Hey Allison. Great chapter! So intense. I wish it hadn't ended.
I like how you word your story. This sentence was especially good.
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"Well what can I do? Should we go see Professor McGonagall?" Harry asked, the urge to hold me so strong, but he knew it would only make things worse.
It would be natural for Harry to hold her, and try to comfort her here, but, Harry is a main supporting character in your story, and it wouldn't do to have him hinder her (unintentionally) instead of help her. The way you wrote it, helps move the story smoothly forward while giving us your readers the feeling and emotional acceptance of Harry not holding her and comforting her.
I was wondering if the boy in her dreams with her mom is Tom Riddle. Just a thought. Don't answer me on that.
Very exciting chapter Allison. I can't wait for your next one. I'll be watching for it.
