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07-13-2008, 08:25 PM
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#176 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | alyweasley:Very unexpected
hrmy luv 4eva: Your post made me laugh. Cause she'll come out of teh coma before she reaches 75. It either she does or dies
Lol!!! posting more soon
8 chapters left to write then its finished. But don't worry im doing a sequal guys. But i wont start posting the story on here until i've finished writting it up. That way you don't have to wait long
Evangeline
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UPDATE:
Here is the next chapter guys. Chapter 21:
Lily’s mind was racing. She was scared, everything was black, she couldn’t see. She began to cry
“Mummy, Daddy” She shouted into the darkness.
She wanted them, she missed them dearly.
“Where are you?” She asked the empty space before her. She looked around once more.
“Am I dead?” She asked herself, “Because if I am I hate it, I don’t want to be dead. I want mummy and daddy” She was getting extremely scared now. She was lonely, no one to talk to, no one to be her friend
“I hate it here” She shouted through her cries. She started to band her hands onto the floor, the black emptiness floor. Lily didn’t see nor care about the missing floor, all she cared about was that she was missing her family.
Lily stopped suddenly
“A-h-h-h” Lily gasped, shuddering as if in pain, shuddering time after time as if under repeated blows. Then all at once she fell.
And at the same time thousands of miles away from the black emptiness she opened her eyes to be greeted by friends and family.
please comment
Evangeline
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Last edited by Evangeline Hermione : 07-13-2008 at 08:50 PM.
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07-13-2008, 10:40 PM
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#177 (permalink)
|  SBFC Activity Offic. LPFC Event Officer Neville's Patronus Faerie
Location: At home.... duh Join Date: Mar 2008
Posts: 4,101
Hogwarts RPG Name: Sabrina Dumbledore Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Elizabeth Peterson Diagon Alley | Right so why is it that while i'm at my laptop you never post, yet when I go to a place where I can't use my laptop for two days you post bunches????? 
Lily and Rose had better be alright missy... Jade may be threatening Dara, but I'm threatening Sabrina and we all know that she's not in the best of conditions to be getting angry is she? Now PAMS and make everything better!!!! Luv ya!
Jemma
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07-13-2008, 11:31 PM
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#178 (permalink)
| A bit confused
 Crup
Location: I want you bleeders. Join Date: Aug 2006
Posts: 2,126
Hogwarts RPG Name: Maura Felicia Silvermoon Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Violet Silvermoon Magical Creatures | Ooh...new chapter....You know I think that one is my favorite yet, actually.
PAMS, the suspense is killing me....and Lily and Rose, for that matter. |
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07-14-2008, 02:43 AM
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#179 (permalink)
| | Gnome
Location: Neverland Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 99
Hogwarts RPG Name: Lucy J. (no last name yet) Fourth Year | New Reader!!!! 
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OMG i luv this story!!!
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Plaz post more!!!!!
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PAMS!!!PAMS!!!
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07-14-2008, 05:44 AM
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#180 (permalink)
| | Hippocampus
Location: Somewhere, reading Join Date: Apr 2008
Posts: 279
| Wow! So many posts in such a short amount of time! Thanks for finishing some of the cliffies. And I’m sooooo glad that you plan to write a sequel.  Lily and Rose had better be alright so they can be in the sequel though!  PAMS!! |
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07-14-2008, 07:42 AM
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#181 (permalink)
| | Hippocampus
Location: In Edwards arms Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 296
| OH my gosh sorry for missing a post and i loved it and i hope they are alright and............... and ...................... yay a sequel hurray!!!1 |
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07-14-2008, 08:29 AM
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#182 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | Jemma: Lets see, um i don't know proberly you leave at the wrong time and i post at the wrong time
Hrmy luv 4eva: glad to hear it, well to tell you im writting the next chapter up today and then i might post it tonight. is it chapter 2 thats coming up???
Meg: Yay a new reader!!! Welcome to my story Meg. Im glad you like it. I shall be posting sometime today. so stayed tuned.
hpObsessed: Im glad you like me writting a sequal, Ibe finshed writting this story(just need to post it, thats why im posting a lot in a short time). I've already started to write the sequal guys. But im going to finished writting it before i start to post it.
Harry Potter Freak1: Hey, hows you?? Thats ok about missing a post, you've read it now. Thats what counts. yep im doing a sequal guys. and the next post up today, hopefully.
Ok that done i would like to tell you that im posting soon and i would like to tell you that (even if you don't want to know) there is 28 chapters in this story. and im writting chapter 22 today. Not long now
Evangeline
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07-14-2008, 08:43 AM
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#183 (permalink)
|  SBFC Activity Offic. LPFC Event Officer Neville's Patronus Faerie
Location: At home.... duh Join Date: Mar 2008
Posts: 4,101
Hogwarts RPG Name: Sabrina Dumbledore Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Elizabeth Peterson Diagon Alley | Okay I'm not upset now that there are 22 chapters left becasue there's going to be a SEQUAL!!!! I love sequals!
JEmma
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07-14-2008, 10:07 AM
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#184 (permalink)
| | Hippocampus
Location: In Edwards arms Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 296
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I'm so excited i cant wait for more posties and please come out i have din din postie come on come out!! LOL
Well anyway cant wait for more posts |
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07-14-2008, 12:56 PM
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#185 (permalink)
| | Jobberknoll
Location: Leicester, UK Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 484
Hogwarts RPG Name: Krysta Hedwig Sixth Year Ministry RPG Name:
Kye Black Magical Creatures | Hello!
Well I'm all caught up. I read it this morning, because I'm sick and didn't go into work. (lots of sympathy, please) :-)
This story is SO exciting. You just never know what's going to happen next and there's so many layers to it. I love that you tell it froms all their points of view. Oh and the way you made "Jemma" and "Sabrina" twins really made me laugh.
Your last chater was great. I loved your description and vision of what it as like for Lily to be in a coma. You have a wonderful imagination and I can really tell what you're seeing in your head when you write.
I have one question, though: where the heck James???
PAMS!
PS - your comuter situation at home is awful. I think I should post you a laptop to a secret location so you can type whenever you want.  |
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07-14-2008, 03:56 PM
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#186 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | Jemma: No there is NOT 22 chapter left im posting chapter 22 now, which means there is going to be 6 more chapters.
Harry Potter Freak1: Ok ok here is your din din postie or what ever it is!!!
Krysta: Ok Im glad you love my fanfic, but its nearly finished.... ok im sorry James has not been in the story but really th story has not been based round him, but he will be in a chapter soon, i promise.
And i feel sorry for you being sick, GET WELL SOON!!!!
Ok bout this laptop thing, its very nice of you to send one but i do have to go to school, that mostly why i don't post all the time... that and clubs i go to but here is the next chapter
CHAPTER 22
Albus woke from his sleep early the next day because of a small tap on his window. He got slowly up from his lying position and sat on the bed, too tired to move. Albus looked over at eh window to find an owl hovering in the air, is big blue eyes looking at him. Albus walked over to the window and opened it. The owl flew in and landed on his bed. Albus went over to the owl and took the letter from its feet, the owl flew out the window, and Albus shut it behind him. He sat on his bed and opened the letter. He began to read, the light from the moon beaming onto the letter. Dear Mr. Potter
We have some very good news. Please come to my office after lunch. Thank you
Professor Smart (Mike)
Albus smiled and put the letter into his trunk. He quietly got back into bed and fell asleep.
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Albus sat at lunch, eager for it to finish, so he could go find out what this good news was. Without noticing Lily-Anne slid over to him.
“Albus,” She said “I need to talk with you” She finished
“L…Lily-Anne is this important?” he asked
“Yes but secret, follow me” she said sweetly. She stood (Albus following suit) and left the hall. Lily-Anne took Albus’s to the courtyard outside and sat down on a bench. Albus sat next to her, before talking Lily-Anne looked out over the grounds of the school.
“Albus, you can trust me right?” she asked him
“Yes” he replied shortly
“Then would you please tell me what’s wrong. I and your friends are worried”
Remembering the conversation he had heard between her and Jonny he said
“Lily-Anne, I…I heard the conversation you had with Jonny…”
“You did” Lily-Anne interrupted
“Yes, and I trust you, and I’m only going to tell you that the only problem is that I miss Rose, that’s all” He finished
Lily-Anne gave a sign of relief
“I’m glad you told me, but Albus Rose will be found but don’t neglect your friends Albus, there there to help” Albus nodded
“Albus have you had any letters from home?” She asked suddenly
“No, mum usually writes once a week, but they stopped a while back, it rather confuses me” He replied
“Yes strange” Lily-Anne looked out at the grounds, ‘I don’t know how to tell him’ she thought to herself. She was getting nervous; she seemed to have shown it because Albus said
“You seem nervous Lily-Anne” He took her hand and gave it a squeeze
“Well it’s just t…that I like you a lot Albus’s” said shaking, Albus’s face lit up
“Me…me too” He said. At that moment they both leaned in and kissed. It felt like forever for Albus, but it was only a couple of seconds. They broke apart. Lily-Anne smiled
“That was great” She said
“Yea” He agreed
Lily-Anne looked at her watch
“Come on we don’t want to be late for class” She took Albus’s hand and together they both walked to the castle.
At that moment Albus remembered he had a meeting with the headmaster.
“Lily-Anne, I just remembered I’m not in next class, I have to go meet the headmaster”
“Oh” She said simple
“Don’t worry I’ll find you later” He gave her a quick kiss on the cheek and hurried off
Albus ran up to the statue guarding the stairs to the headmaster’s office. He said the password (Fizzy pop) and to ran up to the door. Albus knocked
“Come in” called the professor.
Albus pulled the volt on the door and opened the door
Please comment
Evangeline
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Last edited by Evangeline Hermione : 07-14-2008 at 04:02 PM.
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07-14-2008, 04:00 PM
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#187 (permalink)
|  SBFC Activity Offic. LPFC Event Officer Neville's Patronus Faerie
Location: At home.... duh Join Date: Mar 2008
Posts: 4,101
Hogwarts RPG Name: Sabrina Dumbledore Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Elizabeth Peterson Diagon Alley | Ahhh, I wonder what he's going to find. Hopefully his mum, sister and cousin all in tip top shape... no wait they're in hospital... how about his dad so harry can take him to see his mum, sister and cousin. I'm rambling aren't I? Hmmmmmm.....I can only see one solution to this brilliant scheme......
PAMS!!!! PAMS!!! PAMS!!!! PAMS!!! PAMS!!! PAMS!!!! PAMS!!! PAMS!!! PAMS!!
Jemma
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07-14-2008, 04:07 PM
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#188 (permalink)
| | Gnome
Location: Neverland Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 99
Hogwarts RPG Name: Lucy J. (no last name yet) Fourth Year | Great I can't wait to see what happens next?!?!?!?!
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PAMS!!!PAMS!!!PAMS!!!
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07-14-2008, 04:16 PM
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#189 (permalink)
| Wandering Regulus Hippogriff
Location: I'm home!!! Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 3,571
Hogwarts RPG Name: srimathi srivatsan | u posted loads!!wow!!1I'm soo desperate!!!all i can say is WOW!!~!they kissed!!cool!!!i hope it is really good news which he is going 2 find out!!
PAMS!!PAMS!! |
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07-14-2008, 04:17 PM
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#190 (permalink)
| | Jobberknoll
Location: Leicester, UK Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 484
Hogwarts RPG Name: Krysta Hedwig Sixth Year Ministry RPG Name:
Kye Black Magical Creatures | Awww, young love.
I wonder what Mike's got to tell him. Maybe it's about time Albus knew what was going on at home.
PAMS! |
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07-14-2008, 04:42 PM
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#191 (permalink)
| A bit confused
 Crup
Location: I want you bleeders. Join Date: Aug 2006
Posts: 2,126
Hogwarts RPG Name: Maura Felicia Silvermoon Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Violet Silvermoon Magical Creatures | Ahhhh. That's sweet.
I wonder what he will find out? |
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07-15-2008, 08:13 AM
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#192 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | Jemma:Im glad you like it Jemma, but your ideas are wrong. You will have to wait and see.
Meg: Hello again meg, oh well i have the next three chapters with me now and i will start to write them as soon as i can. Promise.
MAthI: Hello MAthI long time no see. Lol!!! Yep i've posted loads and i will for a while, well until the story has finished.
Krysta: Yep yound Love, i thought you would like that bit. Mike has a lot to tell Albus its just when he should do it is the problem. Anyway posting soon. promise
hrmy luv 4eva: Thanks, i try to be sweet. LOL!!! Ok well you will find out pretty soon
Ok posting VERY soon
Evangeline
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07-15-2008, 08:50 AM
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#193 (permalink)
| | Hippocampus
Location: In Edwards arms Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 296
| ooooooooooooooo loved that last chapter loads and i cant wait for more
PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! PAMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
pams PAMS PAMSOID!!! |
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07-15-2008, 01:22 PM
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#194 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | Hello everyone, notice im posting in the middle of the day, well it once in a lifetime thing. LOL!!!
Anyway here is the next chapter
Rose looked around; there was nothing, nothing to see. All pitch black. She was scared. She wanted her parents.
‘Am I dead?’ she asked herself, ‘no I can’t be, it was only my chest that hurt.’ Rose thought, and then it hit her, ‘My chest doesn’t hurt’. Rose looked around again. She could see light ahead. Rose started to walk towards it, but stopped.
‘What if I am dead and im going to heaven, away from everyone’ She shuddered at the idea
Suddenly she heard someone crying
“Who’s there” She called into the darkness. No one replied. Then she heard someone talk
“It’s ok Hermione dear, she’ll pull through” Rose lit up, ‘that’s daddy’s voice’ she thought, ‘Theres nothing for it’ Rose walked into the white light
Rose opened her eyes slowly. A bright light was beaming into her eyes. She could no longer hear any voices. Once Rose had finally opened her eyes she saw that she no longer was in a black place, she was in her hospital bed, in reality. Rise looked at the person that was there with her that had always been with her, her mother.
“Mum, Mum” Rose greeted her mother. Before Rose could do more than say Hogwarts Hermione was hugging her and kissing her all over.
“Mum, Mum I’m fine” Rose pulled away from her mother.
A nurse walked in at that moment, he came over to look at Rose
“She’ll be right as rain after a nights sleep” the nurse told Hermione
When the nurse had gone Hermione turned to Rose
“Right you get some sleep while I’ll go find your father” Hermione stood
‘He’s proberly getting food’ Hermione thought to herself before walking off.
Rose laid back onto her pillow and slowly drifted off to sleep. Pls comment |
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07-15-2008, 01:23 PM
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#195 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Maintenance | sorry for double post
here is chapter 24
“Mummy, Daddy” Lily said weakly. Everything hurt
“Lily” Ginny gave her a deep hug, Harry did the same.
Once she had pulled away form her father she looked around at everyone that surrounded her bed. Ron, Hugo, Harry, Ginny, Mr and Mrs Weasley, George, Sabrina and her twin Jemma, Seamus, Dean, Neville, Luna, and the rest of the order.
“Hello Lily, how are you?” Luna asked dreamily. She was like that.
“Everywhere hurts” She replied
“It’s going to be like that for the next couple of weeks I’m afraid, while you recover” Harry told her, he felt very sorry for her, being his only daughter he really wanted her to recover to her old self again. Lily moaned and leaned back on her pillows
“Where are Albus and James?” She asked her parents
“There be here shortly” Ginny told her gently while stroking Lily’s wonderful long hair. Lily closed her eyes
“She’s tired, she needs sleep” someone said. Lily opened her eyes and watched (but her parents) slowly get up and leave.
“Mummy, Daddy,” She began
“Yes Lily”
“Before I woke I was so scared. I was in this dark place, nothing but blackness. There was no one there, it felt like I had di…died and I’m scared if I go to sleep I’ll go back there” she finished, tears in her eyes. Lily looked at each other, concern on their faces.
“It’s ok Lily we’re hear, nothings going to happen. Now go to sleep” Ginny and Harry both gave her a kiss on the forehead.
Lily closed her eyes again and slowly fell to sleep. The last thing she heard before drifting off was her mother asking her father,
“What do you think this means?” pls comment |
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07-15-2008, 01:41 PM
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#196 (permalink)
|  SBFC Activity Offic. LPFC Event Officer Neville's Patronus Faerie
Location: At home.... duh Join Date: Mar 2008
Posts: 4,101
Hogwarts RPG Name: Sabrina Dumbledore Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Elizabeth Peterson Diagon Alley | YAY!!!!!! *does another little dance* Two posts!!!!!
I'm so glad Rose and Lily are alright! You do know that I would've hurt you if they weren't alright don't you. 
Great posts Evangeline!
Jemma
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07-15-2008, 01:53 PM
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#197 (permalink)
| | Jobberknoll
Location: Leicester, UK Join Date: May 2008
Posts: 484
Hogwarts RPG Name: Krysta Hedwig Sixth Year Ministry RPG Name:
Kye Black Magical Creatures | Phew. I was prettyworried about Lily there! I wonder whether the "dark place" is just the coma-scape or something more sinister...
PAMS! PAMS! PAMS! |
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07-15-2008, 03:37 PM
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#198 (permalink)
| | Hinkypunk
Location: England Join Date: Dec 2007
Posts: 869
Hogwarts RPG Name: Tinkerbell(Bell) Sabrina Evens Second Year Ministry RPG Name:
Lily-Anne Evans Magical Ma | |