked up at him. “No thank you. I’d rather not find out if I can stomach torture,” Nicholas replied kicking out his legs and hitting the man full in the face. The thin mousy voiced man fell to the floor as the shorter wizard dropped Nicholas. Before he could reach his wand however, Nicholas was biting his leg causing him to scream out in pain. That bought Nicholas a couple of seconds, enough to crawl under a car. “Holy fish,” he exclaimed, “these jokers mean business.”
This guy is cool. But what do you expect with a name like Black?

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“Well, are you planning to just lie there all day? I don’t know how much longer I can hold this car up,” Tonks asked rather crossly at the strange boy.

“Incendio!” Lupin yelled firing off a volley at the Death Eater with the swollen nose. The thin man deftly swiped the spell away. Members of the Order simply did not know how to fight.
Uhhmm I need for those two to have a convo with Nicholas when this fight is over. Should prove to be of great interest.

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“This is crazy, this is,” the boy remarked laughing. Nicholas couldn’t help finding it all comical, never mind that the minutes before could have been the last minutes he’d have had on this earth.
Ok, he may be my favorite person in this fic after Ottery. Cus I always love on Otts.

Loved the posts, and i will be back for more! I'm sorry for falling behind, but will catch up soon.
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“You’ve already spent enough of your life talking O, just die!” Rodolphus took out his wand and pointed it at the boy, “fire!”

“Avada Kedavra!” half a dozen voices sang out.

Ottery felt a feeling of falling suddenly. It felt as if all his worries were behind him. “I wonder if this is what heaven is like? Am I dying?”

“If you were going to heaven you wouldn’t be falling, now would you?” Teddy’s familiar voice rang in his head.

“Oh, crap …”
Say it ain't so! And I did laugh at Teddy's comment... how insensitive.

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“You’re a wizard, Teddy, seriously. What do you think your wand is for?”

“Waving around,” he replied twirling the end of it and making flowers appear.
He's got a point there!


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“You’re a plant,” Harry retorted.

“Yeah, well … you’re a … you’re a fruit, so whatever.”
Awww, how... cute. XD

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“Thank you Mrs. Weasley but you really shouldn’t worry. If the nargles and that werewolf didn’t get me there’s really not much to worry about, even if it is a full moon night.”

“Just the same love, I’d feel a lot safer with you spending the night here.” Luna simply nodded.
I dunno if I've said before... but I love the way you write Luna. And Molly's response to that.

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“We’re giving the dark lord your head for his trophy room. First yours, then Harry Potter, and finally Dumbledores.”

“At least I’ll be in good company.”
Another good point! Wouldn't you want your head to be among Harry and Dumbledore's?

Also, I won't quote it as it'll be quotage overload, but I like the little snippet into Remus and Tonks... before that battle, of course. xD

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I had a thought for your gorilla introduction. What if Hagrid in your alternate universe could transfigure into a gorilla. He could have gotten poor Ottery out of his chains with ease and through the forrest and bolders like it was a walk in the park. (natural habitat) for a gorilla) Hope Ottery is saved now, but it sounds like there's a problem.
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Priceless.

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o_O I can't believe how calm he/you is/are!

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