Mind that I don't beleive I'm very good so I don't care if you hate it.

[U]Magical World

This world of mind,
Full of Magic,
Imagination,
Oh how tragic,
It would be,
If this magic,
I could not see,
Pictures not only,
Are eye candy,
But come to life,
In the magical world

Of course I don't think it's good, but could someone else tell me what they think. I would like it.

Fine......If no one likes my poem, I'll post another :sorcerer:

Take this pain,
This pain of fury,
Make it stop,
I cannott take it any more,

Nothing can ever be mine,
Without it tagging along,
Personal things,
And what should be mine,

The mockingbird sits on a tree,
Staring at every move I make,
Through the window,
Seperating it and me,

I wish the bird,
Would fly away,
I would never see it again,
My trouble would be gone,

It seems as if,
The bird is stuck,
Never moving,
Staring only at me,

I used to think,
This bird was different,
That this bird,
Was only itself,

I have realized,
This mockingbird,
Will never change,
Never being itself,

.... fly away and let me be free ....

what do you think


Understanding:

Who you think I am,
Might not be who you see,
For the mind is a terrible thing,
If not used correctly,

Understaning a world within a person,
Can be extremely hard,
But the secret to understanding it,
Is found within the heart,

Judging me by how I look,
Is an awful thing to do,
So just feel free to judge me,
For I shall not judge you,

Once you get to know me,
My personality varies,
One day I am upset,
The next I'm with the faeries,

Try a little harder,
And you will soon see,
It's really not that difficult,
Understanding me!

I really like your poems! you're a great writer/poet!

thank you so much! as you can see...I don't think they're all that great.

I'm in a maze,
I can not get through,
Trying to find,
Some sence in the world,

This maze,
It's very much,
Like my life,
I am lost,

No one ever,
Understands,
The way I think,
Or what I do

I guess they'll never understand...

Here is a poem thet I just now thought up...

Take Away

Take away,
What you've given,
Take away,
What's has happened,

Things,
They have been done,
Things,
Can't be taken back,

I wish,
That it could change,
I wish,
It would all stop,

...Take away all that has happened between us...

Be my hero and please reply

ok...I guess no one likes my poems. I'll just keep posting anyways



Draining

All thoughts,
All emotions,
All reality,
Draining from my mind,

I am drifting,
Into a world,
A world,
Of pure imagination,

Why is it,
That every day,
The day seems to get longer,
And problems seem to arise,

Friendships,
Are soon lost,
Thoughts, emotions, reality,
Draining from my mind...

What does anyone think?

does anyone know that I'm alive?

hmm...yer poems are ok, but i think they ned more life. more excitement and they could rhyme..no offense..

*Looks Flabbergasted* (Hehe) They’re all awesome! You have no idea how much talent Ssers have. God knows how many poem threads I’ve subscribed too. And every time I fond a new one, I’m like, NO, I like this one more! Lol, Keep writing, you have an awesome writing ability! I wish I could write on demand. Even if they don’t rhyme don’t lose hope. It’s usually a stage writers go through. Eventually you’ll become so good, not on can say you’re poems are bad… Just don’t lose faith,
I’ll be back for more,
Luff Always,
Tina

All poems don't have to rhyme; those kinds are called "free verse." Look at e.e. cummings. His poetry isn't your typical AABB poems, but they are poems nonetheless.

Anyway, great stuff. Keep writing!

uh hu. I'm aware of that.

*Looks at Dean’s post* Yah, what he said. If you don’t want to believe me, listen to him, After all he’s one of the most talented writers on SS (Even if he doesn’t do poems, his fic says it all…) Lol, Anyways,
Post more SOON!
Tina

... I love 'em! they're brilliant! phantasmagorically fantasic! keep up the amazing work!

I'm not taking your advice or anything.....I wrote this a while ago..

Every Day

Threre is a poem,
For every day,
A good day,
A bad day,
A great day,
A sad day,
Whatever the day,
Just see it through,
There's always a poem,
Inside of you. *

*a little encouragement*

A different take on Magical World

In a world,
only few can see,
A magical world,
Of fae who flee,

Some fly arounf,
the greenest lands,
some fly around,
the warmest sands,

Water, air,
Fire, earth,
Faeries show you,
What they're worth,

In a world,
only few can see,
A magical world,
of fae who flee...

I hope you all like it...

thanks for everything everybody....I didn't think anyone knew I was alive

'tis brilliant... and they don't have to ryhme... and they have enough life to live forever

They deep.

Awesome new poem! Guess what I just heard?!?!? There's this new rule on Ss that says you can't post any poems if they're not hp-related. HOW SUCKY IS THAT? Don't get me wrong, Hp rocks, but come on... You might want to check it out....
Tina *Flees Crying* (Kidding..Lol)

you're so hurtfull

In the darkness,
Of a house,
Full of cobwebs,
A young girl,
Sits,

Her hair is matted,
Her eyes like ice,
Lips are purple,
No one there,
But her,
She Sits,

Alas a man,
Comes to save her,
Not thinking,
She strikes,
Hits him while she's sitting,

He stares,
She stares,
She stands,
He steps forward,
He's her guide,

In the brightness,
Of a house,
Full of light,
A woman sits...

I didnt mean to. *Thinks* wAIT, what did I do? I was simply repeating what someone told me. But, hey we can play this the long way until mods interfere...Anyhoo, AWESOME NEW UPDATE!
Tina

so does anyone like my new poem?

I like it! especially the part where you said "Her hair is matted, Her eyes like ice" It really gives me a clear vision of her.

your poems are good, but I also think that they need a little more life and sense

Um....I found a better site than this, so this is my last post.

Goodbye:

Goodbye to all,
Until we meet,
See you next life,
Goodbye to all.