I have to say that some of us will have more lengthy chapters than others. Some, like myself as I am speaking from writing mine, like to write detailed things that are happening or just like a lot of detail. I like to make sure that my reader knows what is going on and how the character is acting.

Now on say like the introduction, if you don't want to make it long, that is your choice. You are re-introducing what everyone has already read. And by reading what you wrote, I think you did an awesome job at it! Well done!! I was very proud to read that!!

Now, Chris and I have talked and I'm going to get each chapter read for submitting soooooo...with that, if each of you would forward your chapters to me or Chris, we can keep it in a safe place and have it ready to turn in. I would place it in a thread within SBFC, but I don't want everyone reading our work. It is not fair to the outsiders... I like to keep everyone in suspence until the very end, kind of like JKR!

Good luck to everyone and yell if you have any questions!!

I know that I am spamming at this point but there have been a couple of people that have already seen what I posted before.

Do we have a name to call our FF? It would be nice to come up with something from everyone...at least some kind of input.

Oh, yeah! A title....erg. That's gonna be hard. I usually write storys around the title, not titles around stories..... erm....

Hmm... I can't think of one. All, I can think of is something to do with Fate.... erg.

I'll come back to that.



Okay, so I got the two chapters! Yay! I can't wait to start on chapter three. I'm going to right now because I'll be uber busy tomorrow.

may I suggest [Secrets] Beyond The Veil? or...Predetermining Forces [which is Fate] or A Dash of Fate And A [Sirius] Bit Of [Black] Luck...


I dunno...*writers block* I've started writing chapter 4 and I just wanted to say that I'm going to write about inside The Tree where Fate conjurs up this potion stuff to send Sirius to Harry's dream....then we go to Harry's dream...


and the Final Battle will be on Godric's Hollow right? 'coz I need to write about where the battle should be....don't worry, I'll forward the chapter once I'm done and you people will know what I'm talking about...

My loverly buddies, I knew that we would come across a tiny little problem with Fate...

Okay..so I managed to read Zyra's Chp. 4 [which was amazingly written, btw] and I believe that I might need to change a few minor [[or maybe major--Depending on your outlook]] details in my version. And, Aria I know you mentioned something about Fate being all feminine-like [[kinda like mother nature]] But, an actual woman-figure-person- taking actual form-thingy? *headdesk* I don't know...Like in mine, Siry refers to it as some kind of 'voice'...The Chp. is sort of like a mind game and the way Zyra left it with Siry on the ground makes my intro a perfect transition so it wouldn't be hard to edit it...But, it would completely ruin the whole mystery vibe I tried to incorporate in writing the bits about it. Hmm, I don't know...But I defo do need to talk to someone about it. ALSO... I couldn't help but feel as though---the tree [[AWESOME creation, btw. Your description of it was brilliant. I could actually picture it perfectly]] was from the Wiz of Oz or like...Narnia or smth. It just seemed too---happy looking? *has no clue what the heck she's babbling about* That just doesn't go hand-in-hand with my description of the scene. Although, I didn't mention a tree...yet. Could we perhaps make it seem as though that tree is decaying---and fate's touch or whatnot---brought that tree back to life and in comes Zyra's description? XD And then have it go back to looking sulky when Fate poofs in my Chapter?

That's exactly what I followed. I might perhaps be complicating things..I have a knack of doing that, don't I? XD I dunno. Help?

As for the title, A Dash of Fate And A [Sirius] Bit Of [Black] Luck... looks and sounds uberly cool. ;]

OHHHH. BTW, Sirius FELLLLLLL backward into the veil. He did not freakin float. Sowwieeee. *had to let that out*

LoL, Tina! thanks....y'know I could edit the Fate Lady if you like....and I could add a part about the tree decaying and with her touch the tree comes to life...


I sent Chris, Stacey and Aria Chapter 4 too...they haven't replied yet I am am dead scared of their reviews!!!


anyway...good that my ending connects with your start....and to everybody...If I need to change/add/delete anything...let me know....

Fate wasn't s'possed to actually have form. It was basically... in my brain a bright blinding light, Sirius can only hear this very ethereal voice... and it's femini and echoing.... and maybe a very blurry outline... but nothing more.

My computer was giving my troubles and I have to re-write my chapter because it wouldn't work properly and thus did not save my chapter.

Once I write that.... again... I'll send it out and then maybe that will help. I haven't actually read what you wrote yet Zyra but from the sounds of it, there may be editing needed.

Since I already wrote it once before, it won't take me too long to write my chapter....


As for the title, I like Secrets Beyond the Veil. It fits nicely.

Oh, and yes we agreed that the final battle would be at Godric's Hollow with Harry calling Voldemort out.


EDIT: So... I've started re-writing my chapter... but I'm really sick and my head is killing me right now. I don't have work tomorrow, so I will be able for sure to finish what I've started. I really need to sleep because it's late and I think I have a bit of a fever ontop of my cold and headache. So g'night and I'm sorry I can't finish it now.

Okay, so if I have to edit Fate's appearance I really have to edit half my chapter! O____O so whatever you want me to do with Fate just let me know and I'll get right on it ASAP.


And people really need to tell me what they think of my chapter, otherwise if it sorta...sucks...it'll remain sucky unless I go and try to go make it better...


As for chpater 6...I can't write it because real life is frequently calling and I really don't have the time.


titles--let me clarify..[since I was too lazy to write a all that was in my mind...]
okay...
1. Beyond The Veil
2. Secrets Beyond The Veil
3. Predetermining Forces
4. A Dash of Fate And A Bit of Black...
5. A Dash of Fate And A Sirius Bit of Luck...
6. A Dash of Fate And A [Sirius] Bit Of [Black] Luck...


so there you have it....but, they're just my suggestions....

I can write chapter six. It's no problem.

I just sent out chapter three to you, Zyra. I skimmed through your chapter just before sending mine out and I noticed that you need to edit Peorth (Fate) and the Tree, which I have dubbed, the Tree of Life.

Your chapter doesn't suck, it just needs editing. Also, you'll notice that I italisized Peorth's dialogue. You should too because she's not of the mortal coil, if you know what I mean.

I'm still of the opinion that Secrets Beyond the Veil is the best title. It's simple and it's vast. It leaves room for a lot of information about the veil and about Sirius.

If we want to wait till the whole story is done, that's fine too.

Zyra! I just had a chance to read your chapter so I read the revised one! Sorry! I think it is wonderfully put together! I'm going to be soooo proud of this whole thing!!

Once everyone is finished with their chapter for submitting, PM me or Chris! I have everything ready to go so that once it is finished, I can move it to where it needs to be, Level 6 of MoM with the other Fanfics, but I cannot do it if no one sends their chapters.

It's no problem, Chris. I love to write.

I also got your revised version Zyra. It's good... I'm sure you recieved my PM. Anywho...

I can't wait to read what else everyone's written!

Everyone knows I'm writing chapter six? Right? Just to make sure...

Zyra, I'm assuming when you say Ari, you are talking to me.... heehee. I'm a bit better, but still sick. Thanks for asking.

Anywho... I've got DMFC FF to work on now... off I go!

Okay! I have talked with Lee once more and we are going to find an easier way to do this. He is going to be posting one chapter per day for each fan fic and I thought it would be nice to have one of our members to send a PM to Fizzing Leebee introducing the first chapter.

What would be better to you guys and gals....having each person PM their own chapter to Lee or nominating one person to do it? I personally think it would be good to have one person send each chapter to Lee that way he knows who to expect it from and what FC is sending it.

I agree, I think only one person should send the chapters.

So, who should send the first chapter???