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Old 10-22-2006, 06:56 AM   #1 (permalink)
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This is my 2nd F.F. It might not start out with any form of love, it takes a bit to get into it. Enjoy the story
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Summary (yeah, it's long ):
It's Harry's 6th year at Hogwarts (plot line of HBP omitted in this F.F). He just won the battle in the Department of Mysteries, and all of his vision-like dreams gone, or so he thinks. It all started on the night of August 15th, he dreamt he was walking down a dark hallway, and up ahead of him, light starts to illuminate the hall ahead. These dreams take him farther each night until he looks through the window, and inside is a girl. She's locked inside, looking lost, sullen, and seems to have given up on all life. Harry wants to find and help this girl he keeps dreaming about, but he hasn't any idea where to start. But on the train-ride to Hogwarts, he, Ron and Hermione take a seat in a compartment with a girl they never met before. She has deep, sapphire eyes, a sullen expression (even when she smiles), and perfectly straight auburn hair. She is in 6th year as well, but a transfer from Durmstrang. Harry has realized that this is the girl he kept having dreams about, but he doens't understand how she could be locked in a small room with nothing inside. He wants to help her, but how can he help her if he doesn't know what he's supposed to help her with?


Chapter 1
The Dream

The dark shadows of the hall engulfed me. I walked down them as though I knew where I was going; I didn’t run into a thing. The farther I went down, the lighter it seemed to get. I reached my hand out and grabbed a ledge. It took me by surprise, but I pulled myself to it and looked over it, looking through a window. Inside the room was a girl. The life in her sapphire blue eyes was gone, her expression sullen. I thought she was dead, but she shifted against the wall. She looked like she didn’t care anymore, not taking notice to her plain surroundings. She didn’t see my eyes watching her, looking around in a morose way. I noticed she kept looking to the far right hopefully. It took me a few moments to realize there was a cut in the wall, almost like a door. It was hard to tell for it was so dark, no light illuminating the three cracks in the wall. Suddenly, a light seemed to flow into the room and straight into my eyes...
Panting and sweating, Harry jolted upright in his bed. He nearly knocked the candle out of Hermione’s hand.
“Good, you’re up,” she said, setting the candle down.
Harry squinted, the light from the window blinding him and he couldn’t see much without his glasses. He wiped the sweat off his forehead.
“Are you alright?” Hermione asked, noticing the beads of sweat that gleamed on Harry’s face.
“Yeah,” he managed to get out between deep breaths. “Just another dream...” He reached behind him and picked up his glasses and put them on. Hermione cast a worried expression, and headed for the bedroom door.
“And get your trunk together! We’re leaving for King’s Cross in two hours. Breakfast is waiting for you downstairs,” Hermione said as she closed the door. Harry looked to his right and saw Ron still fast asleep.
Stretching, Harry got out of bed and dressed. Once he was fully dressed, he shook Ron awake.
“Blimey...” Ron mumbled as he shifted to get up. “What time is it?”
Harry looked at his watch.
“A few minutes before nine,” Harry responded. He left Ron when he knew his friend wasn’t going to fall back asleep and went to get some breakfast.
“Did you sleep well, Harry?” Mrs. Weasley asked as she scurried around the kitchen.
“Could’ve been better...”
“Have another bad dream?” she asked automatically. She was aware of Harry’s odd dreams lately.
“It’s not that it’s bad...”
Ron stumbled down the stairs, nearly rolling down the last flight. He caught his balance on the floor and joined Harry and Ginny at the table. He started filling his plate automatically without second thought, making it overflow at one point.
“That’s enough, Ronald!” Mrs. Weasley snapped when she saw his breakfast rolling off of his plate. He gulfed down everything along with Harry and Ginny, and together they left the table to go and finish packing for their trip back to Hogwarts.
As Ron was rambling about how he would punish Crabbe and Goyle throughout the year, Harry let in one ear and out the other. He couldn’t get the dream out of his head. For the past couple weeks he’s been having similar dreams, going down a hallway and looking into a room with the same girl. She always appeared sad, confused, lost, in need of help. Harry hadn’t had dreams like this since the year before about the Department of Mysteries, and that worried him, since that came true. He truly wanted to help this girl he kept dreaming about, but he didn’t know who or where she was.
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So yeah, I've gotten the next two chapters done, so I'll post 'em eventually. Til then, what do you think...?
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Chapter 2
Dominique

Harry pushed through the throng of Hogwarts students as he boarded the Hogwarts Express with Ron and Hermione. There was only a minute left until the train left Platform 9¾, and there were nearly no more compartments that had three extra seats for them. The got closer to the back end of the train and they found a compartment. There was only one person inside they couldn’t see the face of, but they opened the door farther anyways. The person had their face masked by the cover of a textbook (Hermione beamed when she saw this).
“Can we take a seat in here?” Hermione asked.
The book lowered and a girl faced them.
“Go ahead.” She smiled weakly.
The three pulled their things inside and dropped them by the window. Harry sat down, but Hermione and Ron went back to the compartment doors.
“Where’re you...?”
“Meeting,” Hermione and Ron responded together, cutting off Harry. He remembered they were still prefects and they left. When he turned his attention away from the compartment door, he noticed the girl was looking at him.
“Oh, I’m Harry... Harry Potter.”
“‘The chosen one’?” the girl responded, a hint of mockery in her soft, flowing voice. She sounded different, her accent never heard of to Harry.
“As the Ministry wishes to put it...” Harry mumbled. “So who’re you?”
“Dom... well Dominique Fraser really.”
“Where’re you from?”
“Why do you ask?” she asked, her tone going a bit dark.
“Well you sound American...”
“I’m Canadian,” she said with a touch of bitter irritation. “I just moved here in late-June.” Harry was taken aback by how she responded; he didn’t see why she was so touchy upon her nationality.
“What year are you in?”
“I’m going into 6th year.”
“I’ve never seen you around here before,” he commented casually.
“I’m a transfer.”
“Where from?”
“Durmstrang.”
Harry was silent after that. The girl, Dom, went back to her book. As she lowered her eyes, Harry noticed how dark blue they were. Her expression had changed from mildly happy to a normal-looking state, looking somewhat sad, her perfectly straight, auburn hair hanging beside her face. After a few moments, Harry’s mind clicked, he realized he saw this girl before.
The compartment door slid open. Ron and Hermione sat in seats next to Harry.
“So how was the meeting?” Harry asked.
“Same as last year,” Ron responded. “Waste of time really, hearing the same old junk...”
“Ronald!” Hermione snapped.
“And the Head students for this year and the new prefects,” Ron finished.
“You two are prefects?”
Ron, Hermione and Harry looked at Dom. Ron nodded as if it was obvious.
“Yes, we are,” Hermione responded simply.
Dom didn’t respond, she just went back to her book. Harry, Ron and Hermione chatted away for the rest of the train ride. When the train lurched to a stop, they all left the compartment with their things, Dom still gathering her bags. Harry, Ron and Hermione found a carriage and joined Neville, Ginny and Luna. The thestrals took off a moment later.
“I’ve seen that girl before!” Harry said as soon as the carriage was in the air.
“When did you see her before?” Hermione asked, sounding doubtful.
Harry didn’t even notice the looks of confusion on Ginny and Neville’s face. Luna wasn’t paying attention; she was reading her upside-down edition of The Quibbler with special glasses that came with the magazine, which in everyone’s opinion (except for Ginny), thought made her look even loonier than she is.
“In... in my dreams,” Harry responded slowly.
“What’re you talking about? You’ve been having those vision dreams again? Why didn’t you say something?” Ron demanded.
“I’ve continually had these dreams where I walk through a dark hallway and look through a window, and inside is this girl that seems to give off the impression she’s given up on life,” Harry explained. “The girl I keep seeing in my dreams looks exactly like Dom.”
“Dom?”
“The girl we were in the compartment with...”
“She sounds different, where’s she from?” Ron asked, changing the subject.
“Canada,” Harry responded. She sure made that clear.
“So what year is she in anyways? Did you happen to find that out while we were gone?”
“Don’t try to dodge the question of why you haven’t said anything,” Hermione cut into Harry and Ron’s budding discussion.
“Because if I said anything, you guys would probably say it’s just like any other dream, how it doesn’t really matter and it won’t happen,” Harry responded simply. “Like last time. I didn’t want to go through with Occlumecy lessons again because of ‘just some dream’.”
Ron sniggered. Hermione elbowed him sharply in the stomach, causing him to double over momentarily. The thestrals jerked to a stop in front of Hogwarts Castle.
“Well it looks like we’re home,” Ginny said.
“Yeah, home,” Harry mumbled.
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sry I haven't updated in awhile, just didn't see this going anywhere for awhile really, so yeah...
I've got about 4 chapters done (kinda put off the end of the 4th, but yeah), so I may as well update now...
I wrote this awhile back, so yeah, I don't have the time to edit it now, so it's kinda eh...

Chapter 3
Seamus’ Story

Harry saw Dominique joining the first years in front of the Entrance Hall. Professor McGonagall led her away though, to his slight surprise.
He entered the Great Hall with his friends and took seats at the Gryffindor table, and he waited. The doors opened many minutes later, and everyone turned their attention to the large double doors. A large group of small first years walked in, and Dominique trailed behind them. She followed them up through the Gryffindor and Hufflepuff tables. Harry watched her, and she got closer. She stopped, turned to her right and sat down in an open spot at the Gryffindor table, joining Parvati, Lavender and the other girls around them.
Harry let out the breath he held in. Ron sighed irritably.
“What?” Harry asked, turning his attention back to his friend.
“Wish this would go faster, it took long enough to get the midgets into the Hall, let alone get Sorted and for Dumbledore to make his boring, old speech,” Ron complained. “At this rate, we won’t be eating until midnight!”
“So shush, Ronald. There’s more to life than just food,” Hermione snapped, eyes on the first years that were getting sorted.
“Balton, Jenna.”
“Ravenclaw!”
“Banalt, Matthew.”
“Gryffindor!”
Half of the first years went to either Gryffindor or Ravenclaw, but the cycle was finally broken.
“Mansely, Kalli.”
“Slytherin!”
“Mercer, Sarah.”
“Hufflepuff!”
“Metzger, Dylan.”
“Boy, many of you this year...” the Sorting Hat commented. “Gryffindor!”
The list of students went on, and all easily got to their houses. Dumbledore made his speech, which was much shorter than lat year’s, and dinner was served. Everyone happily dug into the feast.

It was nearly impossible to navigate the corridors, they were even darker. I felt my way down the hall until I ran into a wall. Feeling around it, I found a ledge. Pulling myself up on it, I looked into the window. Inside was the girl, and she was... crying? I squinted to see if I could get a better look, and she was for sure crying. What was she crying about?
“Harry!”
Harry bolted upright with a start, sweat covering his face. He saw Neville, Seamus, Dean and Ron circled around his bed.
“Had that dream again?” Ron asked.
“Different this time, but yeah...”
“What dream?” Neville asked curiously.
“He kinda... how does it go again?” Ron said.
“I’m walking down a dark hallway and I come up to a window,” Harry answered. “And when I look inside, there’s a girl. Trapped inside, looking like she’s given up on all life.”
“Well it’s just a dream, right?” Seamus stated slowly.
“I’ve been having the same dream for the past three weeks. The thing is, it’s just... confusing.”
“What’s so confusing about it?” Neville asked.
“The girl I see... she’s here, in Hogwarts.”
“Who is it?” Seamus and Dean asked at the same time, equally curious.
“That new girl in our year...”
“Dom,” Ron finished.
“Oh, her...” Seamus said mysteriously, a somewhat mischievous grin forming on his face.
“What about her?” Harry asked as he wiped away the sweat on his forehead.
“Her parents are the direct relatives to Godric Gryffindor,” Seamus said as if it was obvious. “Didn’t you know that?”
“No. It’s not like I read Witch Weekly when I was five,” Harry snapped.
“Well I didn’t either, yet I know,” Seamus retorted.
“So, direct descendants, eh?” Neville asked cheerfully, not wanting to get stuck in the middle of a fight on their first official day at school.
“Yeah, but apparently something was wrong with the both of them,” Seamus continued, happy to have the attention of everyone. “They weren’t brave, courageous, everything you’d expect from true Gryffindors. They were cunning, ambitious... dark and evil par say. Instead of being in Gryffindor, they were put into Slytherin House because of it. So when Dom came around, they were anything but parents, treating her like dirt, like she was a toy to rip up and do whatever with. Mistreated all her life, sunken low into some sort of depression most likely, not like I know that part exactly though.”
“How do you all this?” Dean asked his best friend.
“Stories, articles, anything you can read really,” Seamus answered, shrugging.
Harry raised an eyebrow. Everything Seamus said didn’t help him at all.
“And how’s that all supposed to be helpful?”
“Never said it would be, I was just answering a question.”
With that, Seamus grabbed his school supplies and left the dorm. The others followed suit, leaving Harry and Ron last to leave for classes.
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ok, been a bit but I was having difficulty thinking of an idea for the 6th chapter (I need to be ahead because well, if I'm not, this would be in the inactive F.F forum cause I'd be forgetting!).
Anyways, next chapter! Somewhat short (if I wanted to make it a bit better, I'd be having to re-write it and that'd take forever). And yeah, kinda short I guess.
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Chapter 4
The Scream

Harry told Hermione everything Seamus told him. She seemed slightly surprised, but not as much as he had been. When they got back to the Common Room after classes, he, Ron and Hermione talked about it.
“Well it doesn’t really surprise me,” Hermione stated bluntly.
“How can it not?” Ron replied, taken aback.
“She’s in my dorm, I got the impression something was different.”
“Are you saying you found out something you haven’t told us?” Harry asked. “Cause if so, I want to know.”
“She seemed distant, not caring if anyone was around. She’s more to herself than anything, if you ask me,” Hermione responded, shrugging. “So, did you have another dream last night?”
Harry rolled his eyes at the change of subject.
“Yeah,” he mumbled.
“What happened?”
“She was... crying.”
Hermione’s eyebrows rose.
“What about?”
“How should I know? I’m only watching through a window every time.”
Harry realized he hadn’t heard Ron say anything, so he looked behind him and couldn’t believe his eyes. He pinched himself to make sure it wasn’t a dream, but he was still there. Ron actually... doing his homework!
“Well then... do something about it. I dunno, knock on the window in your dream or something,” Hermione suggested.
“Hermione, it’s a dream. I can’t control what I do in them.”
She shrugged again and went upstairs to her dormitory.
“You agree, don’t you?” Harry asked Ron.
“Wha?”
Rolling his eyes and chuckling, Harry went up to his dorm to drop off his things.

I walked down the dark and lonely hall once more, feeling my way down it. I made my way to the same ledge and pulled myself up to look through the window. As I peered over the ledge and into the window, I jumped and fell backwards. The girl was standing at the window, looking back at me. For a moment, I was too afraid to stand back up and look into the window to see her deep blue eyes staring back at me. Or was she staring past me?
“Wake up, Harry!”
Harry nearly crashed into Ron’s head as he quickly sat upright.
“You were talking and panting in your sleep.”
“Really?” Harry asked, slightly amazed. He hadn’t said anything in the dream. “What’d I say?”
“Well you were mumbling really, but I think everyone in the Tower clearly heard you scream.”
Taking deep breaths, Harry calmed down slightly. He wiped away the sweat on his face and swung his legs over the side of his bed to stand up.
“What time is it?” he asked Ron as he yawned.
“Four in the mornin’.”
Harry’s eyes widened. Waking everyone up so early wouldn’t be very good, but it did explain why he was still so tired. Remembering today was a class day, he slowly made his way to his bag and threw it on his bed. He then got dressed and took his bag and headed downstairs. When down there, he saw what seemed like half of Gryffindor House in the common room.
“Are you alright, Harry?”
Harry turned around and saw Hermione, who looked worried.
“Yeah, why do you ask?”
“Well you weren’t exactly subtle when you screamed,” Hermione responded a bit quieter.
“How is it that everything thinks it’s me when they hear a noise?” Harry snapped irritably.
“You can keep telling yourself you didn’t scream, Harry, but everyone knows you did,” Hermione sighed, leaving him. Eventually the whole house of Gryffindor filled the common room.
“What... what has happened?”
Everyone looked towards the portrait hole and saw Professor McGonagall standing at the entrance of the common room. They turned back to their friends and continued chatting.
“Silence!”
The room was completely quiet.
“Why are you all up so early?”
The room was still silent.
“Anyone?”
A girl stepped up in front of everyone.
“Someone screamed.”
Harry recognized Dom’s voice.
“What... when?”
“Few minutes ago.”
“Do you know where?”
“In one of the boys’ dormitories.”
Professor McGonagall looked at the crowd of boys grouped at one end of the common room.
“Who?” she asked them.
Harry stood still, unsure if he’d get punished for having a dream. He felt a sharp push from behind him, and he stumbled forwards and in front of the group.
“You had something to do with this, Potter?”
Harry nodded slowly.
“Why did you have to wake everyone up at this hour?”
“I didn’t know I screamed really. Ron woke me because I was sleep-talking and apparently screamed,” Harry mumbled. “I couldn’t control it.”
McGonagall looked both irritated and in thought.
“Everyone else other than Potter, leave!” she snapped, making the rest of Gryffindor Tower disperse. The room was empty in moments, all except for Harry and Professor McGonagall.”
“You screamed in your sleep?”
“Yes.”
“Did you have another dream by any chance?”
Harry nodded slowly.
“Same one over and over...”
McGonagall sighed.
“I think they’re visions, like last year,” Harry said, looking up at the professor. Her face darkened.
“What have you been seeing?”
“One of the girls in Gryffindor locked in a room...”
“Who?”
“Dom.”
“The new girl?”
Harry nodded again.
“But... I think I’m beginning to understand it now,” Harry realized.
“What do you mean, Potter?”
“I mean... maybe she won’t be locked in a room looking like she’s given up on all life physically...”
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That was actually what gave me the idea for this... kinda confusingly interesting story I guess (I'm reading Eldest right now, I stopped 2/3rds of the way through for to long and forgot everything. Now I'm reading it over again knowing every single secret that's uncovered in the book because some people couldn't keep their mouths shut about it... so I force myself to read it).
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Cool I found Eldest kinda slow at the beginning, but it's pretty good once you get into it (and this is coming from one that knows all to be revealed and said it's boring because of it )
Anyways, I couldn't think of a good chapter name, so yeah, here's chapter 5! Ok, I couldn't think of a good chapter name I haven't already used, I would've used the one I have for chapter 6, but yeah, can't... -stops rambling-

Chapter 5

“So what’d McGonagall want?” Ron whispered while pretending to write a Potions essay.
“What do you think?” Harry snapped. “You’re the one that pushed me up to her.”
Ron looked sheepish, still writing down something, but whatever it was it wasn’t related to the ingredients in a Felix Felicis potion.
“Well what happened?” Ron rephrased his question.
Harry rolled his eyes, still continuing to write.
“It’s kind of obvious... she just wanted to know what I meant by waking everyone up at four in the morning.”
Professor Slughorn looked at Harry and Ron, but didn’t say anything about their chatting.
“And...?”
“And what?” Harry asked, a tinge of impatience hidden behind his words.
“What did she do?”
Harry scoffed.
“I told her I keep having vision-like dreams and she wanted to know what it was about, not like I’m serving triple detention on the second day back, Ron.”
Ron’s cheeks flushed red slightly. He got triple detention from Professor Snape because he wouldn’t stop talking and ‘threatened’ him (which was really Ron saying he’d love to rip Snape’s head off). Before he could respond, the bell indicating the end of class rang through the room.
“Ah, time flies by. Hand in your work!”
Ron and Harry attempted to keep straight faces. They walked up to Professor Slughorn’s desk, empty-handed.
“Just leave your work on the tables.”
“Uh... professor... we kind of... got distracted,” Harry responded slowly.
“Ah, mind strayed? Understandable, trying to think of who would be the best Keeper....”
Professor Slughorn was referring to Harry’s becoming Gryffindor team captain for Quidditch. Ron’s jaw clenched slightly at the mention of Slughorn’s subtle suggestion of getting a better Keeper.
“Just hand in the essay tomorrow, no trouble. And yes, Mr. Weasley?”
“I kinda... strayed mentally as well. Can I hand mine in tomorrow as well?”
The professor looked disappointed.
“But he did draw a picture of the potion,” Harry inputted, grinning innocently.
Ron looked at Harry out of the corner of his eye coldly.
“Sounds like you were just off-task without reason,” Professor Slughorn responded. “So sorry, but you had a fair amount of time to write your assignment, so you won’t get marks for it.”
Ron’s mouth dropped, he looked like he just got punched by Hermione.
“Let’s go, Ron,” Harry said, turning around and dragging Ron out of the dungeon before he could worsen the situation.
“What... just cause I don’t have a scar on my head I can’t hand in my assignment tomorrow?” Ron complained. He pushed through a throng of first years angrily, knocking one of them to the ground and making their books fly everywhere.
“You heard Slughorn, I was thinking about a better Keeper,” Harry said smugly, which got him an angry, cold look in return. “I don’t see how a scar affects that.”
“Maybe I should force a lightning-bolt scar onto my forehead. Then we’ll see who’s right.” Ron scoffed as he followed Harry up the stairs to Gryffindor Tower.
“Have fun wasting time and blood, Ron.”
Ron rolled his eyes as he followed Harry into the common room.
Harry dropped his things in the common room, and Ron ran up the stairs to his dormitory. Sitting down on one of the couches, Harry noticed Dom working on what he assumed was homework, appearing to be struggling.
“Need help?” He asked slowly, knowing full well he wouldn’t be of any help.
“I’m fine, thanks,” she snapped, not even looking up from her parchment.
Harry was taken aback by her hostility. He looked at her with an eyebrow raised momentarily, and then looked away.
“So, had any dreams lately?”
Harry looked up and noticed Dom looking at him, sapphire blue eyes boring into him. He matched her gaze, unsure of how to respond.
“What gives you that idea?” he asked sarcastically.
“I’ve been having a feeling someone’s been watching me, I’ve lost sleep because of it.”
“Is that why you’ve been cranky?” he couldn’t help but ask. Dom gave him a dirty look.
“So whatever you’re doing with me in your dreams, just stop it!”
“I can’t tell myself what to dream.”
“Well try,” she spat. Her things suddenly gathered together and she stormed up to the stairs leading to the girls’ dormitory.
“Wha’ was that about?” Ron asked as he came back into the common room from his dormitory. Harry was speechless.
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ok, ya, I don't think this gonna work I have the whole story in my head, but I can't get it into words... I'd continue on so long before romance even happens, and that'd just be kinda boring and turn into a Character Story and have to be moved into a different forum and ya, it wouldn't be worth it... (like I say, it's just the trouble of getting it into WORDS... have the whole story in my head and everything!)
So... I think I'll just delete this thread. If any1 truly wants to know what happens, PM me and I'll tell ya.
Cause other than that, I'll post what I have left, which is only chapter 6 (next chapter), right now and that's it for this F.F.... to difficult
Ya, last chapter in like, forever most likely. If I ever do finish the F.F, it wouldn't be anytime soon!
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I promise if I ever do finish it I'll repost and give out the whole story, but I don't see that happening.
Chapter 6 is below.
Like I say, if you TRULY WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS, PM me.... cause I don't see how this'd work, to many things on my mind and I haven't done anything with this story in so long man...
Anyways, CHAPTER 6!
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P.S: I just realized I never finished the chapter... wow, that's sad. Anyways, I'll add the end on later, it doesn't matter anyways, it still ends with where I was pretty good for a chapter ending anyways. I might add the last part later, but it won't be much anyways. So ya, didn't finish chapter but it's still at a pretty good spot to end a chapter. I'll stop rambling about my loss of the end.

Chapter 6
Dom’s Consciousness

Walking down the dark hallway, I eventually ran into a wall. Feeling above me, I grabbed a ledge and pulled myself up, looking into the window.
“I told you to go away.”
I was not startled. I merely looked inside and saw the girl, Dom, coming towards the window.
“Why are you here?” I asked.
“I can’t say.”
“Why?”
“It’s to explain...”
“Seamus told me your story, your basic past. Is that why you’re in there?”
“Maybe. Why do you care so much about it?”
“I only wish to help.”
“Well right now you can help by going away,” Dom snapped, glaring at me slightly.
“You aren’t helping yourself by pushing others away.”
“It works,” she spat.
“Are you afraid?” I asked, looking Dom right in the eye.
“You know my story, so why don’t you tell me?”
“I don’t know you anymore than you know yourself. You know I’ve been watching from here for awhile, and I can’t stop coming, it happens. The least you can do is tell me why you’re here.”
“I’ve heard the stories of your visions last year, about the Department of Mysteries. They went away when you figured it out, visited the place, am I correct?”
“Yes, but I think you aren’t really going to end up here physically, put into the tiny cell you’re in right now.”
“Why do you think I’m in here then?”
“Like I said before, I heard your story, and I think you feel this way, feeling like you can only trust yourself, lock yourself away, shut everyone out.”
“It looks like you’ve figured me out then.”
“Why shut out those that are only trying to help?”
“Because last time I believed I got help, it did it get me anywhere? All the person was use me for their own good. I believed someone cared, someone wanted to help, wanted to be a friend, but they didn’t have that in mind. I’ve learned to trust no one but myself, yet sometimes I waver on that.”
“You can’t be able to... not trust yourself,” I responded pointedly, unsure of how to phrase my thought.
“I know, that’s why everyone thinks I’m weird, thinks I’m different. I’m not like your average girl, your average person, I put my trust in others and they tore it up and threw it away.”
“When I was sent to the Dursleys as a baby, I learned quickly not to trust them. They made me live in the cupboard under the stairs, the only light was the one from outside. I had no fun, I was used, wasn’t fed properly, their servant. My cousin would beat me up in school, everyone thought I was the weird kid with glasses and has no friends. I didn’t have any friends because I didn’t trust anyone, yet I get the letter saying I was accepted into Hogwarts, and I felt like I was thrown into another world by Dudley, but when I got on that train, I met my friends, I trusted after so long of being deprived of the feeling of always being on guard. You just accept one person, and your life can turn around. That’s all you have to do.”
“You didn’t have it as hard as I did. Sure, you cleaned up after your family, you were picked on, beat up, etcetera, but my parents did that to me, not some kid that takes their anger out on the weakling, it was the adult that took everything out on their weakling. They made me weak, they deprived me of food for days, barely giving me enough water to live. I slept on a cold, stone floor for at least eleven years, and then I was sent to Durmstrang. I felt free for the first time in my life, but when I went to the school, I was anything but. Picked on by everyone, people’s target practice for jinxes, hexes, spells, everything. I had no friends, I had no life. Someone came into it finally, and they took even more from me then I ever knew I had, most of all, they shattered my trust in others. You can’t expect me to suddenly trust people here, because you might think your past was difficult, and I know loosing your parents can be hard, but you haven’t put up with as much as I have.”
“You’re a direct descendant of Godric Gryffindor himself, brave, courageous, strong, adventurous. You’re acting like everything but that. How can one so opposite of their descendants be in their own House?”
“I put up with beatings my whole life and learned not to cry over it. How is that not strong?”
“If you were so strong, you’d be able to put your past behind you and meet people.”
“Would you consider this a meeting then?”
I shrugged.
“Well... Harry, I guess I can talk to you later, but I have to go.”
A bright light created a halo around Dom, and she seemed to be swallowed up by it.

“Harry!”
Jumping up and out of bed, Harry nearly fell onto the floor. He reached out to find his glasses, and he put them on. Looking at him was Seamus and Ron.
“Yeah?” Harry asked.
“You were talking in your sleep...” Ron responded, shrugging.
“It was getting annoying really,” Seamus concluded.
“Really? What’d I say?”
“Something about trust, Gryffindor, strength...”
“And me,” Seamus finished for Ron, an eyebrow raised. Harry chuckled.
“What were you dreaming about this time?” Ron asked.
“I was just talking...”
“You... talking to... her in a dream?” Ron cut him off, astounded.
“How does that work?” Seamus pressed. Harry just shrugged and got out of bed.
Getting dressed, he gathered his supplies and lumbered downstairs, still tired. He dropped his things beside the couch of the common room and sat down. He longed to fall asleep, but if he did he might have another dream again, and didn’t want to go through that again just now.
“Have a good sleep?” Hermione asked in a sarcastic way.
“What do you mean by that?” he asked suspiciously.
“I didn’t get much sleep last night because of her,” she responded, somewhat mysterious.
"Her?"
"Yeah, Dom wouldn't stop talking about 'I told you to go away...' and her past and other stuff I didn't catch..."
"Did she say anything else?"
"Not that I was paying attention to. Why?"
"I was talking to her in my dream last night..."
"So that's what it was!"
"Yeah..."
"What'd she have to say?"
"It was more fighting than anything else, Mione. Not much to it," Harry responded, shrugging. Before Hermione could respond, Dom wandered downstairs. She looked at Harry with sleepy eyes, and then turned around and walked back up the stairs.
"Dom..."
She ignored him. He watched her walk across the floor upstairs and go back to the dorm.
"Should I...?"
"Please," Harry cut off Hermione, knowing what she'd say. Hermione got up and went back up the stairs leading to the girls' dorm.

Just adding on the last bit cause I felt like it... if anyone noticed the change of course I'm continually adding on, just... ya, sorry but I can't help it!
If it doesn't get deleted, it'll be in the inactive F.Fs for awhile before being deleted...
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What!?!?! You're not going to continue it?!?! *cries* But I love it!!!! I need it!!!
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I MIGht now that I think about it...
It depends, I keep getting more ideas, but it becomes harder to put into words. That was the most recent chapter I have, and I added more. Because of what I added, I MIGHT continue now...
I'm not deleting just yet, but if I get in even more difficulty than ever before, be warned
Cause with what I added, TOTALLY NEW IDEA TO ADD!
You'll probably see another chapter, but I dunno when it'll be up.... if at all.
Once I actually get the romance part started, I have a totally great idea with it
So now that I think about it, there's a possibility it MIGHT continue...
I'm so indecisive, like I say, SORRY BOUT THAT!
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I'll see I'm already on hiatus for Fallen at the moment, and since I'm working on my new idea for a Dramione.... that's going... kinda ok... (stuck on chapter 3 ), may as well come back to Dreams for now...
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I'll post the next chapter as soon as I finish it Kinda difficult cause I got myself stuck... again... more that I have two ideas and I'm trying to figure out which one would be better...
Might come up today even, I dunno
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sorry, went to see Casino Royale and that threw me off (OMG, that is such an extensive long movie, I DID NOT UNDERSTAND WHAT IT WAS ABOUT UNTIL AFTER IT ENDED! Sad, eh? Sitting through OVER 2 hours of a movie and you have to ask what it's about AFTER it's done...)
I'll work on it... well technically today since it's 1:08am here (according to my clock... snitchseeker is faster by a few), unless my tiredness gives me the working idea for Dreams
Ya, you can tell I'm tired when this either doesn't make sense or it's really rambling about the simplist thing... all I coulda said was 'I didn't finish it, went to Casino Royale' yet I extended it...
Anyways, in a few hours or so! (like, I dunno over twelve probably).

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