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Old 02-24-2008, 07:27 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default What is Innocence? - Sa16+

What is wrong with her?...
Leave her alone! She's mine!...
I don't know why I did what I did...
Why does she look so innocent? What is Innocence, anyway?...

*credit goes to Laura*

Here's another of my lovely story ideas that I'm proud to post. Those who know me, be gentle on the criticism. Those who don't, enjoy and I would love to hear your reactions, on my style of writing. Now, this story is about a boy, in Hogwarts, who meets a girl, who doesn't appreciate herself, and falls in love with her...The problem is, falling for her leads to a whole lot of chaos. Well, you get the idea, here's What is Innocence?

Chapter 1: The First Day of The Rest of Our Lives...

There, down the corridors...Is a figure. A figure he's never seen before in his 7 years in Hogwarts. She had to be new...She had to be new...He knew almost everyone who goes there, so she had to be new...I stood outside the train compartment and looked through the it's window, staring at this girl, who looks scared and timid. She looked between the ages of 13-16. She looked so beautiful and delicate. She looked...so innocent.

There I stood, tall, skinny, dark haired, brown eyed, pale skinned, and my presence had an emo styling in it. I continued to stare at this mysterious beauty, fair skinned, curly-brown haired, dark eyes that were filled with questions, and curvy figured. She glanced at the compartment window and grew more scared when she saw me. I became hot and didn't know what to do, so I just ran into the compartment, across from hers, and shut the door. She looked at me, strangely for awhile, then went back to what she was originally doing, staring at the floor...

"HEY! dude, how was your summer?"

I looked up and saw my best mate, Charlie, enter the compartment, excitedly. "Hey, Charlie. Mine was okay, I guess."

"Mine was awesome!" he shouted. "I went to the Caribbean and Paris and-

I couldn't stop staring at the girl from across the hallway. Who is she? Where did she come from?..."Charlie, that's really interesting about how you wrestled a mummy at Egypt," I said, cutting him off. "But do you know who's that girl, in that compartment?" I pointed at where, and who, I was referring to and Charlie looked at that direction. He nodded with amazement and sat down.

"Her name is Ofelia Swanne...She's 15 years old, transferred here from Beauxbatons, and she's half American, half French." How does he know this stuff?...I'll never know?..."Everyone's talking about Ofelia and why she transferred: Some say she was expelled from Beauxbatons. Others say she came here because she couldn't stand the life of going to a school full of rich kids and decided to come here, to lead a normal life."

I looked at her again and saw a guy was in there with her. I didn't get a good look of the other guy because, throughout the train ride to Hogwarts, I was too distracted by the innocent and mysterious Ofelia.


More will be posted soon!
-Wednesday

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