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Ladybug 06-10-2011 03:26 PM

The Last Kiss - Sa13+
 
Haii all, this would be my fourth? FF here on SS had to think then from the top of my head Two I wrote from ages ago, the two most recent ones you will find in my siggy. If you like this and want to read more from me then feel free to have a peek at those. mind one is a joint with my friend Lily

But less about my other works more about this one. I got the idea while watching TV, weird right?, but I was thinking that there have been stories on SS about Lily and James Potter but none that I've seen about the thoughts, feelings and actions of both these characters within the last few moments of their lives - just before Lord Voldemort came into their life one last time.

I have written this FF in Lily's point of view and it's mostly about her thoughts and feelings. Mind I wrote this in a space of about an hour and got many distractions, so I do apologize and hope to write a full blown FF sometime this summer (: This is also only a one-shot FF.

Lastly, enjoy this FF. Also throughout this FF I have tried to keep faithful to the last book when we finally read about what happened to these beloved and have used a view lines from this section in my FF, but I have tried to add a little twist to it. Hope you like (you will find my sources from around the pages 342-345 in Deathly Hallows).

I do not own any of these characters, in anyway - they belong to the amazing J.K.Rowling.



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“Lily, take Harry and go! It’s him! Go! Run! I’ll hold him off!” I heard my husband shout as he ran towards the hall.

"No!" I shouted after him while scooping Harry up into my arms, James turned back to me. He looked scared for me, for Harry, for what he knew was going to come. The look split my heart in two. I couldn't watch him go. I loved him with all my heart.

"Lily go, save yourself and Harry" James cried at me from the door, his eyes bored into mine. I felt the tears well up as I looked at him. Was this really the end? Without thinking about it, I ran up to him and fell into his embrace. I couldn't bare to let him go. It felt like time had stopped, that time was giving us more time together, our last few moments as a happy family before it all came crashing down around our shoulders.

"We could run . . . it doesn't have to be this way! We could get away now before he finds us in here," I said quickly stumbling over my words, trying to get him to understand and agree. Harry squirmed in my arms, he knew something was wrong and didn't like it. He gurgled like he always did when he was getting ready to cry. I looked down at him and bounced him slightly in my arms, "Shh," I soothed hoping he wouldn't start crying, not at a time like this. We were all scared and crying didn't help much. James looked down at us and then quickly to the hallway door. We could hear him chucking things around out there, cursing anything that got in his way. He slowly got closer and closer to us, our last few moments together was getting less and less. I'm not stupid. I knew what was going to happen. We couldn't beat him a fourth time, I could only wish.

I looked up at James as he looked into my eyes. After a moment, he sadly shook his head. "No, no, no..." I moaned as he wrapped his arms around us. I couldn't speak. James rested his head on top of mine and pulled us close. Close to him, close to his heart.

"You know we can't Lily. It has to be ended now. You have to save Harry. It's all about Harry," he said pulling away. I saw tears in his eyes as he looked at us. We both ignored the crashing noise behind us and just looked at each other. After a moment, James bent his head and kissed me, passionately. He put all his love for me into the kiss. It was truly our last kiss. I never wanted it to end, but I knew it had to and surely enough, he pulled away a few moments later.

"I love you," he whispered into my ear. Nothing more, nothing less. He didn't need to. I knew what he felt.

"I love you" I replied back, the tears falling from my eyes at a rapid rate. James turned to Harry and kissed him quickly on the forehead and stepped back.

"Now get out of here. Run!" he cried turning away and running towards the door. I watched him go before looking over at the sofa. My eyes zooned in on a wand, James' wand, the wand he needed. Whipping round to the door again I shouted, "James, your wand!" But he was already gone. I would never see him again.

It only took me a moment before I snapped out of my...dream you could call it, but to me all hope died. The world suddenly sped up around me, like the last few moments I had had with James were a trick, and lasted only about ten seconds. Harry started kicking again in my arms and this time started to cry. Bouncing him once more, I kissed him on the forehead. Tears fell from my eyes and settled on his hair lke droplets of rain. I frantically looked around me for a way out, a way to hide. I knew I should run or apparate somewhere . . . get safe. Maybe go to Dumbledore, he would shield them. But I couldn't. That would mean leaving James, and I couldn't live with that. Instead I ran to the stairs leading to the floor above, the wooden steps creaking as I ran up them. Our house wasn't very big but big enough to house our little family and I loved it. However, the one thing it did lack was hiding places. I was forced to run to Harry's small bedroom, and at least there was something to put Harry in so he would be a little more safer. He was all I was thinking about at this moment. He was the center of my world now.

As I was throwing open the door to the room, I head a cry from downstairs. The cry of the killing curse and a thump of someone hitting the floor a split second later. I didn't know till then how much I was holding in my tears till then, and after hearing him hitting the floor the tears started to spill slow at first but they picked up speed quickly. I couldn't believe he was gone, my husband, the love of my life. We had gone through so much throughout our lives. The hatred I used to feel for him which soon turned into love. I'd felt so scared for him so many times in our lives because he was always running into danger to save those around him. I used to hate him for it but i knew why he did it - to make the world around us a better place by killing those who supported the one who not be named for those who would live when we died. For poeple like Harry, but now he was gone. I would never see him again, feel his touch, his kiss, his love.

I had to keep moving though I could hear him coming up the stairs laughing as he went. He liked this and that was just sick. So many words went through my mind as I rushed forward into the room slamming the door with my foot. So many words which would insult him, so many that I didn't want to repeat them. I rushed over to the cot and dropped Harry into it. He was still crying but i didn't have time to quiet him. I had to protect him as much as I could. I was still crying as I rushed over to various parts of the bedroom and pulled furniture and boxes to block the door, to baracade them in. Hopefully it would keep him at bay. I really wasn't thinking straight.

I stepped back from the door as I heard the creaking of the floorboards outside the door. He was finally here and came with only one intention; to kill them all. I looked down at my hands to noticed no wand. That was okay, I didn't need it. I wasn't going fight him. There was no use. I was just going to beg him for my son's life, the only thing that connected me to James now...now that he was gone. I didn't realise how stupid it was by blocking the door. He would get it open; he always did. Within moments. there was a huge bang and the door was open. He stood on the threshold, wand pointed at me, the fear weld up at me suddenly. I wasn't ready to die. I had to save Harry, look after him, raise him. I pressed my back into the cot as I stared at the man who would kill me in moments. The man took a step into the room. I couldn't see his face under the hood of his black billowing cape but I knew he was smiling, glad he was near the end of all this so he could go back to terriozing the world, getting what he wanted. No, I couldn't let that happen.

My fear turned into hope and I stepped forward and spread my arms. He was not going to kill my son. “Not Harry, not Harry, please not Harry!” I began to beg, Harry had stopped crying now, he was just watching. I couldn't look at him. I had to look at the man before me.

“Stand aside, you silly girl . . . stand aside now.” The wand was stll raised, pointed at my heart; he was ready to cast the spell I knew but what shocked me for a moment was that he was giving me a choice. Why didn't he just kill me? I was nothing to him, just a Mudblood but here he was giving me a choice. No, I wouldn't take it. I'd rather die than give up Harry.

“Not Harry, please no, take me, kill me instead—”

“This is my last warning—”

“Not Harry! Please . . . have mercy . . . have mercy. . . . Not Harry! Not Harry! Please—I’ll do anything—” I don't know how I was still begging. I was terrified of him . . . .of the end, but I still was. The thought of Harry living through this kept me going, and the thought that I would see James again very soon; that was what I was looking forward to. Don't get me wrong, I hate the thought of leaving Harry to a harsh world where he was in, but I was really looking forward to seeing James again.

“Stand aside. Stand aside, girl!”

I didn't get to say anything else, he seemed bored with me. The man raised his wand higher and opened his mouth to say the word which would end all my fears, and I would leave this harsh world once and for all. I found at this point I wasn't afriad of death. I welcomed it; it felt like a weight of the world was lifted from my shoulders. I wasn't looking at the man with the wand but instead at another man standing behind him. He was tall; taller than me and had messy black hair which looked like it was never tamed, his round glasses framing his face. The man was smiling at me, he held out his hand to me to take and I knew this would be the last thing I saw while on earth. I'm no believer in this religion stuff, though I respected it, but this seemed like a message from God. I quickly closed my eyes, convinced I was losing it and then back at James. He was still standing where he had a moment before, hand held out waiting for me to take it.

"I'm coming James..." I whispered to myself as I heard the killing curse be thrown from the man's wand from like a mile away. It hit me in a moment. I felt nothing, all fight had left me, I was ready to die. I just hope that in sacrificing myself for Harry would help me, I remembered reading it somewhere. I just hope it was true. The room filled with a bright green light as my body fell to the floor, ending my life.

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Okay so what did you think?

Thanks for reading.

Eviee <33

Mordanyes 06-14-2011 10:46 AM

WOW! That is pretty much exactly how I imagine the characters thoughts and feeligsn to be like! I loved it! It's so sad, and beautifully written! :loved: Awesome story! :)

Lady of Light 06-14-2011 11:01 AM

Oh gosh! I loved it! <3 I really couldn't help but cry when I read it. Amazing job! Your a great writer :)

Jokun 06-14-2011 11:10 AM

Wow that was breath taking your skill as a writer is so good. The thoughts and feelings that Lily felt was so vivid it was almost as if I was there with her I most say I love this.

::applauds::

MuggleDinosaur 06-14-2011 04:02 PM

*:faint:*

I didn't know this was up already. I was looking for it and then
you told me about it and now look I'm hear commenting. I think
it's a wonderful FF. PAMS!!!

Bre

GrapehSarah 06-14-2011 04:09 PM

EVIE! THIS IS SIMPLY FANTASTIC!!! :loved:

I love it! Keep up the fantastic writing. :D

Ladybug 06-14-2011 04:35 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mordanyes (Post 10399961)
WOW! That is pretty much exactly how I imagine the characters thoughts and feeligsn to be like! I loved it! It's so sad, and beautifully written! :loved: Awesome story! :)

Aw thank you :D i never thought that people would actually think about what they are feeling, but i'm glad that you've liked it (:

Quote:

Originally Posted by HP_princess (Post 10399984)
Oh gosh! I loved it! <3 I really couldn't help but cry when I read it. Amazing job! Your a great writer :)

You cried? Aww *huggles* i didn't mean to make you cry.
I'm glad you liked it (: and i hope you read more of my FF's later on.
And thank you, i'm not as good as some writers on SS.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Jokun (Post 10399992)
Wow that was breath taking your skill as a writer is so good. The thoughts and feelings that Lily felt was so vivid it was almost as if I was there with her I most say I love this.

::applauds::

Thank you! But must say some other people on SS are better then me. *cough*You*cough* :D
Woah i must have done something right to make them really vivid.
Thank you for reading (:

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Originally Posted by ImaBRE! (Post 10400172)
*:faint:*

I didn't know this was up already. I was looking for it and then
you told me about it and now look I'm hear commenting. I think
it's a wonderful FF. PAMS!!!

Bre

You were looking for it? Aw thanks! yeah i had the siggy put up first before the story, you must have seen my siggy. I was a little surprised it was up today too but i'm glad it is (: Thank you for reading and i hope to write a new on soon.

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Originally Posted by GrapehGrape (Post 10400177)
EVIE! THIS IS SIMPLY FANTASTIC!!! :loved:

I love it! Keep up the fantastic writing. :D

THANK YOUUU!!!!!! :loved:
Glad you enjoyed reading it and i hope to write more soon.


*cough* This is a one-shot though guys *cough*

AlwaysDance 06-14-2011 04:56 PM

ohhhh I love it so good
keep up the good work :D

Sarah

Connie 06-14-2011 05:06 PM

Hey Eviee. I knew there wasn't cause for you to say it wasn't very good. You presented the story very well, and although it is a story that everyone who read the books know very well, you was able to put your own spin on it and made it work like a new story. Very nice, and I was happy to read it. Reading sad ff's like this is very hard, and I appreciate the courage you was able to give them, and the way you had them except the inevitable made it easier to read. Thank you for sharing with us. :glomp:

Lady of Light 06-14-2011 05:25 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Miss Evi3e <3 (Post 10400193)
You cried? Aww *huggles* i didn't mean to make you cry.
I'm glad you liked it (: and i hope you read more of my FF's later on.
And thank you, i'm not as good as some writers on SS.

*cough* This is a one-shot though guys *cough*

That's okay! :glomp: Yep. Let me know when you update more FF's and I'll definitely read them :) Well, I think your great!

Yep, I know! :D

crookshanks_kitty 06-15-2011 01:43 AM

OMG! :faint: Evieee!!! You made me cry! :cry: I don't even know how to comment on this, it's simply amazing. It's perhaps one of the touchiest moments that you could focus on. I loved it so much. :glomp: You have a talent young lady! Use it as much as you can since I'd loved to read more from your writing. :)

Samia 06-17-2011 02:30 PM

that made me so sad :(

you reallllly gooooooooooood, love :loved:

I enjoooyed it very much <3

JeshieRAWR 06-18-2011 05:52 AM

Awww, so sad! :(

It's amazingly written though, yessiree! :yes:

Can't wait for more written pieces by youu! <33

Lollipop! 06-18-2011 05:33 PM

That was amazing Evie. You have no reason to say it isn't. You did really well. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.

Weasley174 06-21-2011 10:12 PM

That was amazing Evie. :glomp:

Ladybug 06-21-2011 10:34 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by sarahb (Post 10400206)
ohhhh I love it so good
keep up the good work :D

Sarah

Thank you Sarah :glomp:
Glad you liked it (:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Connie (Post 10400215)
Hey Eviee. I knew there wasn't cause for you to say it wasn't very good. You presented the story very well, and although it is a story that everyone who read the books know very well, you was able to put your own spin on it and made it work like a new story. Very nice, and I was happy to read it. Reading sad ff's like this is very hard, and I appreciate the courage you was able to give them, and the way you had them except the inevitable made it easier to read. Thank you for sharing with us. :glomp:

Okay okay i bring myself down a little, but then again if i had said something like 'it's so good go read' that'll make me boastful and argh dislike boastful. But really you liked it? i mean when i wrote it i didn't expect many people to really get the feel of it like i did, i'm a hopeless romantic, but i seem to have. Yay to me i suppose. I think i should write more this summer (:
Your welcome and of course thank you for taking the time to read. :glomp:

Quote:

Originally Posted by HP_princess (Post 10400231)
That's okay! :glomp: Yep. Let me know when you update more FF's and I'll definitely read them :) Well, I think your great!

Yep, I know! :D

Will do, thank you again! And well thank you for reading? haha running out of words!
:loved:

Quote:

Originally Posted by crookshanks_kitty (Post 10401142)
OMG! :faint: Evieee!!! You made me cry! :cry: I don't even know how to comment on this, it's simply amazing. It's perhaps one of the touchiest moments that you could focus on. I loved it so much. :glomp: You have a talent young lady! Use it as much as you can since I'd loved to read more from your writing. :)

I seem to be making people cry....really wasn't my intention....i guess i did something right, right? I mean i was just sat in my living room and i suddenly thought i wanted to do a one shot, kinda give it a go. I don't really know how i came up with this topic but it just came to me, I suppose being a hopeless romantic and i always think about how Harry's life would have turned out if his parents weren't killed....

Thank you for reading and i'm sorry for making you cry. Promise i wont do it agian. Thank you, but the only talent i really have is what comes to mind and what i can get onto paper before it all leaves my head! But i will try and write a lot more this summer and of course let you know! :glomp: :loved:

Quote:

Originally Posted by Samia (Post 10407600)
that made me so sad :(

you reallllly gooooooooooood, love :loved:

I enjoooyed it very much <3

I'm so sorry for making you cry. Not my intention.
Thank you for reading and i'm glad you liked it. <33

Quote:

Originally Posted by JeshieRAWR (Post 10409375)
Awww, so sad! :(

It's amazingly written though, yessiree! :yes:

Can't wait for more written pieces by youu! <33

Thank you for reading (: And i'm starting to like this a lot more then i did at first. :lol:
Will let you know if i post up anymore FF <33

Quote:

Originally Posted by LilyLunaGinnyPotter (Post 10410141)
That was amazing Evie. You have no reason to say it isn't. You did really well. I can't wait to see what you come up with next.

Thank you Lily :glomp: I'm glad you liked it, and coming to think of it what shall i tackle next? other then writing my next chapter in our story hmm, let me think :lol: Thanks again!

Quote:

Originally Posted by Harry174 (Post 10416755)
That was amazing Evie. :glomp:

Thank You Liam, Glad you stopped by and read. :glomp:

Magical Soul 06-22-2011 12:40 AM

Oh. My. God.
Evie, you're highly sensitive and great! Your writing is touching and seriously I never flinched when I saw the scene in the movies but here.. I reeeeeally felt it. I had to swallow the tears!! I couldn't believe it! It's brilliant!! :glomp:

Trish 06-23-2011 04:10 PM


Wow, that is beautiful.... so well written...Good Job :)




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