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LillyJames
03-08-2011, 01:42 AM
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Chapter Two: Part One (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10214880-post7.html)
Chapter Two: Part Two (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10217087-post15.html)
Chapter Three (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10217792-post17.html)
Chapter Four (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10222751-post23.html)
Chapter Five: Part One (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10225834-post29.html)
Chapter Five: Part Two (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10230456-post37.html)
Chapter Five: Part Three (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10235155-post48.html)
Chapter Six (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10263922-post55.html)
Chapter Seven (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10281645-post67.html)
Chapter Eight (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10298275-post79.html)
Chapter Nine (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10342155-post91.html)
Chapter Ten (http://www.snitchseeker.com/10405499-post102.html)
Disclaimer: J.K.Rowling owns the Harry Potter world, I just own my characters.
Authors Note: This idea came from a cough...well, yeah..enjoy! Also, comment on this please because this is my first FanFic posted, not written, but posted! So feed-back would be helpful and appreciated!
P.S. on the Author's Note: I have no idea where this idea is going. I'm just writing it out. I also realize that it is kinda a short chapter...enjoy
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Made by the AMAZEing Cassiopia Malfoy!
CHAPTER ONE
The boy with slicked back blonde hair looked at me, well not AT me, but through me. Nobody ever looked at me, not anymore. I sat with my legs crossed, on the boy's bed. Not that he knew. I know what you're thinking, STALKER, but that's not true. I was in my room. He had invaded it, taken my posters down and put up his own. He had changed the bed, he had changed everything and called it his own. I can't really blame him, I mean, I had disappeared off the face of the planet and my family moved away without me...
I sighed, he was an interesting boy. He had troubles, I knew. His father was a death eater, as was his grandparents. His mother was okay, but not exactly the best at showing her emotions. But as of right now he was shoving everything a trunk, getting ready for his first day back to Hogwarts. He was entering his third year. I realized that it also marked my second year of, how to put it? Marked my second year of invisibility to the rest of the world.
I remember that day well, because it was supposed to be my first day of Hogwarts.
~FLASHBACK~
I woke up happily, my first day of Hogwarts! We lived close to the train station. I had my stuff packed for over three days. My parents were going to take me and my older brother to the train station, where we would go to platform 9 3/4, board the Hogwarts Express and go to Hogwarts!
We all drove to the station, and as I watched my brother disappear behind the barrier between platforms 9 and 10, my remembrall rolled out of my pocket. I had gotten it for my eleventh birthday. I ran to catch up to it, when I bumped into an odd looking women. She had a pointy chin, a thin face, tall witches hat, long robes, and a pinched expression on her sour face.
She stared down me with her beady little eyes, and snarled, "A girl that cannot watch where she goes," she picked up the remembrall with her crooked hands, "should not be watched at all."
I blinked at her in confusion, "Huh?" I asked simply.
She ignored completely then walked away. I would have sworn that her hand bumped my elbow, but I didn't feel it. I ran back to the barrier and through it. I boarded the train, being un-able to locate my parents. I found the compartment where my brother, William, was sitting.
"Hey William," I said, "Have you seen Mum and Papa? I wanted to say good-bye to them."
He didn't even look at me. I glared at him, we had gotten into a fight in the car on the way there, so now he was giving me the silent treatment. I walked in front of him and waved my hand in front of him, he didn't even blink. I then punched him on the arm, or, tried to. My arm went right through him. I screamed....and he still din't reacted..
I watched the rest of the school year, as he discovered that I was missing, when I didn't show up for sorting, even though I was sitting right there. I tried desperately to get someone to see me, but no one could, not the house elves, not the portraits, not even the ghosts. I still experienced first year. I went to classes, meaning I sat in the back and watched while no one acknowledged me. I still flew, kinda. I sat on the back of my brother's broom, even though he never saw me.
So there I was, watching this boy, my age. I had accepted my fate by now, I was live out my life as a ghost, more then a ghost, just a being. It was a lonely life. But it was mine.
I followed the boy to the train station, he walked there, dragging his trunk, broom, and owl, with him. I walked beside him silently, ready to begin my third year. We boarded the train together. He set in his compartment, I sat on the floor under the window. This was my brother's graduating year at Hogwarts and I started, as did the blonde boy, when William entered the compartment. "William," I whispered, "I'm sorry. I'm so sorry that you can't see me."
"Mind if I sit here?" William asked.
"No, go ahead," the blonde boy responded.
"Thanks, I'm William by the way, William Stone."
"I'm Scorpius Malfoy. Um...you are the one who's sister went missing right?" Scorpius asked uncomfortably. I didn't realize Scorpius knew about me at all.
William nodded sadly, "Yes. Bethany. She came with us to the station her first year, then, nothing..." he shook his head, still mystified at how I went missing.
I sighed deeply. Scorpius cocked his head slightly and turned his head towards me. He squinted, but still looked through me. I held me breath. But then just shook my head, I was being dumb, there was no way he could see me. He turned back to William, "I'm sorry about your sister William. I'm sure, wherever she is, she is proud of you," Scorpius said, he looked embarrassed after, but I could tell he thought he said the right thing. And he did, and I was.
"I am proud of you William, I am," I said quietly, I never talked loudly anymore.
"Thank you Scorpius, but I doubt it. We had a fight, right before she went missing..."
Scorpius obviously didn't know how to respond, but I did, "William! William Stone, I am right here. I don't care about that dumb fight. I miss you William! Stop blaming yourself please..."
Scorpius looked confused again, "Did you hear something William? I thought I heard a girl's voice..."
William shook his head, "No."
Scorpius sighed, "Oh well, probably that high-pitched Weasley girl in the next compartment over, not that I don't like her or anything, she's just loud..." Scorpius covered quickly.
William smirked, the subject of me forgotten. I sighed and curled up under the window again. This would be a long train ride, and a long year. Also I realized that after this year, when William graduated, I would never see him again. Why? Because they moved away after my first year, and I don't know where the live, then William would get a job, and move again, and I would be stuck following Scorpius around until I "graduated".....
Then what would I do?
Mordanyes
03-08-2011, 04:39 AM
This plot has me! So original! :D the writing isn't horrible at all and the story has caught me interested.
So I guess I'm your first fan! :D
crookshanks_kitty
03-08-2011, 06:23 AM
Oh.my.god! This is amazing! You're first chapter has a very good start. It is very intriguing and keeps the readers interested to the very end. :woot:
Now I'm curious to know how the girl get dissapeared, will someone find out about her condition, and HOW does Scorpius sense her presense??? Interesting to see that you actually included him in your story. It's nice to hear about characters that have not been covered much in the book. :yes:
So here I am, you can officially count me as one of your readers. ;)
PAMS! (please?) ^_^
LillyJames
03-08-2011, 12:13 PM
This plot has me! So original! the writing isn't horrible at all and the story has caught me interested.
So I guess I'm your first fan!
Thank you so much! :) :) :)
Oh.my.god! This is amazing! You're first chapter has a very good start. It is very intriguing and keeps the readers interested to the very end.
Now I'm curious to know how the girl get dissapeared, will someone find out about her condition, and HOW does Scorpius sense her presense??? Interesting to see that you actually included him in your story. It's nice to hear about characters that have not been covered much in the book.
So here I am, you can officially count me as one of your readers.
PAMS! (please?)
Thank you so much, these comments are great! You'll just have to wait for more if you want an answer, and I now have...two readers! Haha, I'll try to get some up tonight.
Ruby85
03-08-2011, 09:01 PM
Bing Bong! ( No, I'm not mad, just a little eccentric, it's how I say hello! You may see Ping Pong, Ding Dong, etc etc)
This is a très interesting and good!
( I'm not French either, I'm just good at it! )
PAMS!
You can count me as a reader. Your third reader!
( Third Time Lucky )
LillyJames
03-08-2011, 10:10 PM
Bing Bong! ( No, I'm not mad, just a little eccentric, it's how I say hello! You may see Ping Pong, Ding Dong, etc etc)
This is a très interesting and good!
( I'm not French either, I'm just good at it! )
PAMS!
You can count me as a reader. Your third reader!
( Third Time Lucky )
YAY! :woot: three readers, and thank you so much :)And French, is awesome, but I am not good at it.
LillyJames
03-09-2011, 12:00 AM
Disclaimer: I wrote all about Harry Potter. Oops, wait...wrong person. I own my characters and Jo Rowling owns hers.
Autor's note: Dedicated to my first three readers :) You know who you are. And also to Cassie Malfoy, because I know she would have been the first if she had been here to read it.
CHAPTER TWO: The Missing Found? Not quite...
The train arrived at Hogwarts, as usual. I got on a carriage, as usual. I sat down at the Hogwarts feast, as usual. It was on the way to the common room that was different. Normally I just float to a random common room, last year I went to Ravenclaw, my first year I went to the Gryff's, so this year I would try Slytherins, and just go through people. I had gotten used to it. By float, I meant walked, I couldn't float like a ghost, even though I could walk through walls. This time though something happened.
I collided with something. I did not go through it. I ran into it, and fell over. It was a person I ran into, and the person fell back. We both blinked stunned. He looked around, he looked at me. Correction, he looked through me. No one ever looked at me. But, no one ever felt me either. And he just rammed into me..."Hello?" we said at the same time, him more loudly, trying to find the fiend who bumped him, me seeing if he could hear me.
He blinked, not hearing me, and he stood up. I walked over and poked him. Yes, I was being childish, but I had my reasons. He jumped, "Peeves! Peeves you git, stop fooling around, show yourself!"
Despite his strong voice, I could see his shaking hand. He was scared. I was happy. I was happy because he had felt me! He felt me! I did this odd little dance in the hall way, and I was sure that if anyone was able to see me, they would think I had lost my marbles, and hey, maybe I had. I laughed, loudly. I was loud, for the first time in a long time. Why? Because he had felt me! He acknowledged my existence! I cocked his head when I laughed, but I didn't stop.
"That.." he began shakily, "that isn't Peeves voice.."
I jumped, and stopped laughing. He had heard me too? "Y..y..y..ou c..c..can hear me?" I stuttered, shocked. He could feel me, he could hear me, but he couldn't see me?
Scorpius stood more firmly, "Who are you, ghost? Are you a friend of Peeves? Show yourself."
I crossed my arms and glared at him (Yeah, because that sooo helped me), I stepped quietly so I was now right in front of him, "You, are the git. I am standing right in front of you. I am, I say it again, am NOT, a ghost. I can't show myself, if I could I would be happy to oblige."
He lept backwards, shocked that I had sounded so close, and so angry. "Well what in the bloody heck are you?" Scorpius yelled.
"I am not a 'what'. I and a human being, and there is no need to be such a potty mouth..." I went on to mutter under my breath, "Great, the first person to acknowledge me, thinks I'm a 'what'."
His voice lowered, "Where are you? Why can't I see you?" His eyes roamed around the corridor, trying to spot me.
Flopping on the stone ground with a, thud, I sighed, my anger subsided and tears sprang to my eyes. "I don't know..." I whispered loudly enough for him to hear me. "I just don't know. You are the first person to feel or hear me for the past two years, and everyone thinks I'm missing, my brother blames himself," I choked, and now I started to sob, my shoulders shook, rasping breaths escaped my unseeable mouth, and lonely tears rolled down my invisible cheeks.
Scorpius looked like he had been stunned. Who could blame him? He just bumped into someone he could see, and was listening to some random girls tears, and he could even see where she was. And yes, I understand that it is impossible to listen to a tear.
His faced changed then, like things finally made a connection, "You're Bethany, Bethany Stone. William's little sister, the one who wen missing.."
I nodded, realized that it was lost on him, and instead whispered as I wiped away my tears, "Yes."
It was a small word, but it was that word that summed up my entire situation. I was missing, in a sense. No one could see me, no one could here me, no one could feel me. I was missing to the rest of the world. Until the day Scorpius Malfoy and I rammed into each other as I floated down the halls, marking my second anniversary of this curse.
:: AUTHOR'S NOTE, as much as it pains me to write this, it must be done. Poor, poor, Bethany Stone. Plus it is a rather humorous part..::
We were inturuppted by, of all the people in Hogwarts, William Stone.
William was a prefect. He received his badge in his fifth year letter. So him finding Scorpius out with a girl (meaning me, of course) when they should be in common room, was bad. But is it worse for him to find Scorpius there alone? Well, it was for me.
"Scorpius? Why are you still out here?" William asked him, using that annoying 'prefect' voice of his, where he pretended that he cared about the rules...but I still remembered receiving that toilet year, his first year, when I was seven. Where he got the inspiration for THAT one, I'm not sure.
"Erm..there's a girl...and.." Scorpius trailed off, not knowing how to word this. So I decided to make it easier.
I stood over, walker over to William and said, "William? William Steven Stone, I am right here..."
He didn't even flinch. I reached out, and tried to touch his cheek, instead I just went through him.
"You were out here with a girl?" William's eye brows knitted together, I sighed and walked away from my brother, I stood silently next to Scorpius. "Aren't you a little young to be out here, alone, with a girl?"
Scorpius's jaw dropped, "You think I...gosh no! I ran into a girl and I was, helping..her," he finished weakly.
I scoffed, "If 'helping' is the word you want to use."
"Oh, shut up," he snapped at me.
"Scorpius, I haven't said anything," William responded testily, "now get to your common room, I wouldn't want to have to report you to Professor Slughorn."
Scorpius nodded, visibly annoyed, but subdued. William turned to leave but Scorpius burst with another question, "So William, you honestly haven't heard anything other then...me and you?"
"Nothing but the castle creaking," William answered, oblivious to the meaning of the question, "now get to bed."
Scorpius nodded, wordlessly, and started walking to his common room. I followed him, silently.
Once in the common room, he stopped and turned, facing the air a foot from my face. "Over here," I said.
He turned and got close to seeing me, he now looked directly over my head, "Am I insane? Is that why I am the only one who can hear you, and feel you?"
I blinked and stared at him, "You think you're the insane one? What about me? No one can touch or hear or see me, and it has been like that for the past two years. Now someone can hear and feel me, but can't see me, and brother can't even tell I'm in the country."
Scorpius seemed to consider this, slowly he began to form a question, "How? How did this happen? You must know something?"
I replied huffily, "I know plenty, including who did this to me, but the how is still a mystery."
So I told him my tale. I explained how right before I crossed to the other barrier I ran into that strange witch. How the witch said, "A girl that cannot watch where she goes, should not be watched at all," and how after that no, human, ghost, portrait, house elf, or being, could see, hear, or feel me.
He spoke finally, "So the witch cursed you. That has to be it, she was a grouch, she was mad you ran into her, and she cursed you. I don't know why she cursed you, or why I can hear you and touch you but not see you, while no one else can. I say we go to the headmistress with this."
"NO!" I exclaimed, Scorpius looked confused.
"Why not?"
"Why in general? Do you want to be submitted to the luny house?" I replied quickly.
"Well yes, Luna Lovegood Whats-her-new-last-name, is very nice. I would love to go there."
I glared at him, not that it effected him at all, "Not what I meant, fresh-mouth. I meant, how can she believe you, and not like I can back up the story if she can't hear me. It won't do any good. Plus, I've lasted this long, I can wait until I die...."
Scorpius cocked his head, in a way I had gotten used to, "Can you die? I mean, if someone tried to stab you, would it go right through you? And if a spell was aimed at you, would it hit you?"
"First off," I said, noticing a pattern, "Why do you assume that that is how I would die, by someone killing me? And second, this enables people from seeing, hearing, or feeling me. I can walk through walls and can't pick up objects. But I think I can die. Not by own hands, but I can die."
I realized I had added, 'not by my own hands,' which I knew was true. I could not kill myself, and I had tried. I tried to stab myself, but I could not pick up the knife, I tried to jump in front of a curse (stunning, but you never know..) and it didn't work. I had yet to find a find a cliff to through myself off of, which is the only way I think I could kill myself, so until then, I was stuck in life and I had to deal with it.
Now looking at Scorpius, I wondered if this discovery would make it easier, or or harder.
Mordanyes
03-09-2011, 04:30 AM
Awesome chapter! There were a few spelling errors and such like interrupted but nothing too big!
I loved it and can't wait for more! :D
LillyJames
03-09-2011, 01:08 PM
Awesome chapter! There were a few spelling errors and such like interrupted but nothing too big!
I loved it and can't wait for more! :D
Thanks! I believe most of my posts will have some spelling errors, I try to fix them :) I'll try to get more up soon!
Cassiopia Malfoy
03-09-2011, 02:18 PM
zomgzomgzomgzomg!
SCORPIUS! :x3: and William, they are just too adorable!
Hm, Bethany, hmmm.. BUT WHY CAN'T SCORP SEE HER? I mean like, he can touch her, and hear her.
Where's Albus and Rose? *is nosey*
I freaking love this story, like, seriously, but I'm curious as to how you got the idea from a cough.. Is it because you can feel and hear coughs but you can't see them? *has weird theories*
Anyway, *steals Scorpius* looooooooving it!
pamspamspamsplease!
:glomp: -Gabbehxxx
LillyJames
03-09-2011, 09:05 PM
zomgzomgzomgzomg!
SCORPIUS! :x3: and William, they are just too adorable!
Hm, Bethany, hmmm.. BUT WHY CAN'T SCORP SEE HER? I mean like, he can touch her, and hear her.
Where's Albus and Rose? *is nosey*
I freaking love this story, like, seriously, but I'm curious as to how you got the idea from a cough.. Is it because you can feel and hear coughs but you can't see them? *has weird theories*
Anyway, *steals Scorpius* looooooooving it!
pamspamspamsplease!
:glomp: -Gabbehxxx
The cough thing..that's not really why but, it makes sense so lets go with that!
Rose and Albus will have small parts in this, but they will come in. I thought you would enjoy William and Scorpius.
And thanks soo much! *But you can't keep scorpius, it would ruin the story*.
:glomp: -Abbehxxxxx
crookshanks_kitty
03-09-2011, 09:33 PM
Oooh annother awesome chapter! I think I like it better than the first one. It keeps getting better. :yes: The part that William interrupted was annoying but I have to admit it was hilarious. Now William probably thinks Scorpious is out of his mind. It's also sad that Bethany had tried to kill herself. I can't imgaine how it muct feel to be invisible all the time and no one ever hearing you. :console: Wait the headmistress is Luna??? :gasp: Awesome! And one last thing I'm relaly curious to know (and hope) is whether that there'll be a possible romance coming along? :whistle: hint hint! :D
Awesome chappie! PAMS PAMS PAMS!!!
LillyJames
03-10-2011, 12:10 AM
Oooh annother awesome chapter! I think I like it better than the first one. It keeps getting better. :yes: The part that William interrupted was annoying but I have to admit it was hilarious. Now William probably thinks Scorpious is out of his mind. It's also sad that Bethany had tried to kill herself. I can't imgaine how it muct feel to be invisible all the time and no one ever hearing you. :console: Wait the headmistress is Luna??? :gasp: Awesome! And one last thing I'm relaly curious to know (and hope) is whether that there'll be a possible romance coming along? :whistle: hint hint! :D
Awesome chappie! PAMS PAMS PAMS!!!
Thanks! I actually thought the first chapter was better, so thanks!
I hadn't meant that the headmistress was Luna, but that is a good idea......::thoughtful::
And :yes: there will definitely be some romance.
Thanks again!!! xD
Ruby85
03-10-2011, 06:19 PM
Ding-Dong!
-jump around-
SCORPIUS CAN SEE HER!
-glomp tackles Scorpius-
PAMS!
LillyJames
03-10-2011, 11:37 PM
Disclaimer: J.K.R owns the Harry Potter world. I own Bethany, William, the plot, and maybe more characters to come.
Author's Note: This chapter is dedicated to two of my bros, because they turn Eighteen soon.
CHAPTER TWO: Part twp
The next couple days went by smoothly, I would talk with Scorpius when we were alone, not about much really, but it was enough for me that someone could hear me. I attended classes still, but now, if I didn't understand something, I could tell Scorpius and he would ask the teacher.
It worked the other way around in potions. I was naturally good at potions, just like the rest of my family. So when had trouble, I would simply pick up his arm, after tapping him on his shoulder so he knew, and guide it through the steps, while telling him what he was doing wrong.
Well, until once when the teacher seemed to see the blank look over Scorpius's features as he blanked out, as he did often when I was nagging on what he was doing wrong, and starting yelling at Scorpius. I laughed, he glared at my general direction.
When I said, "Serves you right for not listening," I heard the girl, who I was standing by and had unfortunately thought his glare was meant for her, whisper to her friend, "I think that Malfoy boy had it out for me.."
I turned to look at the whisperer, and smiled, the girl was Rose Weasley.
Later that night I lay down on the Slytherin's common room couch, thinking. Tears escaped my eyes, I watched my reflection in the mirror on the wall, directly across the couch. It was such an odd spot for the couch, to be facing the wall, with the fireplace behind it. I thought about how I could see tears cascading from my mist blue eyes, how no one else would ever see the same thing I was.
"Why me?" I questioned quietly. I know, what a cliché, the whole 'why me?' bit. But I was really feeling sorry for myself, and thought I deserved that one question. I didn't care how, I didn't care when, I didn't care who, all I cared about, was the why.
I remembered a time when William would always ask, "What ya feeling?" And sometimes I would respond, "annoyed," because it was proper. But now, I could hear his voice in my head, "what ya feeling?" so I tried to answer.
"I am feeling.." I began, "I am feeling...confused."
That didn't feel right, I mean, I was confused, but that wasn't exactly what I was feeling. "I am feeling a lot."
I heard foot steps coming this way, but I didn't look up, no one cared about me anyway. "Bethany?" I heard whispered, "You down here?" It was Scorpius.
I stayed quiet. I didn't want to talk to him. What could I say anyway? He only just met me.
"Well, if you are down here, good night. I wasn't sure if you could eat or not..." he placed a mug down on the small end table, I could smell chocolate, I inspected the steam rising out of the mug.
A small smile tugged at the ends of my lips, it was thoughtful of him, even though I couldn't eat. Deep inside I realized now what I was feeling. As Scorpius reached the bottom of the stairs, I finally spoke, "Scorpius?"
He stopped on the bottom step, and turned around, "Where are you?"
"I'm on the couch," I answered, I didn't why I thought I could trust him, why I would talk to him, but it wasn't like I could talk to anyone else. He sensed something in my voice, and came to the couch. He waited for a moment before sitting, giving me time to adjust my position. I pulled my legs to my chest, wrapped my arms around my legs and rested my chin between my knees.
"What's up Bethany?" he asked, not unkindly.
I didn't know how to say it, so I just said the firsts words that to mind, three simple words. In a very small voice I told him, "I am scared."
Scorpius was silent for a moment, obviously not knowing how to respond, then, "Of?"
"Well, for one, of never seeing my brother again, or more likely, him never seeing me," I answered, I was scared that he would continue to blame himself for my disappearance, and would never know, or notice, the truth that was staring him in the face.
Scorpius nodded, "There is more, isn't there?"
It was my turn to nod, "Yes," I whispered. I took a second, then I decided to tell him, "I'm afraid I'll disappear, for real this time. I'm afraid that one day, I'll just be carried off with the wind. Or that I get into trouble somehow, no one will know to look for me."
Scorpius thought for under a second, just enough time for his jaw, normally slacked, to set. "The wind can't carry you off, because I'll be here to hold you down. And I'll know to look for you, and somehow, I would help you."
I look his in the eyes, even though his were targeted an inch or so above mine, and said in an even smaller voice, "What if one day you won't be here either?"
He reached out, and found my hand, still pressed under my knee, he took a hold on it, "Bethany Stone," he told me, "I will always, always, be here for you. Do you hear me?"
I nodded, then added, "Yes."
"Good, now get to bed," Scorpius stood up.
I smiled and told him as a 'good night', "Yes Mom!"
He smirked, in a way that made me think that he must have a lot of practice with smirking, "Goodnight Bethany," he responded before disappearing up the stair.
And that was the real beginning of our friendship, a friendship that would take us to the end of the world and back...
Mordanyes
03-11-2011, 05:03 AM
Aww, sweet chapter! I loved it! :D
LillyJames
03-11-2011, 12:14 PM
Aww, sweet chapter! I loved it!
Hehe thanks :)
Disclaimer: Me, no writey of Harry Potter, J.K.R, writey of Harry Potter. I writey me own characters, plots, and, you get it!
^Translation to above: I don't own the rights to the world of Harry Potter!
Author's Note: Dedication to...me! I can be selfish occasionally, plus I've been pretty good at getting things posted, so YAY ME! (I'm egotistical, and proud of it!) :woot:
CHAPTER THREE: "There is a girl asleep on the couch"
Scorpius's PoV
I went to bed with a lot to think about, and I thought it was crazy. I had just become best friends with a girl I couldn't even see. See? That sounded pretty crazy. She had opened up me, and I told her things that I knew would be near impossible for me to do, but I didn't regret it. In fact, I was glad.
That night I had a strange dream, I only remember it because I kept seeing a pair of eyes, a misty blue. Sparks just seemed to fly from the eyes, but that was all I could remember from the dream...The dream probably only stuck with my memory because of what I was met with when I went down stairs.
I woke up to the sun rising, which was was a major pain in the but because of how late I stayed up the night before. I yawned, revealing my straight white smile and bad morning breath. Once I got dressed, brushed my teeth, and did absolutely nothing with my perfect blonde hair, I hurried down to the common, eager to get an early breakfast, maybe go flying with Bethany until classes. Being a Malfoy, I was blessed with good looks with the hassle of trying, not that I cared either way,
My plans however crumbled when I skidded to a halt in the common room, ready to find and wake my invisible friend. My crumbled plans were because I was greeted by the sight of a girl sound asleep on the common room couch.
Said girl had thick, wavy, light brown hair, looked about the same as me (okay fine, probably an inch taller then me...or two..), but that was to be expected as I had not yet hit my growth spurt yet (A fact I constantly had to bring up around some of my taller companions). The fact that threw me, was that she was dressed in muggle clothing. Plain jeans, even though they seemed rather short on her, and a light blue hoodie with some American logo on it.
She, Scorpius couldn't help but think, is kinda pretty....
"Why," I began to myself, "there is a girl asleep on the couch, I would like to know."
Another thought struck me. That was the couch Bethany usually slept on, so that was probably sleeping on Bethany.
I stood there, dumbfounded as to what to do, that is, until her eyes flickered open.
Bethany's PoV:
I had slept well, having fallen asleep almost as soon as Scorpius had left.
That morning I woke up, stayed lying down for a moment, then sat up, stretching. I yawned quietly, and looked around.I saw Scorpius standing there, gaping at me. Well, I reasoned with myself, he isn't gaping AT me...Wait a second..
I stood up, his eyes followed mine, I felt my heart quicken. I stepped over to the right, his eyes still followed mine.
"Oh my word..." I whispered, "Scorpius? You can...you can see me?"
Now his eyes widened even larger, so large I thought that soon I would see a pair of blue-green eyes rolling towards me, "Beth...Bethany?!"
I was speechless. First he could hear me (via train). Then he could feel me (via running into each other). Now he could see me. I took a step forward, his eyes still stayed on mine, "Ohmiword,ohmiword,ohmigish,ohmigosh, OH MY GOSH!" I ran forward and hugged him, now just way too happy for my own good. Of course, I figured, no one other the Scorpius could probably see me, but this was still huge.
Slowly his arms went up around me, and we stood there for a second until, "Scorpius?" Yolanda Zabini stepped into the common room, I started laughing. What an idiot Scorpius must have looked like right at that moment, especially since no one could see me, other then Scorpius. "What, I dare ask, are you doing?" Yolanda flipped her shoulder length black hair out of her face (Although, really, it wasn't in her face..)
"I'm..." he began, he looked at me for help.
I noticed her flipping her hair again, "Uh, compliment her on her hair," I advised, it was not obvious the Yolanda wanted to get Scorpius's attention, I think she was attempting to flirt, but I must say she was doing horrible, plus Scorpius would never go for her, but I didn't get why I cared if he did or not.
He raised his eye brow at me, but obviously couldn't think of anything else to say, "Yolanda? Did you do something with your hair? It looks very nice today."
I blinked, and hid my emotions. WOW could he be sweet if he wanted, his voice had seemed to drip with honey, he could make ALMOST any girl melt in his hand.
Yolanda blushed and began to twirl her hair, "Oh not really, I just brushed it a bit is all."
"Liar," I muttered. I could see the burn mark on the back of her neck where she had used a straighter.
"What are you doing up so early this morning?" Yolanda asked Scorpius, batting her too-long eye lashed and smiling with her too-cute dimples.
Scorpius shrugged and gaver her a friendly smirk, "I was thinking of getting some practice out on the broom, you know, get ready for the upcoming season. They need me if we ever want to win against Albus and the rest of his team."
"Oh that's right, I forgot you were on the team, but how could I forget with that spectacular catch you made last year during the last game..."
At that point I tuned out, I turned to Scorpius, "I'm going to wander around," I told him, not really caring if he knew or not. He didn't even look at me, but he held up his thumb behind his back. I walked out of the common. I didn't know where I wanted to go, but anywhere was better then with the two in there.
I decided I would go to the headmistresses office, I knew where it was from first year, because of how often William would be there, settling things about my "disappearance".
When I arrived I simply walked past the Gargoyles and through the wall ( a perk of the invisible thing...) then up the spiral stairs. I entered the office, "Hello Portraits," I told them, knowing they couldn't hear me. I sat on the Headmistresses chair for a bit, looked around, and then I spotted it. The sorting hat.
Having disappeared before my sorting I was placed in a house, I have just drifted. There was the sorting hat, sitting a shelf, just sitting there. It was about level with the top of my head, which was perfect. Now yes I realized that I could not physically pick up the sorting hat, as was a downside of this invisible thing, but I had figured that out. Of course, there was no knowing for sure if it would work or not. But I had to try.
I stepped into the shelf. Just remember that I can step into walls, well this shelf was no different. I stepped into it, and positioned myself so I was just under the sorting, standing on my tiptoes, I could make it so my head fit into the sorting hat.
Now just visualize this. Me, stepping in a bookshelf, so I am literally in the book case, standing on my tip-toes so I could fit my head a sorting hat that I could not physically pick up.
I jumped when I heard a voice coming from the hat...I was stunned. It had actually worked.
"Miss Stone," said the voice, "The Invisible Girl, I was wondering when you would show up..."
"How do you know.." I was going to finish with, 'me', but that seemed a pointless question to ask, especially since it could probably read my thoughts. So instead I thought, "What house I am in, or rather, what house am I supposed to be in?"
"You are loyal, loyal to your friend, to your family, mostly to your brother," the hat went on, "but brave too, also very smart, especially for a girl who has been quite tardy from school.."
I wasn't nervous like most people being sorted, probably because it didn't matter much, not like I was really attending the school. I just wanted to feel like I belonged somewhere, so I can be rooting, silently, for my house.
"You seem to have the Slytherin mark on you though, must have been spending some time in there too.." the hat continued on, "You are hard girl, hard to place..."
I understood that, how couldn't I be hard to place, if no one could find me in the first place? "Why not have you follow in your brother's foot-steps. Gryffindor it shall be!"
The hat called out now, loudly, "GRYFFINDOR!"
All of the portraits glared at the hat, "Humph, why I never, a sleep talking hat...." I heard one utter. Chuckling to myself, I made my escape from the office.
Now I knew where I would stay each night, no more drifting fro place to place. I was digging my roots into Hogwarts and it would take a lot to get me to leave...
Mordanyes
03-11-2011, 08:42 PM
I laughed out loud at the 'sleep talking hat' part! Great chapter! Bethany and Scorpius are so cute!
Jessica
03-12-2011, 09:34 AM
You have another reader!
Your story is pretty original! :) :)
PAMS!!
~~Jay~~
Ruby85
03-13-2011, 09:07 PM
"Humph, why I never, a sleep talking hat...."
made me LOL!
SCORPIUS CAN SEE HER!
-glomp tackles Scorp again-
PAMS!
LillyJames
03-13-2011, 09:50 PM
I laughed out loud at the 'sleep talking hat' part! Great chapter! Bethany and Scorpius are so cute!
xD Haha, Thanks! I agree, they are indeed cute.
You have another reader!
Your story is pretty original!
PAMS!!
~~Jay~~
:woot: Another reader!! Thanks, I try to keep my stories to my own imagination, I don't take ideas from other things...
made me LOL!
SCORPIUS CAN SEE HER!
-glomp tackles Scorp again-
PAMS!
Dont kill Scorpius with your glomps! :) I'll post more as soon as I can!
Thanks for the comments!!!
crookshanks_kitty
03-14-2011, 08:56 PM
Wow that was quick! I just came to check if you had a new chapter update and there were two. Sorry for my tardiness. I must say, I'm so happy that Scorpious can now see Bethany. That ought to lighten her spirit a little. :yes: Oh and Scorpious sure sounds handsome! :eyebrows: Argh that Yolanda girl! Get away from Bethany's guy. :poke: Oh one last thing, the sorting idea was great. Interesting how you mentioned she wants to fit in, it makes sense pschologically. Haha and the sleep talking hat part was priceless. :lol:
Awesome posts as usual. Keep up the amazing work. PAMS!!! :D
LillyJames
03-14-2011, 09:34 PM
Hehe Thanks :) Here is the next chapter
Disclaimer: Jo Rowling owns Bethany and the plot, I own the harry potter characters...wait..that's not right, Reverse that, there you go!
Author's note: Enjoy!!!!
CHAPTER FOUR: Allergies to Mandrake
Once I left the office I went to my common room. I passed William along the way, he did not look at me, so I continued on, slightly saddened that he still could not see me. I entered my common room and sat in front of the fire (this was the normal way a couch was, unlike the Slytherin's).
I stared into the flames, I slowly put my hand toward the flames, I mean, why not? Not like I could get burned, actually, when I began to think of it, that was one of the only things I hadn't tried as of yet. I could feel weather. I could feel the cold, I feel the heat, I could feel wind, but never before had I tried fire.
I placed my hand in the flames, then instantly recoiled with pain and shock. I stared at my hand, already blistering. Despite the pain, I smiled and I laughed. Wow, plenty have things have changed recently, maybe I'm coming back? I thought to myself. I placed my hand in the fire again, just so I could feel it. Again I recoiled with a yelp.
Smiling, I ran down to the great hall, while blowing air on my burnt hand. Upon arriving at the great hall, Scorpius was shocked by me jumping into the seat next to him. He stared at me, then muttered, "What the heck Bethany?!"
"I need to talk to you, now," I told him, yanking at his hand. He reached down to swipe my hand away, but instead I just pulled him off the bench.
He fell back with a yelp, several girls near-by snickered at him, "Umm..." he stammered.
"Oh, for merlin's sake, come ON!" I pulled at him again. He groaned and stood up.
Muttering to me, "You better have a good explanation for this Stone...", he followed out of the great hall and into the corridors.
I smiled from ear to ear, practically jumping, I reached out my burnt hand.
His eyes went from slits to a wide stare of shock to a look of horror. He picked up arm, inspecting my hand, "And you are happy about this, why?"
I didn't wait a moment, "Because," lying extra stress on that word I explained, "I feel it! The flames effected me! They gave me blisters!" I could have done two laps around the right then, with the amount of energy I had.
"...You know how insane that sounds, right?"
I started giggling, again, I was just way too happy. What a good week I had been having.
"You are insane...and I am a friend of an insane person that no one can see, hear, or feel..."
"You make me sound like an imaginary friend," I responded, still giddy. Then I remembered I had yet to tell him about the sorting hat, "OH! Guess what?" without waiting for an answer I continued, "I'm sorted!"
He blinked at me, absorbing what I had just said, "You..How?"
"I stood inside a bookshelf and went under the sorting hat. It sorted me," I stated mater-of-factly.
"...I'm going to pretend that made sense," was his simple answer. I smiled again, flashing my bright smile.
"Now all I'm waiting for, is to be able to pick up and taste food..." I responded jokingly, although it was perfectly true. I knew how good the food here was, I could smell it. But I had yet to be able to taste it.
Scorpius was still staring at my burnt hand, as if watching it would make it heal. I knew that eventually I would start to get annoyed with my burnt skin, but at that moment, I was ecstatic about the pain, and, quite frankly,rather disappointed that he did not show the same enthusiasm that I did. "Oh come on, this is a good thing, right? Something," other then you, I added in my head, "affected me! I could feel something!"
"But...did you have to burn your hand?" he asked, exasperated. "I mean, that's really going to hurt you, and because we can't treat it, it will probably scar..."
I groaned, rolling my eyes, "Who cares if it scars Scorp? I mean, who else is going to see them. At this rate, you'll be the only one ever to see me. Not even my own stinking family can tell I'm right in front of them!" I began to yell near the end, barely holding back my tears. I turned away from him, my joyful mood immediately replaced by the frustration and hopelessness in my whole situation. Great, thanks a lot teen-age hormones, JUST what I need I thought sarcastically.
I knew Scorpius still hadn't moved, and didn't what to do, now embarrassment was added to the mix of emotions. Why was that when I wanted to disappear, I was easily seen? I didn't know what to do, I didn't know where to go. So I just said, in a flat voice, "You ought to get to class, it would be starting soon."
He was silent for a moment more then, "Well? Are you coming with me?" He had herbology. Gryffindor's didn't have that class with them this year.
"No. I have divination, I was sorted into Gryffindor," with that, I decided it was best that I walk away. I got maybe a meter away when he stepped forward and grabbed my arm. I jumped at the contact (Okay well, maybe I wasn't quite used to things being able to touch me).
I turned and looked at Scorpius, I tried to say 'what', but my voice failed me. Instead he spoke, a mischievous grin creeping onto his face, he wiped it away and showed a mock look of disappointment, "Oh, so now you are going to skip out on your BEST friend, who is inviting you to go flying, just to go to a dumb divination class?"
I couldn't help the showing the small smile that tugged on my lips, "I don't believe hearing an invitation."
Now he allowed his smile to spread across his whole face, "Come on."
He led me back into the great hall, pausing briefly to ask a class-mate of his a question, "Yo, what are we doing in Herbology today?"
The boy considered then responded, "Professor Longbottom is going to have us handle Mandrakes this time..."
Scorpius groaned, "Darn it all, I'm allergic to Mandrake leaves. Can you tell him that I'll just stay here and work on the last paper assignment he gave us."
"Yeah, sure thing Scorp," the boy walked off toward his class. Once he was out of sight we dashed off, towards the quidditch pitch, having made a detour so Scorpius could grab his latest LIGHTNING BOLT 2016. Instantly we were upon the broom, flying high above the ground, it was wonderful.
A few hours later I was taking a nap in the library. It had started out as a quiet place to think, then a small rest that turned into a nap, well at one point I was deep asleep, dreaming...(I call it dreaming, but is there a simple word for when you are have a night mare? night-maring? Or rather, Day-maring? maybe, fright-daring...)
In my day-mare I was graduating. I had stepped forward, the headmistress handed me my diploma. I was supposed to make a speech. I stepped forward but when I started talking, everyone started mumbling, they couldn't hear me. Next thing I knew, William was saying, "She's gone and done it again, just floated off.."
Then I was in the great hall, two men stood dressed in muggle suits, beckoning me, "Come with us," they kept saying. I went with them, they took to the school grounds, one was about to speak when my scene changed again.
I was in Malfoy Manor (Easily distinguished by the people in the room; Scorpius, his father Draco, his mother whom I didn't know, Narcissa (his father's mother), Lucius (his father's father), and his Aunt Bellatrix (who every one knew to be dead, having died during the great battle)). I was alone in a room with Bellatrix, not quite alone, Scorpius stood behind me colored like starch. Bellatrix couldn't see me. She only saw Scorpius. She screamed the Crucio curse. Instead of hitting Scorpius, like it was meant, it hit me. I collapsed in withering pain, unable to see, unable to hear, unable to stop screaming....A voice echoed in my ears, getting louder, "Bethany...Bethany! Wake up!"
I woke up gasping for breath, I saw Scorpius standing there, looking confused and worried. "You were having a night-mare Beth...a bad one at that.."
"Oh.." I said, shaking at the memory of it. It had seemed so real, but Scorpius and I were in the library, not in Malfoy Manor.
There was silence for a moment, that type of silence my day seemed full of, where neither knew exactly what to say, or how to say it. Scorpius broke the silence, "What happened? You were silent when I came in here, then a second later you started screaming..almost fell out of your chair!"
"I was um.." I contemplated lying, who wants to hear that their long-dead aunt had been trying to hit crucio them but hit their best friend instead? Then I decided on the truth, it was better to have an honest friendship. I said the calmest, most boring voice I could, "I was being tortured accidentally by your long dead aunt who was trying to torture you."
He sat down next to me, a blank look on his face, "Oh."
I nodded, "Yep."
He looked at me, his blue-green eyes filled with worry, "Are you okay?"
I gave him a convincing smile, "I'm fine."
"Okay but if you need something from the infirmary, I can always—" I cut him off.
"Scorpius, I'm fine, really, I'm fine."
He hesitated, then nodded, "You know, you missed potions. It was great! Professor Longbottom's kid, Frank, blew up his cauldron and sent wart remover all over the dungeons. But he had done something wrong, and it grew worts over EVERY one, we got them in some pretty uncomfortable places. His twin, Alice, had to do the reverse spell, because the professor's wand was even coated in warts!"
We both burst into laughter, forgetting our worries. I would be alright, as long as Scorpius was okay, I would be alright...
Mordanyes
03-15-2011, 06:22 AM
Really awesome chapter!
LillyJames
03-15-2011, 11:06 AM
Really awesome chapter!
Thanks! :glomp: You're always the first one to comment, that only mean one of two things. One; you really like my FF! Or two; you are on SnitchSeeker way to often :) Or both!
Mordanyes
03-15-2011, 08:53 PM
Both really :P :D
Ladybug
03-15-2011, 10:03 PM
New reader.
This is brillient! I just love reading it!
PAMS!
Eviee <33
LillyJames
03-15-2011, 10:33 PM
Both really
Hehe :) Glad you enjoy it!
New reader.
This is brillient! I just love reading it!
PAMS!
Eviee <33
:woot: YAY! New reader! :party: Yay! (I am way too excited)
Thanks! I'll post soon! (Well, actually, I have to write the next chapter first....)
LillyJames
03-16-2011, 10:49 PM
Disclaimer: I must say what everyone one earth, excluding the Amazing J.K.R, must say, I do not and, unless I am somehow the luckiest person alive, I will never, own the Harry Potter world. I own my characters and my plot.
Author's note: I have been having Major writers block, and when that happens, I tend to skip ahead several months (sometimes years, Right Cassie?) , or add some random, dramatic, action-y, part. Though I try not to, I see nothing else to do. So I must decide which one to do, so I, being unable to make decisions, shall do both!!
CHAPTER FIVE: Part one; Unsuspecting Events
February 7,
I am stuck, and no one knows it. Some of my worst fears have come true. And where is Scorpius? He had told me that he would be here..that he would always find a way to never let me disappear again. And here I am, shaking so I can hardly hold this mangled quill, hungry so that I forget what having a full stomach feels like, thirsty so that my mouth feels more like sand...I know that what he promised is hard to deliver, and I don't blame him. In fact, I hope he safe in the castle..but somehow I know that he is trying to find me, and it worries me. I wonder if he is safe. I wonder if he even realized I am not there. I wonder when I shall leave this...this...cesspool.I wonder, I wonder....
Setting aside the torn, worn, and old parchment aside, I sighed to myself. Pondering how I got into such a situation. I supposed it started when my nightmares became reality...
I was sitting with my fellow Gryffindors, which was decidedly boring. No one could talk to me, or see me, but I got to sit with my house. I got to listen to people talk. I got to be normal, kinda.
That is, until my dream came to life. Two men in black suits walked over. No one blinked at them, no one even bat an eye. No one seemed to think it was un-usual for two men to walk in dressed completely in black muggle-suits. They stopped behind me, I turned around to see them better.
"Come with us," they said in unison, sending a chill down my back. Their dark sun-glasses made it impossible to tell where they were looking.
But I knew. I felt three pairs of eyes boring into me. Two pairs belonged to the strange men, while the other pair, I could tell with out looking over my shoulder, was Scorpius's.
"Me?" I asked, confused beyond belief. These men could see me?
"Bethany Sylvia Stone, please come with us," the men said at the same time.
I was freaked out now, "How can you see me? Why can't they see you? Who are you? What do you want? Where do you want to take me? When did you get here?" were the questions I wanted ask, but somehow the questions never left my mouth. Now my question to myself, "Should I go with them?"
"Come," monotoned the one on the right.
I had to ask a question, so I just plucked one that surface in the sea of questions that had become my mind, "Are you real?" Yeah, it was a pathetic question, but a very reasonable one at that.
I think I saw a grin for a half second on the face of the man on the left. "As real as you," responded the man on the left.
"Fair enough..." I looked around, finding Scorpius among the kids. I pleaded with him, "What should I do?" I asked him with my eyes.
His eyes reflected confusions and worry he began to stand, but then I was distracted by the men giving each other glances, the message was clear, I had to go now.
What was the worse that could happen if I went with them? Not like many people would miss me if something happened, well, other then Scorpius, but he would get over it eventually....right?
I stood up, they began to walk away, as did I. Only one pair of blue-green eyes were upon us as we exited the great hall.
"What do you want?" I managed to ask once we were out by the lake.
"You must he-" the man on the right was suddenly interrupted by a confused blonde haired boy.
"Bethany? What is going on here?" Scorpius Malfoy asked as soon he was in hearing shot.
The two men exchanged glances, then instead of answering to Scorpius, they turned to me. "That boy can see you?"
I rolled my eyes, "Nope. He's blind as a bat. Of course he can see me! Why else would he have been the only child watching us as we walked out of the great hall?"
The men glared at each other (Or I assume they did, it was hard to tell with the dark sunglasses on).
Scorpius repeated his earlier question, and finally there was an answer, or half of one. "We need Bethany Stone's help."
Scorpius and I blinked at each other in confusion, then Scorpius asked the obvious, "With?"
"A rescue mission," the men answered simultaneously.
"Rescue who? From who?" Scorpius asked, now the spokes person for me apparently.
They were about to answer when a crazed, female, voice rang out.
"Scorpius Orion Malfoy! My dear, dear great-nephew. How much you look like your father..."
We turned, right into the sight of a dead (Or so we thought..) women walking (or skipping more likely) up to a stunned Scorpius Malfoy.
Our jaws hung to the ground, our eyes popped from their sockets.
Bellatrix Lestrange was back from the dead. And she was standing right in front of them.
AN: To be continued.......
Cassiopia Malfoy
03-17-2011, 01:13 AM
WHY THE HECK IS BELLATRIX BACK?!
And why was she able to hold that parchment?
And who are those two men?
And where is my refund?
AND WHY IS SCORP SO ADORABLE?
And I like Rose Weasley appearing.
And you bringing in of Frank and Alice.
And I LOVE Scorp's full name.
So, who is the headmistress?
And Bethany is Gryffindor, huhhhhhhhhhh...
Did I cover everything?
OH YEA!
I LOVE THE STORY SOOOOOOO MUCH!
pamspamspamspamspamsplease!
xxxx-Gabbeh
LillyJames
03-17-2011, 01:19 AM
WHY THE HECK IS BELLATRIX BACK?!
And why was she able to hold that parchment?
And who are those two men?
And where is my refund?
AND WHY IS SCORP SO ADORABLE?
And I like Rose Weasley appearing.
And you bringing in of Frank and Alice.
And I LOVE Scorp's full name.
So, who is the headmistress?
And Bethany is Gryffindor, huhhhhhhhhhh...
Did I cover everything?
OH YEA!
I LOVE THE STORY SOOOOOOO MUCH!
pamspamspamspamspamsplease!
xxxx-Gabbeh
:evil: I can't tell you most of those things.
Your refunds!
Because he came from my imgaination. To the rest: :)
THANKS!
Mordanyes
03-17-2011, 10:15 AM
... Oh my gosh... Did you seriously just make that cliffhanger happen? I can't wait for more now! PAMS!
Brilliant chapter! :D
LillyJames
03-17-2011, 11:05 AM
... Oh my gosh... Did you seriously just make that cliffhanger happen? I can't wait for more now! PAMS!
Brilliant chapter! :D
I did just seriously make that cliff hanger happen! I'll post more tonight (Well...if I get it written first..)
Jessica
03-19-2011, 03:26 AM
:faint: ::faint: :faint:
This is gettin' pretty excitin'!!
PAMS!
~~Jay~~
Ladybug
03-19-2011, 02:45 PM
Such a brillient chapter! She's back!? :O Oh dear this can not be good!
PAMS!
Eviee <33
LillyJames
03-19-2011, 04:14 PM
Thanks guys! I'm pretty busy this weekend, but I might post tomorrow!
LillyJames
03-20-2011, 03:17 AM
Disclaimer: You know, all the disclaimers I've already posted are still in effect.
Authors note: Sorry it's short, I've got to go to bed, and I thought I would post what I had..
CHAPTER FIVE: Part Two; Unsuspecting Events
Of course, Bellatrix could only see one person standing if front of her.
"Bellatrix?!" Scorpius almost yelled.
Bellatrix stepped forward and slapped her hand against his mouth. "Shush boy! And it's "Aunt Bellatrix" to you."
I glared at her, instantly hating her. Hating the crazed look in her eyes, hating her mangled hair, hating the twitch in her mouth...I wanted to hit her, of course it wouldn't effect her...
"You are supposed to be dead, so I don't really have to call you anything," Scorpius responded coolly.
I saw it coming before he did, so I stopped it (well, not really, more like I jumped along for the ride..)
"NO!" I ran forward, grabbing Scorpius's arm, clinging on so hard I probably cut off his circulation. He stared at me, realizing what I was doing, his eyes widened as Bellatrix lunged forward grabbing his arm as well. Just as I saw she was going to apparate, I shoved Scorpius out of her grip.
He was left there, still gaping along with the men. I heard faintly as I was sucked away, one of the mysterious men say, "The rescue mission is for her....."
We landed heavily in Malfoy Manner, Bellatrix was stumped as to how Scorpius was not there with her. And I was stumped as to what had happened. Somehow I went from eating in the Great Hall, to sitting on the floor with a dead women in Malfoy Manner.
I was terrified, to put it bluntly. Yes, I had seen Malfoy Manner in my dreams, but I didn't actually know where it was. So I was stuck there. I was stuck and only three people knew where I was. And only one of them could be seen by other people.
Not that it mattered who know, because no one would believe him. I had disappeared two years ago, to everyone else, I was already dead.
Bellatrix was mad. She was more then mad. She was mad enough to kill. It was times like that, when I was glad that people didn't know I was in the room.
She, however, seemed to know I was in the room...
"I know your in here little girl," her crazed eyes scanned the room, looking right past me several times, "Come out and," she paused dramatically, looking only a few inches to my left, "play!" A crooked smile played on her lips. Like, like she had planned this all along...like she...like she really never wanted Scorpius. Like she wanted me this whole time. But how could she want me? She couldn't even know about me..
"You sick old witch!" I screamed, half hoping she could hear me. Half hoping she couldn't. I screamed it again, "You sick OLD WITCH!"
She didn't even blink. She did throw curses all across the room, while screaming threat's, "You don't stand a chance! Everyone thinks your dead! No one cares about you! But you could do well working for me, continuing on in the Dark Lord's work. Join us Bethany, come and help the rightful cause. You could do well for us, I even know how to reverse that curse on you. You want to be seen again, don't you? Your brother, your parents, they could all see you. Understand that you didn't abandon them..."
That made me pause. Be seen again? All I would have to do is work for Bella- WHAT AM I SAYING?! I shook the thought from my head. As much as I wanted to be heard and be seen, especially by my family, NOTHING could get me to work for Bellatrix.
"Very well then girl, you have now heard my offer. So I must hear your answer. I'll let you see that I can keep my promises.." She closed her eyes and called out, "Laudivite Sentirey Videril!" A flash of yellow light.
I winced, expecting something. But nothing happened. Nothing except, Bellatrix was staring right at me.
"What a pathetic sight..." Bellatrix murmured. "See? I can make you visible again, I can get your beloved brother to see you..I can make it happen, all you have to do is say, 'yes'."
I stared at her, then I glared at her, then I stood up in front of her. "There is something I have wanted to say to you," I told her, staring at her wild, greasy hair, "Something I'm surprised people haven't already told you," I took another step closer, so I was now right at her disgusting ear, I whispered into it, "Wash your hair, you sick old, WITCH!"
I was rewarded by the unbearable, unforgivable, pain of the Crucio curse.
Mordanyes
03-20-2011, 06:05 AM
Oh. My. Gosh. You did not just give us another cliffhanger did you?
Brilliant chapter! :D PAMS!
Ladybug
03-20-2011, 10:20 AM
Oh my, that was really good.
She wanted Bethany all along? Hmm.
PAMS it was really good..
Eviee <33
LillyJames
03-20-2011, 12:53 PM
Thanks guys! I'm pretty busy (Church today, then I'm getting ready to go to Haiti, PLUS my school during this..((yes, I am going to Haiti, for two weeks)) But I'll try to post before I leave! (I leave on Wednesday)
Ruby85
03-20-2011, 02:41 PM
:faint:
LillyJames
03-21-2011, 01:04 AM
Haha, Thanks Ruby!
Okay, I'm working on more, but I seem to have come down with a case of Writers block. Suggestions are welcome! Please, I can fit anything in at this point, whether a purple unicorn an epic explosion....Help is welcome!
Cassiopia Malfoy
03-21-2011, 03:04 PM
um..... I'm in complete and total shock, (psttt, it's actually spelled manor not manner :P) and I'll think of a way to fit in an epic explosion (if I can't call J.J.Abrams or Michael Bay) anyway :x3: it was a really good chapter, well, I mean, it isn't good that Bellatrix is going to try and attempt to either kill Bethany or make her evil. WHERE IS SCORP? Or William, I want either one to show up and save the day (more so Scorpius then William because Scorpius is ADORABLE) (William is too, but not as much)
Anyway, off the huuuuuge subject of that thingy above.
I ABSOLUTELY ADORED THE NEWEST CHAPTER!
pamspamspamspamspamspamspleeeeeease!
Love, Gabbeh
LillyJames
03-21-2011, 09:47 PM
Yes well...I'm glad you support the Epic explosion, I actually know a spot I can fit it in, but it can't be in for another couple posts! My next chappie will be in Scorpius's point of view...I still need to figure out where I'm heading with the two men showing up....
Thanks for commenting!
itsjustjesse
03-22-2011, 06:54 AM
Hey there I have to say I love your usage of cliffhangers. Its spectacular!
LillyJames
03-22-2011, 11:00 AM
Thank you! Because I am leaving tomorrow morning, I will try to post tonight!
LillyJames
03-23-2011, 01:06 AM
Okay, this is incredibly short, but it's something! I leave tomorrow, and won't be home until April 6th, so hope this satisfies you until then!
LillyJames
03-23-2011, 01:09 AM
Disclaimer: I own the world of Harry Spotter, Jo owns the world of Harry Potter. (Well, Actually, I have no character named Harry Spotter, I only have the Stone Family, among other various people)
Author's note: Dedicated to; Cathy Hazelton, for being the Amazingly wonderful person she is.
CHAPTER FIVE: Part Three; Unsuspecting Events
Scorpius's PoV
I stood there like an idiot, gaping at the spot where my dead great-aunt and invisible best friend had vanished. I whirled to face the two strange men, "Who are you? Who was she supposed to rescue? And where the heck does my great aunt fit into this equation?!"
They looked at each other, then the one on the left (I made a mental note to find out their names, if they had any) said, "The rescue mission is for her....."
"How the heck could it have been for her if she wasn't kidnapped before you got here?" I snapped at them irritably.
"We have our orders, we were just carrying them out," one of the men said.
"How do we get her back..my aunt is a murderer! She'll kill Bethany if she finds out she's there!" I yelled at them, now not caring who heard me yelling at thin air...
One of the men (I really needed to figure out their names...) said bitterly (Hey! He showed emotion), "Bellatrix knows alright. She knew along that Bethany was here. She knew that you could see her. She knew how to get her." At my blank expression the man drew a long deep sigh of frustration. "She was the cause of her disappearance in the first place!"
Again, I blinked in confusion. I must've seemed pretty dumb, but what they were saying made no sense. "How? Bethany told me that an old Witch at the train station in her first year cursed her because she bumped into her."
One of the men grumbled under their breath, I didn't know what he said, but I'm sure it wasn't nice. "Okay I'll put it slowly," the more talkative one began, "the old witch was Bellatrix, probably using Polly Juice Potion. She was intending to take her right then, but then something happened, we aren't sure what, that made Bellatrix leave."
"Why the heck would Bellatrix do that?!" I called wildly, now I was panicking, knowing that my friend was in the hands of a crazy, sadistic, murderer.
The men answered at the same time, "Because she wants to finish what You-Know-Who started."
I swayed on the spot, she wanted Bethany to...kill?! "She would never do that," I stated defensively.
The one on the right answered, "She will if she is persuaded correctly."
"How is that?"
"Being able to be seen again."
I opened my mouth, then closed it. Well, maybe he was right. I probably would have taken the deal myself. But she was different, she didn't like violence...well, actually, I wouldn't quite know, if she wanted to hit people, her hand would have gone right through them..except for me. And she only hit me once, but I deserved that... "Well how do we rescue her?" was what I asked instead.
There was silence, "We think Bellatrix took her to Malfoy Manor. You used to live there. Therefore, you know the place better then any one we could possible ask. You need to rescue her Scorpius. That and, if Bethany is still invisible, then you are the only one that could help her."
Translated, I needed to break into Malfoy Manor, and if Bethany was too beat up to do anything, it was my job to carry her out. I was non too thrilled with my assignment.
Cassiopia Malfoy
03-23-2011, 01:15 AM
Come here Scorpy-Worpy, you need a hug *holds out arms*
Well, Bellatrix Black Lestrange, you are one weird crazy - HOW THE HECK ARE YOU STILL ALIVE YOU FREAKISH - can I have your autograph?!
Anyway, those two men should be name Tom and Bob, haha, not Tom, Bruce and Bob! Hahahahahah *laughs weirdly*
I love the update, and the thought of Scorp carrying Bethany :eyebrows:
Your just soo brilliant it's not even funny!
LOOOOOOOVE IT STILL!
pamspamspamspamspamspamspleeeeease!
Love, Gabbeh
Mordanyes
03-23-2011, 08:58 AM
*glomps Scorpius* I LOVED that chapter! SOOOOO glad it wasn't as much of a cliffhanger as the others. PAMS! :D
Ladybug
03-23-2011, 08:53 PM
Brillient chapter!!!! (:
Was really good, didn't care it was short.
I like the sound of this mission, i can tell it's going to be really interesting to read (:
PAMS!
Eviee <33
Ruby85
04-02-2011, 08:45 PM
Hang on Beth! I'll help you Scorp... :eyebrows:
Lol jokes
PAMS!
-Glomp tackles Scorp-
LillyJames
04-07-2011, 02:02 AM
Well, I must post soon! Thank you so much for all the posts and comments!
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-07-2011, 03:12 AM
OMG YAY! :glomp: soooo excited! :x3: And your welcome of course
LillyJames
04-10-2011, 10:12 PM
Disclaimer: Unless a black hole has sucked up all the sense in the world, I do not own Harry Potter.
Author's note: Thank you for waiting! I realize I haven't posted lately...
CHAPTER SIX: A long night...
Bethany's PoV:
It's funny how often we use the word, "unbearable" and still manage to bear it. For instance, the unbearable, unforgivable Crucio curse, is not quite unbearable. Horrible, yes. But if it were unbearable, I would not have survived the encounter. Which might have been a good thing, because then I would not have been sitting in the dimly lit basement in Malfoy Manor, with no one knowing where I was, and I couldn't walk through walls anymore, because I was visible with no one to see me.
Leaning my head against the wall, I sighed. Nothing to do now but wait. And waiting is "unbearable" to me.
Unfortunately, I wasn't waiting long. Right when I was about to fall asleep, Bellatrix walked in, angry, wand in hand, and ready to take out her anger on anything. And I, sadly, fell into the "anything" category....This was going to be a long night.
Scorpius's PoV:
I am a third year, with limited magic. I need more magic. How? That was what was going through my head as I sat under the tree by the lake.
I was still pondering this when William Stone came up behind me and sat down to my left.
"What are you thinking about?" William asked.
I looked at him, a sudden idea came to mind. I answered truthfully, "Your sister."
That seemed to surprise him. "Well, why? I mean, I think about her too, but you didn't know her," William responded, a confusion filling his face.
I shook my head sadly, "I know her Will, and why do you speak past tense about her?"
He looked even more confused then ever, "You can't have known her. And, well frankly Scorp, it's been two years. Most missing children don't make it past two days."
I laughed despite myself, "Will, you're a smart kid okay? But your sister is not 'most missing children'. She is not even missing...well, wasn't until this morning...."
"What are you talking about Malfoy?" William asked me sternly, I flinched. I hated being called Malfoy.
"What I'm talking about, Stone, is that your sister was here. In the castle. For two damn years and no one could see her, hear her, or feel her until this year when I..bumped into her. I was the only one who could see her, and now my not-so-dead Aunt Bellatrix has come and captured her this morning. And unless you really want to lose her, then you'll help me get her back. Because she's my best -and only- friend, and your sister, so I don't think we can let her rot in wherever my aunt is holding her."
I had done it. William now believes I have gone over the deep end. "You're insane Scorpius. You never met my sister, she never even made it to the train. And Bellatrix is dead."
I shook my head in frustration. "Then how would I know that her name is Bethany Sylvia Stone? How would I know that her birth-day is August 31?"
"You could have heard that from when we were searching for her, we gave a lot of information then," William said defensively.
"How would I know that when you were ten you wanted to be a surfer, so you took the ironing board and tried to stand on it in the minnie pool in your backyard, that is now my backyard? How would I know that when she turned seven you gave her a rose for her birthday, and soon found out that she very allergic?" I challenged him, looking straight in his eyes that looked so much like Bethany's.
His mouth opened and closed, he blinked several times, searching my unwavering face. I could see the gears working in his mind, trying to figure out how to respond. I could also see a glimmer of hope in his eyes. Then fear flashed over the hope as processed what I said about Bellatrix.
"So you...knew about my sister this whole time?"
Now I could see hurt in his eyes. I should have told him earlier. "Look, I'm sorry I didn't tell you, I know you had the right to know, More right then I did. But William, your sister is in Danger and I have to help her, and I can't do it without you."
He was silent for a long time, then, with a determined look, he nodded.
I realized what I had just gotten myself into. William, a seventh year, and me, a third year, had to find and defeat the most crazy, and angry, and evil, Witch there ever was. Then we had to find Bethany, make sure she wasn't evil yet (You know, if she had excepted the offer...) and get her out of the place. But I figured we should start with finding out where Bellatrix was holding Bethany.
I was ticked with those Men In Black freaks, because they disappeared saying they would "collect" me during the first visit to Hogsmead, which, I realized with a sinking heart, I was supposed to take Bethany to.
Sighing, I stood up. I looked at William, who was obviously expecting me to go into some heroic rant again and go after Bethany right then and there, and said, "I'm going to bed. Talk to you tomorrow. Don't mention a word to anyone." Without waiting for a response I turned and walked away, silent tears slipping down my cheeks.
I hated crying with a passion, but right then, there was nothing I could do to stop the flow of salty water.
I was going to murder my great aunt, and do it happily.
***
That night I was racking my brain, trying to figure out where Bella would be keeping Bethany.
I was still thinking of this when I fell asleep on the couch.
"CRUCIO!" Bellatrix's voice carried through the door that led into the basement of Malfoy Manor. Screamed echoed up the stairs.
"You could still help us girl," Grandfather's voice now mixed in with the screams. "End this all now, just say yes."
The screams died down, a shaky voice floated around my ears, "I want it finished, yes. I want you dead, yes. I won't join you, yes." Bethany.
Another cry of crucio, another round of screams. Laughter, hysterical, rang through the empty house.
Gasping, I woke up on the floor in the common room. I had fallen off the couch...
But that didn't bother me, I knew where Bethany was, and I had to get her out. Her screams still echoing in my ears, I ran out side, needing fresh air.
Sprinting outside, I collapsed onto the cooling, dew covered grass. Rolling onto my back, I discovered heavy, frozen water droplets (Also known as snow), falling from the sky. I savored the refreshing snow in the early morning, the sun was about to rise.
My heart ached knowing what Bethany was going through while I was watching the sun rise.
My heart ached for Bethany.
Now more then ever I had to save her...This was going to be a long morning.
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-10-2011, 10:17 PM
HIS HEART ACHED FOR BETHANY! HIS HEART ACHED! (yes after reading all of that, that is all I got out of it)
SCORPY!! *snuggles* Youuuuuuuuu are so adorable!
And William. HAHAHAHAHAH! *hugs him too*
They are soo funny.
And Bellatrix, I still want your autograph
SCORPIUS KNOWS WHERE SHE IS! *hugs all around for EVERYBODY*
I LOVE THE UPDATE!
Not even kidding!
pamspamspamspamspamspams!
Mordanyes
04-10-2011, 10:20 PM
Brilliant chapter! *dances happily because of update*
LillyJames
04-10-2011, 10:25 PM
Yay my two stalkers fans posted like, two minutes after I did! I know I'm loved :glomp: Thank you for the comments!
Ladybug
04-12-2011, 12:15 AM
I think he's in love :loved:
Great chapter!
PAMS!
Eviee.
LillyJames
04-13-2011, 11:14 PM
Here is some of chapter seven....
Disclaimer: J.K.R has all rights to Harry Potter. I, do not.
Author's Note: Hmm....Enjoy
CHAPTER SEVEN: "Who are you talking to?"
Scorpius's PoV
Hogsmead day had come. Children were excited, talking about what they were going to buy and where, two boys (one with orange hair, one with black) were plotting on their way there. Snow had blanketed everything, including the frozen William and I who had woken up at five that morning.
Neither of us could have gone back to sleep if we tried so, instead, we went outside and played Quidditch, for hours. It was mostly just a quaffle and the two of us on brooms trying to wrestle it away from the other so we could get it in the goal at the end of the field. William, who was four years older then me and the captain of the Gryffindor Quidditch team, easily won.
By the time the rest of the students were up and on their way to Hogsmead, William was bored of winning, and I was bored with losing. We were sitting outside in the snow when I was startled to look up and see the two men-in-black wanna-bes standing in front of me.
I jumped to my feet asking, "Is it time to go? I know where she is. I just to get there. This is William Stone, Bethany's older brother, he's going to help me. Will I be allowed to use my magic during this? I mean, I still have my trace on me right? I don't wanna be kicked out of Hogwarts, not that I wouldn't be willing if that's what it meant to get Bethany...." I finally stopped, realizing I had been ranting. Also I realized William was staring at me in shock and confusion. Why would he do that? Because I forgot that no one could the two men except for me. So I added, "And why can't he see you?!"
"Um..Scorp? Who are you talking to?" William asked, getting to his feet.
I ignored him and looked at the two men. Finally one of them relented and answered all my questions slowly, still without any emotion. "It is time to go. We know where she is too. We will get you there. We know who he is. Yes. And he can't see us because we chose to be like this, rather then how Bethany was forced to be."
"Well then, make it so he can see you, because right now he thinks I'm insane."
William rolled his eyes, "Um, I'm right here Scorpius, no need to talk like I'm not. And who are you talking to?"
The men exchanged looks, though I'm not sure how they could see past those dark sunglasses. "Just tell him that we are here. We can't reverse the spell. If he trusts you, as you trust him enough to take him to rescue Bethany, then he believe you."
Never a simple answer. Sigh, with out looking at William I slowly explained, "There are two men in front of me. You can't see them because they are under the same spell as Bethany. They are this way by choice, and they can't reverse it right now. They are going to help us get to where they are keep Bethany." Gosh, I sounded insane.
William seemed to read my mind, "No matter how crazy that sounds...nothing will surprise me any more. One question though. How are we getting?"
I saw the men exchange amused glances, and I felt worried. They just said, "come". I turned to William, shrugging, and said, "However we're getting there, we're going now."
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-13-2011, 11:19 PM
How is Scorpy darling is losing? *huggles* I'll lose with him, or I'll just kick William.
And you're kidding me right? I WANT THE WHOOOOOOLE CHAPTER! *stabs* garrrrrgghhh..
And Scorp is willing to get kicked out of Hogwarts for Bethany :eyebrows:
Mordanyes
04-13-2011, 11:37 PM
Some of the chapter? Tease!
Well anyway, awesome preview! Scorpius :loved:
Ladybug
04-14-2011, 02:52 AM
Haha he's insane ;) LOL!
Brillient Teaser! I want to read more though.
pamspamspams
Eviee <33
crookshanks_kitty
04-15-2011, 04:40 AM
Oh dear! I feel like I've missed on the world. I read all other chapters (since the point I left off) in one go, non-stop. This goes to show how amazing your story is. It certainly grasps the reader's attention.
So first things first, ehem ehem... ready for it?
HOW DID BELLATRIX GET INTO THIS??? Sorry I hate her so much. I really hope Bethany would find a way out of trouble and escape that place. I also hope she wouldn't lose her mind and not give in easily to her demands. :no:
Disclaimer: Unless a black hole has sucked up all the sense in the world, I do not own Harry Potter. :lmao: Now THAT made me laugh.
It's funny how often we use the word, "unbearable" and still manage to bear it. For instance, the unbearable, unforgivable Crucio curse, is not quite unbearable. Horrible, yes. But if it were unbearable, I would not have survived the encounter. OMG sooo true!!! :gasp: YOu made a very good point there! :yes:
I had done it. William now believes I have gone over the deep end. "You're insane Scorpius. You never met my sister, she never even made it to the train. And Bellatrix is dead." :poke: Ok, now you've done it!!! Gah! Why doesn't he just believe him?
"You could have heard that from when we were searching for her, we gave a lot of information then," William said defensively. :hairpull:
"How would I know that when you were ten you wanted to be a surfer, so you took the ironing board and tried to stand on it in the minnie pool in your backyard, that is now my backyard? How would I know that when she turned seven you gave her a rose for her birthday, and soon found out that she very allergic?" I challenged him, looking straight in his eyes that looked so much like Bethany's. AHA! :mwaha: Take that! *cough cough* Sorry! hehe :blush: Got a bit carried away here!
I hated crying with a passion, but right then, there was nothing I could do to stop the flow of salty water. :( So so sad. :console:
I was going to murder my great aunt, and do it happily. :hack: Um good luck with that. :erm:
Now more then ever I had to save her...This was going to be a long morning. Ata boy! Scorious to the rescue! :superman:
Sorry for making my comment so long. I figured I needed to make up for being away for so long. Such a bad reader that I am.
Great Chapter! Keep it up! :glomp: xx
Ruby85
04-15-2011, 03:19 PM
:faint:
I think nothing else needs to be said.
LillyJames
04-15-2011, 08:04 PM
crookshanks_kitty:
Hahaha! (I loved all the smiley faces with your comment BTW) I like long comments.
William CAN be so frustrating, but then again, I think I would be slow into accepting the fact that my sister was invisible and no one but this one kid could see, ear, or feel her.
And to Ruby85:
Hehehe :D Agreed completely.
LillyJames
04-18-2011, 05:02 PM
Disclaimer: J.K.R has all rights to Harry Potter. I, do not.
Author's Note: Hmm....Enjoy
CHAPTER SEVEN: "Who are you talking to?"
Scorpius's PoV
Hogsmead day had come. Children were excited, talking about what they were going to buy and where, two boys (one with orange hair, one with black) were plotting on their way there. Snow had blanketed everything, including the frozen William and I who had woken up at five that morning.
Neither of us could have gone back to sleep if we tried so, instead, we went outside and played Quidditch, for hours. It was mostly just a quaffle and the two of us on brooms trying to wrestle it away from the other so we could get it in the goal at the end of the field. William, who was four years older then me and the captain of the Gryffindor Quidditch team, easily won.
By the time the rest of the students were up and on their way to Hogsmead, William was bored of winning, and I was bored with losing. We were sitting outside in the snow when I was startled to look up and see the two men-in-black wanna-bes standing in front of me.
I jumped to my feet asking, "Is it time to go? I know where she is. I just to get there. This is William Stone, Bethany's older brother, he's going to help me. Will I be allowed to use my magic during this? I mean, I still have my trace on me right? I don't wanna be kicked out of Hogwarts, not that I wouldn't be willing if that's what it meant to get Bethany...." I finally stopped, realizing I had been ranting. Also I realized William was staring at me in shock and confusion. Why would he do that? Because I forgot that no one could the two men except for me. So I added, "And why can't he see you?!"
"Um..Scorp? Who are you talking to?" William asked, getting to his feet.
I ignored him and looked at the two men. Finally one of them relented and answered all my questions slowly, still without any emotion. "It is time to go. We know where she is too. We will get you there. We know who he is. Yes. And he can't see us because we chose to be like this, rather then how Bethany was forced to be."
"Well then, make it so he can see you, because right now he thinks I'm insane."
William rolled his eyes, "Um, I'm right here Scorpius, no need to talk like I'm not. And who are you talking to?"
The men exchanged looks, though I'm not sure how they could see past those dark sunglasses. "Just tell him that we are here. We can't reverse the spell. If he trusts you, as you trust him enough to take him to rescue Bethany, then he believe you."
Never a simple answer. Sigh, with out looking at William I slowly explained, "There are two men in front of me. You can't see them because they are under the same spell as Bethany. They are this way by choice, and they can't reverse it right now. They are going to help us get to where they are keep Bethany." Gosh, I sounded insane.
William seemed to read my mind, "No matter how crazy that sounds...nothing will surprise me any more. One question though. How are we getting?"
I saw the men exchange amused glances, and I felt worried. They just said, "come". I turned to William, shrugging, and said, "However we're getting there, we're going now."
He shook his head but trustingly followed me as I followed the two men.
***
Several hours later I found myself standing next to William outside my old home.
I glanced at William, and he nodded. It was time to go in. I thankfully knew ways in, that old Auntie Bella wouldn't know of.
Walking around back, I saw my old swing set. It was a magical one of course. After I was born, my mother made my father have the house more...child friendly. This included putting in a swing set, and later moving into an actual home.
We went past the swing set and into my old play house. My father was always paranoid that someone, probably an old death eater seeking revenge, would come after him and his family. So he built a passage way from my play house into the basement closet's cupboard. It was a pretty big cupboard and we could squeeze our way into it without much problem.
Now we were standing in the old closet. Knowing that only the wooden door separated us from Bethany. We were both on edge and wanted to dash in there instantly, but we both had to wait. We needed to make sure that Bethany was alone in there.
It's a good thing we did. The next second we heard a cold, and sadly familiar, voice. "Come girl, we've been nice, we asked you politely. We will give you one more chance, then no more. Just this last chance. We're being nice."
My grandfather was there. And so was Bellatrix, "Oh come now, Lucius, she won't say yes without a little persuasion."
There was a pause, and we guessed Bethany was saying something. Then came the shout. The shout that made me have to hold William back. The crucio curse, and the scream that followed.
After the scream died down Lucius said, "We'll be back in the morning, your answer had better be yes."
We heard their foot steps up the stairs. We unlocked the door with magic, then dashed into the room. Bethany was curled up in the back corner, shaking. It was saddening to see her, usually so happy, like this.
She didn't notice us. I took a step forward and tapped her shoulder gently...
***
Bethany's PoV
I was pathetic. Curled up in a tight ball, hiding in the corner. My life was over, come morning the would torture me to the brink of death, then kill me.
Yep. At least I wouldn't give into their demands, and only Scorpius would miss me. I didn't have to worry about my family.
Scorpius, I hoped he wouldn't miss me too much.
Then some one touched me. Was it already morning? It couldn't possibly be. But then again, maybe it was, I didn't care...
But either way, someone touched me. And I was startled. I jumped about...as far as I could physically jumped and made this pathetic whimper sound.
Then I heard a timid voice, "Bethany?"
Scorpius...Scorpius? Scorpius!
I managed to roll over and I saw him, kneeling in front of me. "You..." I didn't know what I was trying to say. I just started to cry silently.
Gosh. I was SO pathetic. And that is like, my third time using that word. "Hey," said Scorpius lightly, "You know what?"
I blinked in confusion. What?
He stepped aside wordlessly, and I saw him. My word. My brother! And he was watching me. It was not pathetic amazing.
I looked back at Scorpius. I needed to know it was real. I could not be let down again. "Can he see me?"
"And hear you, and probably hug you."
"And is this really happening?"
"As far as I know."
William came forward as if in a dream. He leaned down in front of me. He said two words, "I'm sorry" and hugged me.
***
Scorpius's PoV
I kinda felt like an intruder, but we needed to leave, so I had to step up. "Um... Will? Bethany? We need to go now."
William nodded and picked up Bethany. We made our escape, though it was tricky getting Bethany though the tunnel..she managed to convince us she could crawl it on her own.
A few hours later we used portkey to get us to Hogsmead from which we flued into Hogwarts.
First thing we did was go to the Headmistress. this would be an interesting thing to explain.
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-18-2011, 05:06 PM
DAWWWWWWWW!:x3:
I'm sorry to say this but, Will kinda ruined the amazingness of the moment between Scorpius and Bethany. Juuuuust saying.
But still, it was awesome that he was there and all.
DRAT WILL CARRIED BETHANY! Scorpius neeeeeeeded to well, at least she's out of there.
And Bella and Luci (haha), they are such evil, evil, eviiiiiiil creatures, I hate them with a passion. But I still want Bellatrix's autograph! :voldie1:
AND SHE'S OUT AND SAFE! YAYYYYYYYYYYY!
Wait, does that mean the story is over?! :faint:
Mordanyes
04-18-2011, 08:53 PM
:woot: Woot! Update! :D Gasp, the adorableness of it is so adorable! I'm happy that Will got to see Bethany again, but I want more ScorpiusBethany moments! :D
Awesome chapter! :)
LillyJames
04-18-2011, 11:08 PM
Story's not over yet Cassie! And don't worry guys, there will be soon Scorp-Bethany moments soon enough :eyebrows:.
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-19-2011, 12:57 AM
Story's not over yet Cassie! And don't worry guys, there will be soon Scorp-Bethany moments soon enough :eyebrows:.
OH FEW!
And there will? :x3: I just looooove them. OH! I just started to imagine Will flipping out at Scorp, HA!
LillyJames
04-19-2011, 02:15 AM
Another Part of a chapter.
Chapter Eight: An interesting thing to explain
Third Person PoV:
Bethany, Scorpius, and William each shuffled into the Headmistresses office. It took a while to guess the answer to get past the gargoyles, but they managed it.
Headmistress Mcgonagall jumped at the sight of the three children. "What is going on here Mr. Stone?"
She turned to the Head Boy, only made sense, he could give her a sensible, reasonable answer.
"This is my sister, Bethany, that we just rescued from Malfoy Manor where Bellatrix Lestrange was...holding her captive so she would work for her to finish Tom Riddle's work."
Minerva blinked in shocked. Not quite the sensible, reasonable answer she had been hoping for. Then her eyes fell onto the girl who practically dead on her feet. All thoughts of reasoning and sensibility fled her mind.
She grabbed hold of her arm and led her to on of the chairs, which Bethany gladly sank into. She looked to William and Scorpius, "Please, start the story from the beginning Mr. Stone."
He shrugged and said simply, "I'd ask Scorpius, he knows more then I do about this."
She turned her attention the small boy who was silent for a moment then he began explaining. He started from the train, how he could kind of hear her, but William couldn't and continued, telling the whole story.
"And then we came back here and came to see you," Scorpius finished.
Minerva chewed her cheeks, an annoying habit she had picked up. She wordlessly went to her desk and scrawled out a quick letter. She handed the parchment to William, "Please go send this to ministry, and go tell Professor Longbottom to come see me. Scorpius, please bring Bethany to Madame Pomfrey."
"Yes Ma'am," they responded.
Bethany, having stayed silent during this all, was watching the sorting hat our of boredom. As she stood shakily to her feet, she could have sworn it winked at her. She shook her head, telling ehrself she was just overtired.
Scorpius reached out and put his arm around her shoulder, leading her out of the room. Once out of the room they had a silent walk to Madame Pomfrey.
When they reached the doorway Scorpius stopped her. Looking straight in her up and down. Then he shook his head, "Bethany, I cannot believe you are standing right in front of me."
She smiled weakly, "Neither can I, Scorp."
He was so relieved to see that smile again, he let out a deep breath that he had been holding since he first saw his great aunt. He returned her smile and said, "Did you know that it's possible to not breath for several, several, days?"
She laughed, really laughed. "Thank you Scorpius, for everything..."
Before Scorpius could respond the door opened and there stood Madame Pomfrey, she looked down, saw Bethany, and dropped her water glass.
Without bothering to repair the glass, she hustled Bethany in and closed the door on Scorpius. He was left with nothing else to do other then go to bed.
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-19-2011, 02:19 AM
Why is EVERYONE interrupting the Scorp/Beth moments? *is angry* grrrrrrrr. They are just soooooooooooooooo adorable together!
I love the spoiler, buuuuut, I want the full chapter! *nods head defiantly*
Mordanyes
04-19-2011, 04:03 AM
*Agrees with ^* The preview is awesome, but whole chapters are amazing :yes:
So yep, that was an awesome preview, though Scorpius and Bethany just need to be together already! They are so cute together! :D
Can't wait for an new chapter! PAMS! :woot:
Ladybug
04-19-2011, 01:17 PM
wow i missed quiet a lot. Sorry for that.
BRILLIENT. chapters i like them (: (: (:
Yes she's back *dances*
pamspamspamspams
Eviee.
z999993
04-21-2011, 04:49 PM
New Reader!!!
Love the Story!
Love the Plot!
Love the puppy love b/t Bethany and Scorpius!
Keep Posting, I'll be watching for more! :glomp:
crookshanks_kitty
04-26-2011, 12:47 AM
Here I am!!! :doof:
We went past the swing set and into my old play house. My father was always paranoid that someone, probably an old death eater seeking revenge, would come after him and his family. So he built a passage way from my play house into the basement closet's cupboard. It was a pretty big cupboard and we could squeeze our way into it without much problem. This bit made me go all "awwwee!" :loved: It's kind of hard trying to imagine Draco as a dad. It's so cute.
There was a pause, and we guessed Bethany was saying something. Then came the shout. The shout that made me have to hold William back. The crucio curse, and the scream that followed. :tackles: YOU MAD WOMAN!!! Get him scorpy! :smash:
William came forward as if in a dream. He leaned down in front of me. He said two words, "I'm sorry" and hugged me. Huraaay!!! :party5: *Does a ridiculous happy dance* *passes around some cookies* Here, have some! :x3:
Oh and yaay they got her safely out of that horrible place. I wonder how they'd be able to deal with Bellatrix now that she's back from the dead. I'm curious to know how that happened and what caused Bethany to become invisible.
Great new posts as always! PAMS (please?) ^_^
LillyJames
04-26-2011, 01:07 AM
New Reader!!!
Love the Story!
Love the Plot!
Love the puppy love b/t Bethany and Scorpius!
Keep Posting, I'll be watching for more!
YAYAYAY! :woot: New READER!
And to crookshanks_kitty:
Glad that someone is entusiastic about the William Bethany Moment! You'll just have to wait for answers!
I shall pams soon...but now, Bed.
LillyJames
04-27-2011, 01:10 AM
Chapter Eight: An interesting thing to explain
Third Person PoV:
Bethany, Scorpius, and William each shuffled into the Headmistresses office. It took a while to guess the answer to get past the gargoyles, but they managed it.
Headmistress Mcgonagall jumped at the sight of the three children. "What is going on here Mr. Stone?"
She turned to the Head Boy, only made sense, he could give her a sensible, reasonable answer.
"This is my sister, Bethany, that we just rescued from Malfoy Manor where Bellatrix Lestrange was...holding her captive so she would work for her to finish Tom Riddle's work."
Minerva blinked in shocked. Not quite the sensible, reasonable answer she had been hoping for. Then her eyes fell onto the girl who practically dead on her feet. All thoughts of reasoning and sensibility fled her mind.
She grabbed hold of her arm and led her to on of the chairs, which Bethany gladly sank into. She looked to William and Scorpius, "Please, start the story from the beginning Mr. Stone."
He shrugged and said simply, "I'd ask Scorpius, he knows more then I do about this."
She turned her attention the small boy who was silent for a moment then he began explaining. He started from the train, how he could kind of hear her, but William couldn't and continued, telling the whole story.
"And then we came back here and came to see you," Scorpius finished.
Minerva chewed her cheeks, an annoying habit she had picked up. She wordlessly went to her desk and scrawled out a quick letter. She handed the parchment to William, "Please go send this to ministry, and go tell Professor Longbottom to come see me. Scorpius, please bring Bethany to Madame Pomfrey."
"Yes Ma'am," they responded.
Bethany, having stayed silent during this all, was watching the sorting hat our of boredom. As she stood shakily to her feet, she could have sworn it winked at her. She shook her head, telling ehrself she was just overtired.
Scorpius reached out and put his arm around her shoulder, leading her out of the room. Once out of the room they had a silent walk to Madame Pomfrey.
When they reached the doorway Scorpius stopped her. Looking straight in her up and down. Then he shook his head, "Bethany, I cannot believe you are standing right in front of me."
She smiled weakly, "Neither can I, Scorp."
He was so relieved to see that smile again, he let out a deep breath that he had been holding since he first saw his great aunt. He returned her smile and said, "Did you know that it's possible to not breath for several, several, days?"
She laughed, really laughed. "Thank you Scorpius, for everything..."
Before Scorpius could respond the door opened and there stood Madame Pomfrey, she looked down, saw Bethany, and dropped her water glass.
Without bothering to repair the glass, she hustled Bethany in and closed the door on Scorpius. He was left with nothing else to do other then go to bed.
***
Bethany woke up to chatter right outside the open door to the Hospital Wing. "Yes, I'm so glad you two could make it! And congratulations Mrs. Stone," came Minerva Mcgonagall's voice.
Congratulations on what? Bethany thought to herself.
The teary voice of Mr. Stone floated in, "Yes..We are so happy to bring both our daughters home."
Both? Bethany wondered. As far as she knew they only had one daughter and one son...unless William knew something she didn't.
"Well, you know we'll be happy to accept Bethany to Hogwarts as soon as you feel comfortable letting her come," Minerva responded, the voices were coming closer to the room.
"Yes, of course. Thank you Minerva..." came the tired voice of Mrs. Stone.
She heard Madame Pomfrey shuffle by, "Come now, you can see her, it's about time she woke up anyway."
She quickly closed her eyes, pretending to be asleep.
***
Bethany's PoV
I'll spare you the details of the family reunion. I will tell you this, it involved a lot of crying, hugging, kissing, and laughing. It had been all a blur. But I do remember this part.
My mother told me some big news that day, though it was quite apparent in her appearance. She was pregnant with my new little sister, VERY pregnant, the baby was do in under a month.
They were going to name the child Bethany (after me of course, and I couldn't decide how I felt about that...) but because I had reappeared, they decided on Beth Scorpia Stone.
I was made to stay in the hospital wing at the school for several days, and I didn't mind, because it meant I could stay at the school for a bit more.
But something I will write about, the first time Scorpius and I got to be alone together for more then one minute.
Scorpius entered the room slowly and scanned the room until he found me.
His whole body shone with relief when he saw that I was sitting up. He came up and tapped my arm (because I was indulged in my book, and not paying attention to my surroundings) I jumped and, seeing it was just Scorpius, smiled. "Sorry, I'm still not used to having people touch me...
He just laughed and hugged me. I am proud to say that I did not flinch, jump, or wince in pain (despite the fact the was squeezing harder than he had to) he pulled back and we both blushed.
He cleared his throat and said, "Hi," rather lamely.
I responded with an equally lame, "Hey."
I smirked and said, "So, seen any invisible kids recently?"
He laughed and shook his head, "Just you, but you aren't invisible anymore, shame actually...no more pulling off cool pranks."
Even though I knew he was trying to get me to laugh I couldn't help but sigh inwardly, "You know," I said, keeping a smile planted on my face, "I never really could pull off any pranks."
He frowned slightly, "True, but now you can't sneak into my common room and sleep on the awkward couch."
THAT I laughed at. "That sounds so weird Scorpius. I think I'd rather be sleeping on an actual bed."
"Now why would you do that? Isn't the lumpy couch enough?" Scorpius asked.
"Why would it be?" I raised my eyebrow at him.
He smirked his Malfoy smirk and replied, "Because, your closer to me that way."
I responded by smacking his arm, but I was laughing, so he knew I didn't mean it.
***
The day I was to be released and go home with Mom and Dad, I was told that I could stay and finish the school year, it was only two months left, and my parents said they would allow me to stay, as long as I stuck around William (and he gave me permision to stick with Scorpius instead...) often.
I would gladly comply with these conditions, and was to start classes Monday.
Ladybug
04-27-2011, 01:42 AM
Brillient chapter
Yay she can go to Hogwarts (:
Eviee.
Cassiopia Malfoy
04-27-2011, 03:49 AM
Of course Scorpius would want her closer to him, and the fact he was smirking the Malfoy smirk :x3: that line, it was sooo cool.
SHE'S PREGNANT? (She being the mother) That is suuuuper duper cool! And the baby named Beth Scorpia, I cracked up so hard.
Does Scorpius know that there is going to be a girl named after him? I'd be a little frightened if I was him.
And the fact that no one interrupted, how cute.
Gaaahhh I LOVE WILL! The fact that he's letting Bethany hang out with Scorpius, teehehe.
McGonagall is awesome, as always, and the sorting hat, it still is cracking me up that it was winking at her, naughty, bad hat!
And Bethany can go to Hogwarts, YIPPEE! It would be horrible if she couldn't.
IT WAS AN AWESOME CHAPTER! No kidding, I fell in love with your story once again.
pamspamspamspamspamspamspamspamspleeeeeeaaaaaaase!
Yours truly, Gabbeh.
Mordanyes
04-27-2011, 05:34 AM
An update! :woot: That was an awesome chapter! Bethany'll have an adorable little sister, YAAAYYYSSS! And I love the name Beth Scorpia :D
And she finally gets to go to Hogwarts! Hooray for her! :lol: PAMS! :D
LillyJames
04-27-2011, 11:42 PM
Aww....Thanks guys! :D I loved the part with winking hat also, Thanks Cassie. And yeah..the name Beth Scorpia is pretty awesome. though, I think I freaked Cassiopia Malfoy out when I asked her the girl version of Scorpius...
GredxForgex
04-29-2011, 02:06 AM
Of course Scorpius would want her closer to him, and the fact he was smirking the Malfoy smirk :x3: that line, it was sooo cool.
SHE'S PREGNANT? (She being the mother) That is suuuuper duper cool! And the baby named Beth Scorpia, I cracked up so hard.
Does Scorpius know that there is going to be a girl named after him? I'd be a little frightened if I was him.
And the fact that no one interrupted, how cute.
Gaaahhh I LOVE WILL! The fact that he's letting Bethany hang out with Scorpius, teehehe.
McGonagall is awesome, as always, and the sorting hat, it still is cracking me up that it was winking at her, naughty, bad hat!
And Bethany can go to Hogwarts, YIPPEE! It would be horrible if she couldn't.
IT WAS AN AWESOME CHAPTER! No kidding, I fell in love with your story once again.
pamspamspamspamspamspamspamspamspleeeeeeaaaaaaase!
Yours truly, Gabbeh.
I know right! I totally agree, btw, I hope you continue that eh, Lily Luna Potter story. ;]
Ruby85
04-29-2011, 12:20 PM
I'VE MISSED SO BLOODY MUCH! IT'S UNBELIEVABLE!
Still...
OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OM GOMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMFG!
PAMS! like, NOW!
LillyJames
05-04-2011, 06:00 PM
HAhahha, I shall post tonight if all goes well...(I'm currently at school....so....)
crookshanks_kitty
05-04-2011, 06:39 PM
Loved this chapter! Especially this part:
I'll spare you the details of the family reunion. I will tell you this, it involved a lot of crying, hugging, kissing, and laughing. It had been all a blur. But I do remember this part.
My mother told me some big news that day, though it was quite apparent in her appearance. She was pregnant with my new little sister, VERY pregnant, the baby was do in under a month.
They were going to name the child Bethany (after me of course, and I couldn't decide how I felt about that...) but because I had reappeared, they decided on Beth Scorpia Stone. Yaaay :woot: They're all happy and together now. I'm sooo happy for Bethany. :D And a new baby sister? Aweee that's so cute. ^_^ They better keep a closer eye on this little one before she fades right before thier eyes! :gasp: :binky:
He just laughed and hugged me. I am proud to say that I did not flinch, jump, or wince in pain (despite the fact the was squeezing harder than he had to) he pulled back and we both blushed. :loved: :x3: Is it normal that I get so excited over this? (I have a stupid grin on my face and my mom looks suspicious of me, and yes I had to explain that I'm not chatting on facebook!) :erm:
He smirked his Malfoy smirk and replied, "Because, your closer to me that way." hehehe squeee :jump:
Brilliant chapter as always! PAMS (pleaseee?) ^_^ xx
GodGirl13
05-14-2011, 05:36 PM
New Reader here!! I started reading this story a couple of days ago, but I only read a couple of paragraphs. When I started reading again today I couldn't, Could Not stop!!!!!!! It's sooo amazing and creative and Scorpius and ah, I love it!! PAMS PAMS PAMS!!!!!!!! please!
~Noelle
LillyJames
05-14-2011, 06:06 PM
YAYAYAYAY! :x3: I love new readers!
I feel horrible for not posting! The chapter is almost complete...but it's been that way for the past week or so... :run: I realize there is a bunch wanting to read it....:run: so I shall post it tonight!
Cassiopia Malfoy
05-15-2011, 12:35 AM
YAYAYAYAY! :x3: I love new readers!
I feel horrible for not posting! The chapter is almost complete...but it's been that way for the past week or so... :run: I realize there is a bunch wanting to read it....:run: so I shall post it tonight!
YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY! Tonight better come faster :)
LillyJames
05-17-2011, 01:50 AM
Well...tonight seems to have stretched out a bit...but here is...well, we'll just say half a chapter...
Author's Note: Okay, in your comments, please let me know if you think I should keep this story going, or end it when she arrives home. Thank you! Signed, the unimaginative author of this FF
Chapter Nine: "Welcome to class Ms. Stone,"
Bethany's PoV
I was finally released from the hospital, I was given books and supplies that I would need, and I was on my way to my first class.
A lot of people whispered behind their hands as I passed. I was dressed in Hogwarts' robes, with the colors of Gyffindor. Scorpius muttered to me, as one girl froze in place and instantly started to her friend in a hushed tone, "They're just jealous that you're walking next to me and they aren't." He slung his arm around my shoulder and smirked at me.
I bit back my laughter and responded to him, probably louder then I needed to, "Well, Yolanda's probably jealous."
He blinked and cocked his head at me, "What's that supposed to mean?" Boys are really oblivious to everything.
"Oh...Nothing," was my response as we reached Professor Longbottom, who was waiting out near the green houses.
We were kinda late to class because Headmistress Mcgonagall had to give me my books, and I had dragged Scorpius along with me, not really wanting to walk down to class alone.
Professor Longbottom saw me, smiled widely, and said happily, "Welcome to class Ms. Stone, I assume you listened on my class often enough that you're caught up?" I knew he was just kidding (even though I had listened in on his class, actually I listened to his class with the fourth years, and fifth years, so I was kinda ahead, just like with transiguration and quidditch..).
I smiled back, "Yes, Sir, thank you."
***
I really lucked out when it came to quidditch. Well, I lucked out, the seeker however, did not. After one unfortunate practice, the seeker was placed in the hospital and deemed unfit for the final few games... So there I was, decorated in gryffindor quidditch team robes, ready for my first game, after only two practices.
James Potter, the captain of the team and star chaser had made me take it easy the first practice, but when I ignored him and went for the snitch full force (It was easy because I was used to being in the background and noticing things other people didn't) he allowed me to "Beat the Boogers out of those slimey Slytherins!"
William of course was not happy with all this, he had wanted me to relax, and to not "over excite" myself. After the excitement I've had recently, I didn't really think that playing a sport could count as excitement, but James convinced him that it would work out.
James, amongst others on the team, were not that happy that I was such close friends with a Malfoy (him having walked me to practice and picking me up after, through orders of Will, which is kinda dumb because Will goes to the same place I do...) But I just said for them to live with it because he saved my life and if they couldn't deal with that then I would leave the team.
And they lived with it, even managed to fake a few friendly hellos when he came by. It was kinda funny, (Ever notice how often I use the word kinda?) and gave me and William some amusement.
Anyway, my first game came up. Us v.s. Them. (Us=well...us, Them=the snakes..aka Scorpius)
Scorpius was the seeker for the Snake's team so this would be fun. We walked out onto the field just as it started to rain. Cool. An epic battle in the rain. As their team walked onto the field and the captains shook hand I searched for Scoprius, not that hard since he was one of the smallest members on the team. We met eyes and smirked at each other. We had one of those wordless conversations where you just speak with your facial expression.
To sum it, I let him know that we going to cream them.
And that is what we did...barely.
Scorpius had seen the snitch first and I had been lagging behind him. But he had become too cocky when he saw how far behind I was. He tried to tease me, slowing down then speeding up again. It was during this that I slowly caught up and that he lost sight of the snitch. I manage zoom ahead and grab it just as our chaser were beginning to fall behind in points.
Scorpius and I joked about it later, he kept saying he let me win and I would just brush him off, knowing full well that no Malfoy, no matter which one, would let you win at anything.
GodGirl13
05-17-2011, 04:01 PM
Yeah!! Oh, I love Scorpius, and it is soooo true that no Malfoy would ever let someone win. Seriously. Anyway, that was awesome!! And I also love how you portray Neville!!! PAMS please!
~Noelle
Cassiopia Malfoy
05-18-2011, 12:22 AM
Bwahahahaha, too funny. I love Scorpius, he's just so adorable, and cocky, and Malfoy-ish. I just LOVE him.
And um... I really dunno if you should continue cause I'm just as unimaginative as you are (hence the reason I'm not updating anything).
LOVE THE UPDATE BTW!
LillyJames
05-18-2011, 12:26 AM
Thank you Noelle!
And Cassie! Thanks for the comment, but you're no help :p I need more opinions.
Mordanyes
05-18-2011, 05:41 AM
I loved the chapter!
And maybe you could finish it, and then make a sequel or something? Or maybe some oneshot series about various events, like with the new little sister or something? *isn't really sure*
Again, awesome chapter! :D
Ladybug
05-18-2011, 12:14 PM
brillient chapter!
Yeah maybe finishing it and writing a sequal? i mean you got to the end of the main plot in this story and continuing to write it would just dragg it on too far. It's something i would do not being rude
Eviee <33
crookshanks_kitty
05-19-2011, 06:46 PM
He blinked and cocked his head at me, "What's that supposed to mean?" Boys are really oblivious to everything. :lol: Typical boys! And they must look so cute walking together! :loved: I can just see them in my mind.
And they lived with it, even managed to fake a few friendly hellos when he came by. It was kinda funny, (Ever notice how often I use the word kinda?) and gave me and William some amusement. :yes: lol yes as I've noticed! ;)
Scorpius was the seeker for the Snake's team so this would be fun. We walked out onto the field just as it started to rain. Cool. An epic battle in the rain. As their team walked onto the field and the captains shook hand I searched for Scoprius, not that hard since he was one of the smallest members on the team. We met eyes and smirked at each other. We had one of those wordless conversations where you just speak with your facial expression. Wow! Epic battle on the Quiditch field indeed. Interesting to see Bethany go against Scorpious. And squeee!!! :x3: They're sooo cute! :love:
Scorpius had seen the snitch first and I had been lagging behind him. But he had become too cocky when he saw how far behind I was. He tried to tease me, slowing down then speeding up again. It was during this that I slowly caught up and that he lost sight of the snitch. I manage zoom ahead and grab it just as our chaser were beginning to fall behind in points.
Scorpius and I joked about it later, he kept saying he let me win and I would just brush him off, knowing full well that no Malfoy, no matter which one, would let you win at anything. :lmao: OMG they're adorable! Sorry I must be getting a bit overexcited here. *Cools self down* And that last sentence was so true. :lol:
Brilliant as always. And as for whether I think you should continue on with this story, well I think I'm in agreement with all the people before me who said that perhaps it's best that you end it here and decide to go with a series later as although as much as I love to read more, it would seem like the plot would be dragging on a bit after it came to a fair conclusion. This way you'd be wrapping it up nicely. So yeah, that's my personal opinion. I hope it helps. :)
LillyJames
05-19-2011, 11:57 PM
Yes, the comments helped. I shall end in it probably in my next post, and then a sequel is in my mind...:eyebrows: now if I can only remember it...:remember: ....Thank you so much for the comments!
GodGirl13
05-20-2011, 02:01 PM
Yeah, as much as I hate to have the story end, it has already come to a conclusion. Kinda. (lol) But yes, please write a sequel, and I hope you can remember your idea soon!
Ruby85
05-20-2011, 09:24 PM
If this story comes to an end, I will be sad, but I will let go. But you better write a sequel!
AlwaysDance
06-09-2011, 03:56 PM
Oh my goodness, what can I say? Well I pretty much read the entire thing this morning.
I love it!! It is amazing, cant wait to read more.
pamspamspams
~Sarah :)
LillyJames
06-16-2011, 07:16 PM
Authors Note: Thanks for all the comments and tips, this story wouldn't be possible without you readers! Also, sorry that it's so short, but it sums it up nicely. So enjoy!
Chapter Ten: Home at last
Bethany was having mixed feelings. She was able to go home for the first time in two, almost three, years. But that meant leaving Scorpius behind.
She turned to Scorpius, "You better write, Scorpius. If you don't I'll...." She stopped, not knowing what she'd do.
"Cry?" he teased, smiling. Bethany glared, he rolled his eyes. "I'll write, okay?"
She nodded, "Good. And you'll visit." It wasn't a question.
"Yes. I will visit. I will see you soon. Now go on, your family is waiting.."
Scorpius then watched as she walked off, but she didn't get far. After a few yards she stopped, dropped her luggage, turned around, and ran back. She jumped up, wrapping her arms around his neck.
He stepped back in shock, but them returned the hug. "I'm going to miss you, Invisible Girl."
"And I'll miss you, Scorpius Malfoy."
She kissed him on the cheek, and ran off before he could process it. Picking up her luggage she wave, which he returned weakly.
Then she was gone, leaving Scorpius, red faced and smiling, to gather his thoughts while his impatient father looked on from the barrier. He walked slowly to his father, planning out the next time he would see Bethany.
"I'll see you soon Bethany, I'll see you soon..."
THE END...stay tuned for the unamed sequal
Cassiopia Malfoy
06-16-2011, 07:30 PM
IT'S OVER! :faint: :bye: There is now a HUGE void in my life, what am I going to do without this? IT WAS WRITTEN SO BEAUTIFULLY AND AMAZINGLY! I'm gonna miss it so much, gahhhhhhhhhhh, this is sooo sad.
I have one last comment, SCORPIUS! I LOVE HIM SO MUCH :x3: He is just so adorable.
Oh and, thank you, you are amazing!
AlwaysDance
06-16-2011, 09:07 PM
How can it be over :( so sad acnt wait for your sequel. Gah your writing was so amazing I will be on the edge of my seat waiting for the sequel.
Please pretty please notify me when you put out the sequel:D
And I agree Scorpius is so adorbs.
~Sarah
Mordanyes
06-19-2011, 10:18 AM
Awesome ending! :D Can't wait for the sequel! :D
Ladybug
06-21-2011, 05:47 PM
What a lovely ending!
I like the sequal bit on the end, i want to read more!
Loved the entire story, you should write more!
Eviee <33
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