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01-05-2007, 08:29 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year |  Hidden Love - Sa13+ Run, Emma, Run!
Hello everyone! My name is Emma and this is my first fanfic ever. It’s called Hidden Love and it’s a H/Hr story. This story takes place in the trios 7th and final year at Hogwarts.
Okay so here’s the first chapter:
Ch. 1: I’m Going Crazy!
This is Hermiones point of view then it moves on to the story.
Wow!!! It’s our final year at Hogwarts! I can’t believe it! It seems like only yesterday me, Harry, and Ron walked through those huge oak doors wondering what Hogwarts was going to be like. But now we are in our final year. Ron and I have been dating since last year. And I am very happy with him. Harry also has a girlfriend her name is Juliet and she’s wonderful.
Tomorrow there is a trip to the village and I can’t wait! Ron and I plan to spend the whole day together. And Harry with Juliet. It’s great how we are all happy.
“ HERMIONE JANE GRANGER!”
Hermione jumped 10 feet into the air. “What?”
“ Have you been ignoring me for the last 5 minutes?” said Ron
“ No Ron, no. I was just thinking about how happy we are.” said Hermione.
“ Oh… well I’m off to Quidditch practice”.
“ Okay… have…” but Hermione stopped in mid sentence.
“Hermione…” said Ron
But Hermione didn’t answer she was too distracted. There was a boy coming down from the boy’s staircase. He was tall and very cute…
“ Wait… WHAT!” Hermione thought to herself. “ That’s Harry! Oh God Hermione your losing it!”
“ Hermione!”
“ What… oh Ron… yea um…. Have a good time,” said Hermione.
She got up and gave Ron a kiss.
“ Wait was it my imagination or was Harry looking at me… no… I’m going crazy… he’s with Juliet…” Hermione thought.
Harry came over.
“ Okay Hermione… time to let Ron go and let him go to practice” Harry said laughing.
“ Right… well bye” Hermione said quietly without looking at Harry and ran up to the girl staircase.
“ Did I do something?” asked Harry.
“ You know Hermione… always does stuff without an explanation… come on lets go,” said Ron.
“ Yea” Harry said. And the two boys walked out through the portrait hole together.
“ Oh my gosh!… I can’t be falling for Harry… NO!” Hermione said to herself. “ All I have to do is talk to him more… I guess I feel this way because I haven’t talk to him in forever…. I’ll talk to him after practice”.
Then…
“ Hermione… you like Harry?”
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01-06-2007, 06:33 PM
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| Dark Force Defence League  Ramora
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|  Crazy Hufflepuffian Sirius 'bout Sirius
Hey there 
Your fiction is looking lovely so far Although I just had to take out some of your exclamation marks. There were alot of them together so I removed them and left all you needed left!
Good luck with your fiction!
Cat xxx
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01-06-2007, 07:08 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
Thank you Kitty Loves Steps!!!!!
I really appreciate it!
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01-06-2007, 09:13 PM
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| | Puffskein
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Good start
And you probably don't need the 'OMG' in the beginning, but it's not anything big  (just a suggestion)
Can't wait for more!
~Sarah
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01-06-2007, 09:21 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by MalfoyzBeloved  Good start
And you probably don't need the 'OMG' in the beginning, but it's not anything big (just a suggestion)
Can't wait for more!
~Sarah Thanks Sarah! I am so nervous! I mean it's my first fan fic and well... yeah.
I guess I didn't need the OMG! in the beggining. I just put it for dramatic effects! lol!
I already wrote 6 chapters to the story but I'm not going to post the second chapter until I get more readers.
Thanks again Sarah! It's nice to have a reader!
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01-06-2007, 09:27 PM
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| | Puffskein
Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Canada
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I guess I didn't need the OMG! in the beggining. I just put it for dramatic effects! lol!
If you really want it there you can always write it out or sumthin...
Or put something like... 'I can't believe it! It's our final year at Hogwarts already! Oh my gosh/God, it seems like only yesterday...' (for the gosh thing, ya, whichever you work with). But again, you don't have to if you don't wanna
Aw, ok -ish tried to wait patiently-
and joo welcome 
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01-10-2007, 11:04 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
Okay here’s Chapter 2 even though no one has posted but I'll still post.
Ch.2: Uh Oh
Hermione stood where she was…
“ Hermione answer me… do you like Harry?”
Hermione turned around slowly. “ Please don’t let it be her, please,” she thought to herself. “I don’t want to cause problems between them”.
“ Hermione” came the enchanting voice of Juliet again.
“ No… of course not Juliet” said Hermione nervously. “ I do not like Harry”.
“ Then why were you saying oh no I can’t fall for Harry” Juliet said in her would be Hermione voice. She looked furious.
“ I…” Hermione couldn’t find what to say, so she ran out of the room.
“ HERMIONE GET BACK HER” Juliet yelled.
But Hermione kept on running. She ran for what seemed like an hour, tears falling down her cheeks. It wasn’t until Hermione heard someone calling her name that she noticed she ran all the way to the Quiddich field!
“ Hermione are you okay?” came the voice of Harry.
Hermione stood petrified. What if Juliet finds her and tells Harry everything right in front of her.
“ I’m fine” Hermione said.
“ No your not… tell me what’s wrong” Harry said rather coldly.
“ Where’s Ron?” Hermione asked ignoring Harry’s question.
“ He went back to the castle, practice is over”.
“ Oh…” and without saying thanks Hermione ran for the castle, hoping she wouldn’t run into Juliet.
“ Her… oh whatever” Harry said. “ Juliet… what in the world are you doing out here in the cold!”
Juliet came running to Harry and said, “ Have you seen Hermione?”
“ Yea, she went up to the castle… what’s wrong with her?” Harry asked.
Juliet was already angry and having Harry questioning her wasn’t helping.
“I don’t know she’s your best friend if she doesn’t want to tell you I certainly won’t be a chatterbox and tell you everything!” Juliet said.
“ What’s wrong with you?” Harry snapped.
Juliet couldn’t take it anymore. It took her two years to get Harry to notice her and now she felt like she was going to lose him to Hermione. She knew it wasn’t going to take Hermione a lot of effort. After all Hermione is more prettier then her and smarter and... but she was interrupted by her thoughts when she felt Harry hugging her.
“ Why are you crying?” he asked.
Juliet was going to say he was crazy when she felt a tear rolling down her cheek.
“ I’m tired that’s all” Juliet said.
“ Well let’s go to the castle… you have to get some rest anyways” Harry said and led her all the way to the castle.
Last edited by Come What May; 01-15-2007 at 01:06 AM.
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01-11-2007, 12:46 AM
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|  K.O. Harry's crush on ChoRecent SBFC MemberKeeper of Hermione's PatronusBillywig
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Hi, I'm a new reader and I think this story is fabulous! And not just because I ship H/Hr. PAMS!
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01-11-2007, 01:13 AM
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| | Puffskein
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aw, Harry's so caring 
PAMS!
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01-13-2007, 07:59 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by hphg Hi, I'm a new reader and I think this story is fabulous! And not just because I ship H/Hr. PAMS! Thanks hphg!!! I really appreciate it! You don't know how close I was to deleting my story since I thought no one was reading!
An update is coming soon!
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01-13-2007, 08:01 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by MalfoyzBeloved aw, Harry's so caring
PAMS! Thanks MalfoyzBeloved! An update is coming soon!!!
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01-13-2007, 08:12 PM
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| | Mackled Malaclaw
Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Maryland
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Jermey Jackston
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well, you wont have to delate it. I am going to be a dedacted read of the wonder H/Hr fic. I just love that shipper. PAMS! PAMS!!
Jessica
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01-13-2007, 08:22 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Hogwarts RPG Name:
Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by dancerbookl well, you wont have to delate it. I am going to be a dedacted read of the wonder H/Hr fic. I just love that shipper. PAMS! PAMS!!
Jessica Thanks Jessica!!!! I hope you enjoy the story. I'm working on chapter 3 right now! I'll post soon.
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01-13-2007, 08:41 PM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
Heres a new chapter!!!! Enjoy!
Chapter 3: You Already Have
Juliet and Harry arrived at the Gryffindor common room to find Hermione and Ron cuddled together on a couch.
Harry for some reason got annoyed and Juliet noticed. She fought hard to hold back her tears.
Hermione saw Juliet and got up. “ Juliet we need to talk”.
“ Yes, we do” Juliet answered.
And without looking at Harry, Juliet walked up the girls’ staircase and into the room. Hermione followed.
“Oh… Juliet is going to kill me when I tell her this” Hermione though as she followed her up the staircase.
“ So, what do you what to talk about?” Juliet said.
“ I first wanted to say that I’m sorry. And that I… I do have feelings for Harry”
At that point Juliet burst into tears and sobbed, “ I knew it! I knew it!”
“ Juliet please, there not strong feeling. I won’t take him away.” Hermione said trying to calm her down.
“ Oh Hermione, it’s just that you already have!” Juliet sobbed.
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01-13-2007, 10:07 PM
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| | Mackled Malaclaw
Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Maryland
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Jermey Jackston
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YES! Is Julie out of the way so Hermione is free to take the Harry that is rightfully hers?
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01-14-2007, 01:24 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by dancerbookl YES! Is Julie out of the way so Hermione is free to take the Harry that is rightfully hers? You'll have to wait and see! I will post on monday... maybe.  +  | |
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01-14-2007, 03:34 AM
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| | Mackled Malaclaw
Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Maryland
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Originally Posted by Harry and Ginny??? You'll have to wait and see! I will post on monday... maybe. + Ooo, please DO!!!!
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01-15-2007, 01:36 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by dancerbookl Ooo, please DO!!!! Guess what? I wrote chapters 4,5,6,and,7! I can't wait to see what you all have to say about them.
I'll post tomorrow!
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01-15-2007, 03:49 AM
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| | Mackled Malaclaw
Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Maryland
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WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!! You wrote all of that and you won't even post now????? WAH! PAMS!!!
Jessica
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01-15-2007, 05:11 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by dancerbookl WHAT!!!!!!!!!!!! You wrote all of that and you won't even post now????? WAH! PAMS!!!
Jessica Calm down... I'm posting tomorrow. It's only in what 13 hours. lol! I'll post soon.
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01-15-2007, 01:32 PM
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| | Billywig
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Can't wait! I'm enjoying this so far.
~Shan
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01-16-2007, 01:25 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
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Originally Posted by padfoot_88 Can't wait! I'm enjoying this so far.
~Shan Thanks Shan! New post right..... now.
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01-16-2007, 01:26 AM
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| | Billywig
Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: California, Palmdale
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Jacqueline Marie Granger
Sixth Year | Run, Emma, Run!
Chapter 4: Will You…
“ What do you mean ‘ I already have’?” Hermione asked.
“ Harry has liked you for about a month know… he hasn’t told me but I know… the way he looks at you… he looked at me the same way when we started dating” Juliet cried.
Hermione stood there shocked.
“ I’ll end it with him after the dance because well I need a date and then well you can make your move” Juliet said all of a sudden.
“ No, don’t Juliet please. I…” Hermione began.
“ Save it” Juliet said and walked out of the room.
Juliet went down stairs and saw Harry and Ron playing chess. Harry looked up.
“ Hey, are you okay?” he asked.
“ Yeah I’m fine” Juliet said.
“ Great, let’s go out somewhere I need to talk to you” Harry said.
“ Um… okay” Juliet replied rather nervously.
And so they left. Meanwhile Hermione was still standing in the dorm.
“ I can’t believe he likes me… wow” Hermione thought to herself.
And with that she left to do something she never thought she would ever do.
“ Juliet we have been together for over what two years” Harry began.
Juliet was terrified she didn’t want Harry to leave her. She didn’t want to leave Harry at all. She was only pretending with Hermione. She would NEVER leave him for her to have him!
“ And we are so happy together and since we are in our last year…” Harry trailed off.
Juliet was still standing there and when Harry did what he did she almost fainted.
“ Will you marry me Juliet?” Harry said as he got down on one knee.
Enjoy!
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01-16-2007, 02:12 AM
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| | Bundimun
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YAY you posted i love this story and Juliet better say no Harry and Hermoine love each other PAMS really soon please!!
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01-17-2007, 12:50 AM
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| | Mackled Malaclaw
Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Maryland
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WHAT!!!!!!! He wants to marry her? He's still in school!!!
Is he an Idoit? Clearly yes, but . . . No, say "no," you know that he belongs to Hermione. You know he does!
You git [not you, Julie] pretending *goes offs and rants* You little-- URH!
PAMS! PAMS!!! PLEASE!!!!!
Jessica
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