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Old 10-30-2005, 01:42 AM   #101 (permalink)
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well, ... I had more time then I thought so I'll post another poem. Lety, dear, please don't spam more thread please. Take the poke as a warning.
Here is the next poem it's pretty self explanitory so I hope you enjoy.

I trusted you, called you friend
Through all the good times we had.
You hurt me, chose others over me.
We thought we’d be friends until the end.


Through all the good times we had
You took advantage of my compassion.
We thought we’d be friends until the end,
But now we are straying from each other.


You took advantage of my compassion.
I thought that I could always count on you,
But now we are straying from each other.
I would give anything for another day with you.


I thought that I could always count on you.
I trusted you, called you friend.
I would give anything for another day with you,
But you hurt me, chose others over me.

Angel, that actually happened to me. One of my best friends chose someone over me and I thought we were best friends. We're friends again but it will never be the same. Great poems, though. It really connected with me. It actually sounds like a song I once wrote about it.
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Old 10-30-2005, 02:35 AM   #102 (permalink)
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Poor Harry... I see we're all awaiting his death. *pets the poor boy*

Aww kris! I know it really hurts.... to be betrayed like that. I'm glad you liked the poem and knew what was going on. My friend and I are still friends... but it's still akward at times. I'll post more soon I hope!!
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Old 11-03-2005, 03:39 AM   #103 (permalink)
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Do you feel what I feel?
Do you have a voice inside your head?
What does your voice say?
Is it the reason why you make so many cry?


Do you see what I see?
Does your voice point out these every day occurrences?
I see humiliation, fear, intimidation.
Is it your voice that causes you to inspire this?


Do you hear what I hear?
I hear everything and nothing.
Does your voice ever stop talking?
Is it the one causing you to burst out every thought you have?


Do you taste what I taste?
Do you taste the bitter irony of the life of a bully?
Does your voice allow you this feeling?
Is it the reason for your cheery disposition?


Do you smell what I smell?
Do you smell the rot of self-doubt that you are creating?
Does your voice say that this is your fault?
Is it the reason you willingly killed so many with out taking notice….


…or did you notice this all along?


Sorry it's been so long everyone. I wrote this one a while ago, when I actually had time to write. *pokes self* It reminded me of Draco alot after just reading it recently, so enjoy!
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Old 11-03-2005, 03:51 AM   #104 (permalink)
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*comes off the bookshelf, wipes some dust off, and catches up*

Wow Angel!! These are REALLY good. Thoughts I'd have to say is my favorite, even though they're all really good.

Keep up the good work!
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Old 11-03-2005, 07:11 AM   #105 (permalink)
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Do I see lots of question marks? Or is my vision impaired? I'm just messing with you. Love that latest one!! Very cool!
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Old 11-04-2005, 04:20 AM   #106 (permalink)
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Yes alot of question marks. Alot of my poems lately question things to no end.

I think I may have some more coming soon.... not really sure. Depends on if I find some more time to write though. Keep the comments flowing and hopfully so will my creative juices will also.
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Old 11-06-2005, 04:36 AM   #107 (permalink)
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Poor Harry... I see we're all awaiting his death. *pets the poor boy*

Aww kris! I know it really hurts.... to be betrayed like that. I'm glad you liked the poem and knew what was going on. My friend and I are still friends... but it's still akward at times. I'll post more soon I hope!!
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same here. Awesome job with these poems!
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Old 11-16-2005, 11:41 PM   #108 (permalink)
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I’m Not….
…Happy with my life.
…Enjoying my adolescences.
….Ready to show love.
…Willing to help you.

I’m Not…
…Going to tell you how I really feel.
…Showing you the real me.
…As smart as you make me think I am.
…Able to deal with all these commitments.

I’m Not…
…Feeling grounded.
…Telling you all my fears.
…Feeling loved.
…Going to be okay.


Too bad you think I Am….

Well. *bows* The creative juices finally came and they came fast. Maybe too fast, but I didn't think it was that bad. I've accomplished two poems tonight. So the next update will be alot sooner.
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Old 11-23-2005, 02:14 AM   #109 (permalink)
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I feel lost in this place, it's been so long, darn uni. These are really good Angel especially the last two, gotta honestly say that i LOVE them from the L to the O passin the V ending the E. o_O yes, homework has finaly cracked me up, lol.

Its always refreshin readin your stuff knowin that im not alone in this stupid train of stupid thoughts (well, at least mine are stupid, yours are good ), I have an observation though; u say in this last one you'll never let us know the real u, and what u really think, but what I think it's that this poems are really revealin, lol. I can see something of you in here, even when i dont even know ur face (dont ask me how or why i just do). NICE WORK! hopefully I'll read you soon!lol
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Old 11-23-2005, 03:15 AM   #110 (permalink)
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u say in this last one you'll never let us know the real u, and what u really think, but what I think it's that this poems are really revealin, lol. I can see something of you in here, even when i dont even know ur face (dont ask me how or why i just do). NICE WORK! hopefully I'll read you soon!lol
I guess Lety whenever I say "you" I'm talking about the people in my every day life that see the physical part of me. I probably don't give them enough credit, they probably do know more than what I think they do... just it's easier to write when I believe that they don't know anything. It's also easier to say "you" because then I'm not naming names, my readers can relate, and "you" is normally a collection of many people.

I know your busy with school and all, but I really want you to know that I'm soo glad you're still reading. Lots of hugs.


I have another poem coming... it just needs some work. I'll post it tomorrow maybe.
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Old 11-24-2005, 06:12 PM   #111 (permalink)
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Perfection

What is perfection?
Is it a person, place, or thing?
Once you reach perfection, is it asked of you always?
If not by yourself, but others?

This isn't the poem that I was working on. I wrote this about a month ago and I just found it in a notebook yesterday. It's short, but I like it. Hopefully you do too.

I'm still trying to get the other one figured out. It just doesn't flow like I want it to.
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Old 11-25-2005, 10:17 PM   #112 (permalink)
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I luff the poetry...i haven't read all of it but the stuff i read is really good...

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Angel, these poems rock! They're sooo awesome, I shall blink at you! *blinks* *pets the poems* Keep writing more!

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Old 11-27-2005, 10:57 PM   #114 (permalink)
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Right, yeah that's the explanation, thanks. To be honest I should have imagined you were referin to the ppl that sees the physical part of you, i was just...dunno, yeah it easier to write "you" than name ppl and it's less pain imagining that nobody knows the real you, or so it is for me.

So, this means that you have never shown your poems to the physical beings that know the physical you indeed?
I guess the answer's no, cause if you do then I serioulsy doubt they havent gone a mile inside of you, or and inch maybe...they'd be too stupid.

Keep the work, thanks for the hugs and hugs for yourself too.
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Take Me Away


Take me away from this hole
I don’t want to be here anymore
I feel as if I have no control.
Why does it feel like I’ve been here before?


Take me away from this life.
It’s getting to be too much
Why must it always be full of strife?
I’ve lost the sense of touch.


Take me away from the madness.
The screaming the shouting; how can a person think?
I’m being consumed by sadness.
I could be gone within an eye blink.


Take me away; but do I want to be gone forever?
I don’t think I can handle this pain much longer.
I’m sure you feel oh so clever.
I’m growing used to the nuisance of this dagger.

Well this was the poem I've been working on. It still seems to be missing something but it is much better. It's a difficult subject that I'm still not sure about. That's the main reason why I still don't think it's done. I'm not sure what I'm trying to say with this poem. (actually I am, just don't take it seriously anyone. I do not in anyway want to be taken away.)

Actually lety *beams* I have just started letting my poetry out this year. I'm even starting to debate if I'm going to look into a book or not. It all just depends. I probably won't publish them, but it's just a nice day dream sort of thing. I like picking and choose what piece of me that I want to show them. Then see the look of "wow" on their face. I've only showed the mild ones though. They really liked Life. Just wait until I finally show them everything else...

Then realization will kick in. It'll be the long awaited revenge type of feeling. One that I may end up regretting.
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Old 11-28-2005, 03:54 AM   #116 (permalink)
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Oh my god! Your poems really rock! This one is really good. You should definatley get them published! *take you away anyways* Hehe.

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Old 11-29-2005, 02:23 AM   #117 (permalink)
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I Bite My Tongue
She says something; I bite my tongue.
He points at me; I bite my tongue.
I bite my tongue all day long,
How long will it take you to notice?


He pushes another person; I bite my tongue.
He harasses others; I bite my tongue.
I bite my tongue all day long,
How long will it take you to notice?


She “barrows” my things with out asking; I bite my tongue.
She claims to be my friend; I bite my tongue.
I bite my tongue all day long,
How long will it take you to notice?


He starts a rumor about my friend; I bite my tongue.
She steals another person’s watch; I bite my tongue.
I bite my tongue all day long,
How long will it take you to notice?


She uses me; I bite my tongue.
He smiles at me; I bite my tongue.
I bite my tongue all day long,
How long will it take you to notice?


Then one day I look in the mirror
I see the blood running from my mouth.
I bit my tongue all day long,
They never even noticed.

Thanks Roma! Here is a poem that I happened to find while I was looking through my notebooks. This time I replaced the word "you" with He/She. Do you like reading this version better?
Thanks for your support.
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Well done, congratulations, revenge is like soup...let it cool a bit it'll taste better. You may regret it later, yeah, but while that time comes enjoy it, lol.

Nice work, i've been writing too, im sure i could use some advice, so im lookin forward to see you in the chat. The first two things I wrote and showed have already been published at school, so imagine how far you can go...a book is not that away now, is it?

Writtin is fun, I never noticed, lol. Keep inspirin' me, will you?
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Why Do You Drink?
How can you find satisfaction in it?
It scares me how it changes you.
Do you even notice its effects?


I know one thing for certain.
If you see the effects on you,
You don’t see the effects on me.


Do you know how many times you’ve brought tears to my eyes?
Do you know how many times you’ve caused me to doubt myself?
Do you know how many times you’ve torn my heart out and criticized it?


Of course you don’t know any of this.
You can’t see what it does to this family.
If you did maybe you’d stop.


Even after all of this pain and pointless misery, I will always love you.
Because I know that it wasn’t you, who said those cruel words,
It was the drink.

Thanks Lety, I'm glad that I'm motivating you as well as myself. Ohh and Congrats! Maybe we'll be seeing a poetry thread by Lety....

Haha I hope we will. I'm sure your stuff would be great. Here is one of my latest works. Still I would like to know if anyone liked how I wrote I Bite My Tongue. Would you rather read stuff that doesn't always say "you"? If so I'll mix things up a bit more.
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eek! Angel! you're poems...are beautifulnesh...sorry i didn't post earlier...kinda hard when you've got you sis nagging ya to get off....

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I missed two amazing poems by my Angel Luv? I should be hurt for that. But anyways, both of these are pure awesome-ness. I luff them. And I think the format with he/she is pretty nice. But they are your poems, so write in any format that pleases you.

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He stands by and watches while his friend is bullied.
Everyone laughs as the kid falls to the ground.
Reality of the situation kicks in and he turns and walks away.
Only problem is, he doesn’t forgive himself
Only way to deal is to take it out on someone else.
Reality of the present situation kicks in
And he sees what he is doing to another kid. He
Zeros in on the situation and lets the kid go.
Everyone groans in disappointment.
Reality of the choice he just made kicks in.
Only now he will stand by his friends.

This one isn't that great... it seems a little forced, but the main idea behind it is what counts. Thanks for all the comments too!
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I love it, Angel! And I'm really loving the message it sends out.

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Hufflepuff Dear Journal

Dear Journal,
I didn’t know how much you meant to me until this very moment.
I panicked at the thought of loosing you.
You hold too many secrets, too much of the real me.


The thought of someone finding you,
Or worse reading what you hold inside almost brought me to my knees.
It made me want to take back every stroke of my pen.


It made my mind race for explanations.
You see only you know the real me.
Only you see both sides of this small coin.


You are the only one who doesn’t judge my every action or words.
You sooth away my fears and ease my tears.
You are the only thing that allows me to be who I really want to be.

OMG!! Okay frist I'll talk about this poem then about the up coming ones... If I can control myself.
This poem isn't that much of a poem... pretty much as free verse as you could I get I guess. But I kinda like it and since I'm running out of my supply of new ones... *coughIhavetowritemorecough*... I'll just post it. Maybe some people will be able to relate.

Now for the up coming ones. I'm going to try Holiday themes. I decided this by suggestion from a certain someone and I think it will be a great idea. About how long it will take I do not know. Hopefully not to long... since we're in December now.
Keep commenting and if anyone has Ideas for themes post here or send me a PM I'll gladly appreciate it.
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