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Sabrina_Snape · 05-06-2008, 08:22 PM

First to Post!!! Siobhan that was really good

I told you I'd come and see it! Poor Charlotte and Liam

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Just a bit of a hint, but if you're having a conversation between two people, it is easier to read if you post like this:

Charlotte Gates awoke to the sudden drawback of her curtains. As she opened her eyes, reluctantly, the sun's bright morning beams flooded her room. She sat up and saw her twin brother Liam standing by the closest window with a mischevious grin on his face-- a trademark of his. "Well good morning, sleepyhead...you look pleasant. Still tired?" he greeted her with a hint of a sarcastic tone.

"Yeah well after trekking around half of Ireland with you yesterday, I have a reason to be." she replied with a shake of her auburn hair.

It just makes it easier to tell who is speaking. Apart from that, it's fantastic!

Jemma
xxx

05-06-2008, 08:22 PM	#2 (permalink)
Sabrina_Snape LPFC Event Officer Ginny Weasley-Potter Faerie Location: At home.... duh Join Date: Mar 2008 Posts: 4,293 Hogwarts RPG Name: Sabrina Dumbledore Second Year Ministry RPG Name: Elizabeth Peterson Diagon Alley	First to Post!!! Siobhan that was really good I told you I'd come and see it! Poor Charlotte and Liam . Just a bit of a hint, but if you're having a conversation between two people, it is easier to read if you post like this: Charlotte Gates awoke to the sudden drawback of her curtains. As she opened her eyes, reluctantly, the sun's bright morning beams flooded her room. She sat up and saw her twin brother Liam standing by the closest window with a mischevious grin on his face-- a trademark of his. "Well good morning, sleepyhead...you look pleasant. Still tired?" he greeted her with a hint of a sarcastic tone. "Yeah well after trekking around half of Ireland with you yesterday, I have a reason to be." she replied with a shake of her auburn hair. It just makes it easier to tell who is speaking. Apart from that, it's fantastic! Jemma xxx