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03-10-2004, 04:15 AM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
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here's a taste of my wierd life
searching for that on true love
for love so deep you cry
for someone who is your air,
but for some reason makes you stop breathing
i'm searching for that heart stopper
too live with me, to live in me
to die with me, to kill me
someone to love so much it hurts
but right now all i can find is hurt
and all i'm doing is crying
i can't breath, my heart is stopping
barely living, wishing to die
no love is here...
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03-10-2004, 04:32 AM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
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Standing over your grave
with a wilted rose
thinking of your face
and now your still pose
i drop a tear, I'm not alone
they shut you in forever
i hear no one
all i think is your gone
all i hear is my sob
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03-11-2004, 03:59 AM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
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*~* lol i guess i am writing for no one but thats ok. enjOI!*~*
Faith 3-10-04
Looking down at your face
I've missed you
But I'm in a better place
Though without you
Don't miss me to much
For we're kept only apart
By the body in a grave
And the faith in your heart....
*~* hope you guys like that one. just wrote it. its not supposed to sound " religiouse" but i guess it kinda does. its not meant to so i hope i dont offend anyone *~*
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03-13-2004, 07:40 PM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
| seeing the truth 3-13-04
seeing you everyday
it seems like the days never end
until now where our existince is blown away
and tosed into the wind
missing you everyday
is something i'll get used to
missing your face or just the way
you say " i love you"
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03-13-2004, 08:37 PM
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| | Dugbog
Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Georgia
Posts: 625
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wow. I love these poems. There great. and I'm not just saying that. Kepp writing because I'll keep reading.
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03-13-2004, 09:55 PM
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| | Jobberknoll
Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: At your neck!
Posts: 489
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these are really good! i enjoyed them very very very very very very very mucH! here have a flower for your hard work! :flowersmile: and some spam!  lol sorry i had to, but these are really really good! kepp writing because i'll definitely read!
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03-16-2004, 01:35 AM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
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looking down this path of mine
i see no light at the end but
darkness, pain and hardship
it drives my crazy nothing is what it used to be
the darkness has taken over
i feel lonliness, fear, pain, yearning.
emotions going haywire hoping
to turn the other way, choose another path
everything i seem to do is wrong
ive changed...
chosen the wrong path..
im very interested in what you guys think of that one...its not one of my favs but i decided to post it. do you guys have any suggestions of what else i should write about??
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03-16-2004, 02:52 AM
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| | Jobberknoll
Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: At your neck!
Posts: 489
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i like it a lot. the thing with asking people about what to write is not always the solution you have to look around you and within you to gain inspiration about what you want to write. also, just becasue you dont like something that you wrote, doesnt mean someone else wont like it. <-- just some pointers, thats all
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03-17-2004, 03:38 AM
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| | Plimpy
Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Look Behind You!
Posts: 1,187
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omg i really like your writing. its so inspirational and just so true to things that are/had/ happen/ed to me. you really write from your heart.
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03-23-2004, 03:51 AM
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| | Flobberworm
Join Date: Mar 2004
Posts: 24
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3-19-04 Poison
let the sea roll over me
stinging my sores
my tears fall down
hurting even more
but this pain is good
washing the dirt away
poisoning my viens...
3-19-04
screaming until i'm hoarse
crying until i'm dry
puking until i'm empty
cutting until i die..
3-19-04 - why can't they know?
why is it that i can't tell my friends this
but i can tell you?
Why is it that my friend can't know
but you can?
why is it that these feeling inside burst
into your eyes?
why is it that my friends words
make me cry?
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03-25-2004, 01:36 AM
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| | Plimpy
Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Look Behind You!
Posts: 1,187
Hogwarts RPG Name: eve elisabeth Sixth |
i really like your last poems. they seem like they're letting our frustration through words... im totally feeling em. keep up writing. review mine! lol  s, i LOVED secret Window!:
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03-25-2004, 10:06 PM
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| | Glumbumble
Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: In my house.
Posts: 190
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These are good. A lot of them are very dark and depressing! I see a ton of emotion in them. I agree with Alyonna. I get my inspiration from things I see or am thinking about, or how I feel. Read Christine's Scary Poems.
About Your Poems: I think they are good and they are making me sad.
-christine-
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