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03-11-2006, 09:10 PM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | ~Erin's Poetry~Sa9+ Hey everybody! I'm Erin! This is the first time I've ever shared any of my Harry Potter-related poetry, so please be a little bit nice to me..... I hope you like them, and I strongly encourage you to give me constructive criticism.
I'm only going to post one right now, so I don't run out of poems to post. PLEASE tell me what you like about each poem and what would make them better. If you like some of my poems and you would like me to write another one about a specific Harry Potterish topic, tell me, and I will! Most of my poems are simple and rhyming. A lot of them are humorous, too!
This one is my own Sorting Hat Song, so it isn't exactly a poem, but it could be if you think about it.
Well, here goes: There once were four sorcerers who had powers that were great.
They wanted to pass on their knowledge, so a school they did create.
There was Godric Gryffindor who had courage beyond belief.
And trustworthy Helga Hufflepuff would never be a thief.
There was also Salzar Slytherin; he was known to be decieving.
And wise Rowena Ravenclaw without knowledge would be grieving.
Then one day a thought came into Rowena's head,
"Who would sort the students when the founders all were dead?"
It was Gryffindor's, idea to create a hat.
And if you wanted to know where to go, it would tell you that.
So come up here, put me on, and on this stool take a seat.
Lets hurry and get the sorting done, so you can all go eat.
Well, I hope you like it! I will probably post another one tomorrow. Please tell me what you think! I know it is kind of short, and some of the lines don't really flow together very well. If you can think of anything that would fix that, please tell me, because I need all the help I can get.....  |
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03-15-2006, 02:37 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | sweet poem!!!!!!!Please write more!!!!I'm begging you!!!!!!!!!! |
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03-15-2006, 02:54 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | Thanks Nikky! I guess you're my only true friend!..... lol
Okay, even though only one person has replied, I'll post another one. Rita Skeeter Rita's Skeeter's very mean- she says things that aren't true.
You wouldn't like her either if she wrote something about you.
She uses her Quick Quotes Quill and jots things while you jabber.
But when you see her articles, you sometimes want to stab her.
Rita has a little secret- she can transform into a bug.
And if you told this secret, she might not be so smug.
So never tell her anything, unless you want to read a lie.
Let me assure you, Rita Skeeter can write things that would make you cry!
I hope you like this one. It is one of my favorites! And if you didn't read my Sorting Hat Song, I encourage you to do so!
Thanks!
Luv,
~Erin
Last edited by ErinElizabeth : 03-21-2006 at 01:46 AM.
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03-15-2006, 02:57 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | yay!!!!!!!!!I love both the poems!!!!!!!I can't decide which one I like better!!!!!!!The one about Rita is very very very true.I think Rita is a big stupid idiot!What about you?LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELO VELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE LOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVELOVE your poems!!!!!!Keep up the fantastic poems please!!!!!! |
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03-16-2006, 01:35 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | I would really appreciate it if some other people would comment on my poems after they read them. I am not going to post anymore of my poems for a while if no one else comments (sorry Nikky!). I hope this doesn't sound rude; I just really want people to read and review my writing.
Thank You!
Luv,
~Erin |
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03-16-2006, 01:48 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | ok!Want me to advertise?I can try!I really want to read more of your poems!!!!!!! |
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03-16-2006, 07:36 PM
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| | Hippogriff
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Hogwarts RPG Name: melany Second | hi.  i read both poems and i think theyre great. i was wondering if you could write a poem that had to do with ron's jealousy toward hermione and krum. once again your a great poet. i cant wait to here more.
~Hibbah~ |
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03-16-2006, 07:38 PM
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| | Hippogriff
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Hogwarts RPG Name: melany Second | Quote: |
Originally Posted by herminiefan#1 ok!Want me to advertise?I can try!I really want to read more of your poems!!!!!!! | wow, your great at advertising.  |
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03-17-2006, 12:44 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | thanx.But, I almost got in trouble for it.I can't stand getting in trouble!!!!Oh yes!I agree with jk fan!I would also love to see a poem about that! |
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03-19-2006, 04:14 PM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | I'm working on one sorta like what you requested. It's more basically about Hermione and Ron with a little jealously of Krum thrown in there. It'll be up by tomorrow...... I hope. Thanks for reading! |
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03-19-2006, 08:49 PM
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| | Hippogriff
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Hogwarts RPG Name: melany Second | ok. *waits* |
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03-21-2006, 01:44 AM
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Rose Fifth | These are great! keep it up! Quote: |
'Cause let me assure you, Rita Skeeter can write things that would make you cry!
| If you cut out 'cause, it would flow better. Like that syllable sort of threw it off a bit, but over all it was fantastic!!! Can't wait to read the Ron/Hermione/Krum one!!! |
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03-21-2006, 01:50 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | You are totally right! Thanks! I edited it!
Just a sec and I'll go grab the next one and put it up!
Thanks sooooo much! I love constructive criticism!...... lol |
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03-21-2006, 01:55 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | Here you go; it isn't exactly what you asked for, but I like it! Ron & Hermione I think Ron fancies Hermione!
Do you think it could be true?
But what is even weirder,
I think Hermione likes him, too.
I know they seem to fight a lot and call each other scary,
And in the middle of their fights is usually their friend Harry.
Ron's only jealous;
He thinks Hermione fancies Victor.
'Cause when Ron asked her to the ball,
Vicky'd already picked her.
If they started dating,
Wouldn't that be swell?
Harry'd just need Ginny back,
So he'd have a girl as well!
I hope you like it!!! Please comment!
Last edited by ErinElizabeth : 03-21-2006 at 02:01 AM.
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03-21-2006, 01:58 AM
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| Draco's Queen Crup
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Rose Fifth | Hahaha...That's cute!!! The last line is a bit drawn out. Just make a contraction like he'd. It was awesome! You are very talented!! Don't stop writing!
EDIT: you should do the creative poetry challenge at zonko's by Simple Spells. It's fun!!! |
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03-21-2006, 01:59 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | Thanks! Please keep reading my poems, so you can help me fix stuff like that. I'll go edit it now! Thanks!!! |
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03-21-2006, 02:05 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | yay!!!!!Lovely poem!!!!!!!I also think that you should do that challenge!And, if you take requests, can you please do one about a girl named Nikky somehow getting the nickname of Cedric Diggory?PLEASE!!!!!!!If you don't want to, its ok.But, I love your poems!!!!!!!!!LOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EMLOVE 'EM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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03-21-2006, 02:21 AM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | I'll try the challenge...... I don't know how good I'll be at it though...
I'll try to do that too, Nikky, but could you tell me a little more about it??? I can't think of too much to write about Nikky having Cedric Diggory's name. If there isn't a story behind it or a reason, though, I'll try to think of somethin'. |
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03-21-2006, 02:24 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | oh trust me, there's a story.There's a story.Its stupid though.Thank you though!!!!!!!! |
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03-21-2006, 03:36 PM
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| Bella's Edward Snape on a Stick Funny:when not in the veil Giant Squid
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Finn McMarney Sixth Year Ministry RPG Name:
Edward Lennox Ministry Security | Your poems are fun to read and about our fav subject...HP and his mates.  it |
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03-22-2006, 12:49 AM
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| | Hippogriff
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Hogwarts RPG Name: melany Second | that ones great. that last 3 lines didnt really fit but other than that it was awesome |
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03-25-2006, 12:31 AM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | Erin!!!!!Where are you?!?!?!?!?I miss you!!!!!!Altough I see you in the Leaky Cauldron.WHERE ARE YOU?!?!?!?!??!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!!?PLEASE POST A POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!! |
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03-25-2006, 05:18 PM
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| Erin Jr. SS Quill Journalist Smugly Smirker Manticore
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Aiden Everett Second Year | I'll post one tomorrow..... I'm not sure what about though.... maybe Divination, or Hagrid's Classes..... I wrote those 2 the other day..... someone post and tell me which one to post first.
~Erin
When you pick which one, both isn't a choice..... I'll post them both eventually, but not at the same time. |
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03-25-2006, 05:21 PM
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| | Plimpy
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Hogwarts RPG Name: Nikky Third | Hagrid's Class please!!!!!!Oh please!!!!!!!!!OH ya, I may not be on the computer for the rest of this weekend starting around 6 PM.I really love your poems!!!!!!!!!!!I LOVE EM' LOVE EM' LOVE EM'!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!PAPSOID!!!!!!! |
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03-26-2006, 02:58 PM
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| La La BicyclePadfoot’s squeaky ball Shrake
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None | Erin! i love your Ron and Hermione poem
ill be waiting for your next one... |
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