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12-08-2005, 11:16 PM
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#101 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
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| It's been such a long time since my last poem! I've just been really busy lately with work and re-arranging my room, and christmas shopping... and the list goes on and on. I really really want to write a new one. About what, I'm not sure yet. Maybe I'll write two... HP and non-HP related ones... I'm trying a not-so-long poem. I'll post soon!! (that's not a promise, but I'll try my best...)  |
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12-08-2005, 11:22 PM
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#102 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
Posts: 10,417
| It's fine Lai. Post when you can.
You already know we'll be here when you do decide to update so no harm done...
I shall still stalk your awesomeness! :: Pounces and glomps ::
~~RQT  |
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12-09-2005, 06:19 AM
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#103 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| Finally a new one! About time! It's been a couple of months!! *hem hem* As promised (or somewhat), here's a new poem! yay! I know I can do it if I concentrated, and today was the only day at work that I actually had time to do this. Ok, enough rambling, on to my poem... (you can tell which ship this is.)
******************** Pretty Brown Eyes
There he goes again, with his pretty brown eyes
Looking at me lovingly, thinking up his lies.
I try to ignore him, and I go a different way
He's annoying, but somehow his smile makes my day.
He's been trying to get me to notice him
He's so obnoxious, his chances are slim.
He always hangs around his creepy little friends
Most of his time, with those three, he spends.
He thinks he's so cool, playing with the snitch
Always getting in trouble with poor old Mr. Filch.
He's just not someone I'd be proud to call 'mine'
But between love and hate, there is a fine line.
I saw him less as an annoyance, more of a good guy
I saw it when I looked into those pretty brown eyes.
Down by the lake, we spent most of our time
I fell in love with him, he's perfect and so fine.
The days and years pass, and our love grew stronger
Until one day, he asked to be together forever.
I married this fine man, and he's been good to me
We were in love and happy as we'll ever be.
We were blessed with a son, we called him Harry
He was a beautiful baby, strong like daddy.
Little did we know, our happiness will be cut short
By someone who thought killing was a sport.
As the night sky was filled with ominous green light
I was too late and saw James, my love, in a fight.
For that split second, he looked my way
"I love you, and Harry too", he seemed to say.
I looked at my love, I was scared for him
He wanted to reassure me, as things go dim.
He wanted to say everything will be alright
But it was too late, he'd lost the fight.
How could I protect the men of my life?
I was Harry's mother, but also James' wife.
There he goes again, with his pretty brown eyes
He closed them as I cried for the very last time...
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Hope you like it... Edit: hahaha i just read my previous post and I said I was trying a not-so-long poem... this is one of the longest I've ever written!
Last edited by Laieesha : 12-13-2005 at 12:22 AM.
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12-09-2005, 11:17 AM
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#104 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
Posts: 10,417
| ^AWWWWWWWWW. That's so cute.... :: SNiffs ::
Lily and James are the greatest Ship in Hp and I promised myself I wouldn't boast about your abilities but look how good it looks...
Um, I've always wondered, why everyone said Lily died saving JAmes when James was also trying to protect his son and wife. Your poem sort of brings back those thoughts...
Didn't James die as well? Why doesn't everyone make as hge deal as that? Well, aside from the new power or gift of love Lily gave Harry...How come it didn't come from James?
I dunno...A thought.
I'll be back for any more updates...I loved it!
PAMS when you can...
~~RQT |
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12-09-2005, 10:20 PM
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#105 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| Well, maybe Harry's protection came from both James and Lily... well, i read somewhere that supposedly, James didn't have a choice. Voldemort just killed him. With Lily, the spell wasn't directed AT her, but she took the blow anyway, thus giving Harry the power. Didn't Voldemort ask her to move aside too, but she jumped between him and baby Harry??
Anyway, I tried to portray that in the poem, that James was fighting for his family... and Lily was torn because she didn't know if she should run to help her husband or try to protect her baby. Quote: |
I was Harry's mother, but also James' wife.
| Basically saying, which one should I do first?? should I be a mother or be a wife?? Poor Lily... Poor James. and poor orphan Harry... |
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12-11-2005, 12:22 PM
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#106 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
Posts: 10,417
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Basically saying, which one should I do first?? should I be a mother or be a wife?? Poor Lily... Poor James. and poor orphan Harry...
|  Yah, I see your point. The poem is still so cute. Actually, it's my fav out of your hp ones...
I have a request, you dont have to put it up next or even put it up at all, but I had to ask.
Um, Could you do a Siry poem? It still could be for the brokenhearted since he did leave Harry feeling oh so lonely.
Not necessarily like the love you've been writing about, but it's love nevertheless...
Please and thank you!
~~RQT |
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12-12-2005, 05:39 PM
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#107 (permalink)
| News Admin Platform 9 3/4 Mod Weasley's Wizard Wheezes Mod News Goddess Abraxan
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| That was really good, Lai. Made me tear up at the end. Quote: |
Originally Posted by Laieesha There he goes again, with his pretty green eyes
He closed them as I cried for the very last time... |  |
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12-13-2005, 12:21 AM
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#108 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| wait wait wait!! hold up!!
I just realized one MAJOR MAJOR MAJOR mistake on that poem!
Lily had the pretty green eyes, didn't she?? James had the hazel/brown eyes!!!!!
*runs to change poem and title*
*hypnotizes you* It says Brown in the poem ... it's always been Brown in the poem... [/hypnotize] 
Last edited by Laieesha : 12-13-2005 at 12:23 AM.
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12-13-2005, 08:01 PM
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#109 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
Posts: 10,417
| ^ROTFL
Haha. we would've surely thought Katie would've caught on to that...
Haha... :: Runs hypnotizing others for Stalkee ::
Post when you can,
~~RQT |
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12-15-2005, 07:23 AM
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#110 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| Wow, I'm like TRL!! =P By special request (omg this is soooo TRL!)  I give to you...
***************** A Sad Farewell
You used to be mean and cruel,
You felt superior to everyone else.
You were always bored in school
So to others, you performed spells.
You were careless and arrogant
You led people to believe
That everything will be better
The moment that you leave.
In the beginning, I didn't like you
But that was a long time ago.
You have turned into a fine man
Far from the boy I used to know.
You changed for the better,
You were dependable and loving.
You were loyal and honest,
My heart you were slowly stealing.
You didn't know I cared for you
I loved you from a distance.
You were oblivious to those around
I didn't even get my chance.
I should've told you I loved you
Now I'm afraid I'm too late.
I should've held you in my arms
Before you met your sad fate.
I hope you can hear me now
I'll tell you this before I cry.
I love you, Mr. Sirius Black
Let this be my final goodbye...
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For my luverlee stalker!  Hope you like it!!  It's a bit shorter than most of my poems, but this is all I can come up with.
Soooo... tell me what you think.  See, it's still heartbreak related yeah?? 
Last edited by Laieesha : 12-15-2005 at 07:26 AM.
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12-15-2005, 08:47 PM
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#111 (permalink)
| News Admin Platform 9 3/4 Mod Weasley's Wizard Wheezes Mod News Goddess Abraxan
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| Hmm, sorry about that green eyes thing.  Just trying to keep you on your toes. Yeah, that's it.
Who's writing the one about Sirius? |
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12-15-2005, 09:01 PM
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#112 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
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For my luverlee stalker! Hope you like it!! It's a bit shorter than most of my poems, but this is all I can come up with.
| That's me saying that!!! If ony I was in the HP books,
I LOVED IT LAI!
Thanks a bunch, I was seriously almost in tears when I read it....
I didn't think you'd have it up a squickly LOve you!
~~RQT |
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12-15-2005, 09:28 PM
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#113 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| yeah, that's Tina saying all that! as if she was in school with him too, and stuff... anyway, since the Marauder's were like the 'cool' crowd, I'm sure there were plenty of girls chasing them. And Sirius, I bet many were in love with him (including Tina teehee) |
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12-16-2005, 10:13 AM
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#114 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
Location: SchruckleNoofer!<3 Join Date: Jan 2005
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12-16-2005, 12:08 PM
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#115 (permalink)
| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Jul 2005
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| These poems are so sad...  but they're awesome. Good job, and please write more! |
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12-16-2005, 12:11 PM
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#116 (permalink)
| | Dugbog
Location: India Join Date: Sep 2005
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| wow...thats awesome |
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12-16-2005, 02:04 PM
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#117 (permalink)
| Filipino Language ModTale as Old as Time Erumpent
Location: Toronto Join Date: Mar 2005
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|  Ate Lai!!
i love the Pretty "Brown" eyes...  yeah i read the succeeding posts after that..lol..it's going to be alright Ate..hehe
anyway, i really do love it!! so sweet! it really tear my heart out[wait, i don't have a heart...*blinks*] 
A sad farewell was sweet too...lol
*two new readers eh?*
keep it up, Ate!\m/..[",]..\m/ |
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12-16-2005, 05:34 PM
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#118 (permalink)
| Formerly: Lumus Bella's Edward Snape on a Stick Funny:when not in the veil Giant Squid
Location: In Matt's heart Join Date: Sep 2005
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Elan Constantine First Year Ministry RPG Name:
Edward Lennox Ministry Security | I think that Lai should have the title..>"Bard of SS" you write so well and thanks for sharing.
*pokes*Tina and Katie |
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12-16-2005, 11:48 PM
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#119 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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|  *glomps all around*
aaww... you guys are soooooo sweet!! thanks a million and stuff! *tackle glomps tina, lumus, katie, eliza, and my new readers* yay!!
And of course, I'm lazy again... I'll try to come up with something else... might take me a while again though...  |
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12-20-2005, 09:59 AM
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#120 (permalink)
| Formerly: XoxXtinaxox09 SBFC Promotion Officer Sirius Stalker Zonko's Fanatic Forever! Acromantula
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And of course, I'm lazy again... I'll try to come up with something else... might take me a while again though...
| Haha  Where does it end? We'll be waiting like always!
~~RQT
Until, Lai gets her act together **Serious motherly look** ((  Kidding)) I'm sure Lai wont mind it, so if anyones interested, Here's another link to an awesome Fillipino writer's poem thread, Harmony
Have fun! **Worships Lai before fleeing* |
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12-20-2005, 10:03 AM
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#121 (permalink)
|  LLFC Games Officer SS Slogan Winner Ginny's Name Sharer Kneazle
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Edith (Edie) Santiere Fifth Year Ministry RPG Name:
Anita Imogen Volt Magical Transportation | Those are really excellent poems. |
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12-23-2005, 01:07 AM
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#122 (permalink)
| Infomercially Inclined Kneazle
Location: is trying to steal Oliver Phelps from my SS twin Tori Join Date: Feb 2005
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| *gasp* new reader?? aawww thanks Ginevra!
and RQT, how dare you advertise on my thread!!  im just kiddin, i LOVE harmony's poems too! you know i do! so yeah, seriously, while i'm on hiatus (which i always am hehe) go check out harmony's poems. she updates more regularly than me anyway...  |
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